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It’s really good I hope the author continues it. I will absolutely drop this to a one star rating if this gets dropped
I love HOTD fanfics so this is much appreciated. Good lemons, though they could be better. You should look at other lemons as an example to make better scenes. I hope you don’t drop this. Thank you. 🫵🔥
I personally don't like it. it isn't bad in any way. it's just just got too much cringe for my liking. the emperor eyes and zone are fine on their own. but the "dark mc" bit. the "blindfold" and the weapon of choice are just cringy.
great story build up mc is to powerful if the zombies don't mutate overtime I hope you don't drop this you started the story wonderfully wish you good luck and being healthy ✌️😁👍
Initial Evaluation: Great Potential. (Ch.6) Lessen the info dump a bit (I know it helps you add words to it but too much of it will lessen readers enthusiasm).
# 1 Author, you write a story in English and aimed at a non-Asian audience. So it is an obligation to stick only to the English language, and not write words in other languages, for example you do NOT have to use the words bento, sensei, chan, san, kun, sama, itadakimas, onii... # 2 The main character man is "Edgy" (google: edgy urban dictionary), in addition to being OP and feminine in appearance, MC is femboy. It's not bad to have a protagonist with superpowers, the problem is that the writing style and the powers made the story boring and bland from the beginning.
Shameless Author here. Don’t mind me. If you want to read HOTD then read this. I’m not the best so if you have tipa please let me know.👍
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It’s really good I hope the author continues it. I will absolutely drop this to a one star rating if this gets dropped
I love HOTD fanfics so this is much appreciated. Good lemons, though they could be better. You should look at other lemons as an example to make better scenes. I hope you don’t drop this. Thank you. 🫵🔥
I personally don't like it. it isn't bad in any way. it's just just got too much cringe for my liking. the emperor eyes and zone are fine on their own. but the "dark mc" bit. the "blindfold" and the weapon of choice are just cringy.
great story build up mc is to powerful if the zombies don't mutate overtime I hope you don't drop this you started the story wonderfully wish you good luck and being healthy ✌️😁👍
Initial Evaluation: Great Potential. (Ch.6) Lessen the info dump a bit (I know it helps you add words to it but too much of it will lessen readers enthusiasm).
# 1 Author, you write a story in English and aimed at a non-Asian audience. So it is an obligation to stick only to the English language, and not write words in other languages, for example you do NOT have to use the words bento, sensei, chan, san, kun, sama, itadakimas, onii... # 2 The main character man is "Edgy" (google: edgy urban dictionary), in addition to being OP and feminine in appearance, MC is femboy. It's not bad to have a protagonist with superpowers, the problem is that the writing style and the powers made the story boring and bland from the beginning.
Shameless Author here. Don’t mind me. If you want to read HOTD then read this. I’m not the best so if you have tipa please let me know.👍