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The author is quite literally telling a story. With this i mean he relies too much on telling instead of showing. It is one of the worst cases of 'telling-not-showing' I've seen in this site. At least when it comes to grammar things are good enough. But the style is the worst. About the story. MC is an observer of the main plot. He becomes OP quickly and decides to take a backseat role to the events of the manga. It's bland and kinda boring but at least it's something I've never seen before in a fanfic. This is for those who get mad at authors for completely changing the original plot. This author instead barely changes anything. Dialogues are cliche and cringy but there is some personality to the main character and the other characters. Only a tiny bit. But at least they're not complete robots. This is something you read when you don't have absolutely anything better to do. Like most stories in this website. I wouldn't say it is the worst thing I've read here, though. It is middle of the pack. Not the worst but not among the good ones.
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Soooo this is easily one of the best reads, I have ever read, writing quality is top notch, the characters feel alive, pacing is glorious, world backround… it’s one piece, one chapter a day. Overall good job
The best one FF about One Piece i want more plz !!!........................................................................................................
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If I’m being quite honest this is one of the best one piece stories I have read and I read a lot. The author has a way with comedy I rarely see. The plot has great depth large variety and again plenty of comedy. This is a story any one piece fan would love. The MC of this story fits so well into the one piece vers that it is staggering.
Фф про дебила. Человек который полагается на других=мёртвый человек. Сама личность Мс меня просто бесит. Да и решение автора глупы. .....................................................................................................................................
I like this kinda novel even tho its following cannon but still good comedy so please author dont drop this FF will suport u with my powerrrrr
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I like the mc’s personality. He’s like a mix of Deadpool and Tobi. Overall I would like to change some things like the way he used his DF, cuz for some reason the author made him strong yet he didn’t want him to get TOO OP skills from his DF…. Bruhhhhh the Mc can do soooo much with just being a Air Human. If he awakens it no one will now the limit of the DF if he just used his ‘imagination’.
there are many inconsistencies that for the most part are to force the plot, to begin with he ate a logia, judge couldn't even use haki with his lodge he was almost invincible where he was, it's fine that it would be, the author finds it anticlimactic to kill judge but It wouldn't be so bad either, maybe she could take care of germa 66 with the help of her mother and even without the birth of sanji she could join the mugiwara and be a nanny which I guess was the goal of the fanfic, it would have been much better than this trashy development
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The story is good, MC is bit a Manipulative and NO Haram . .. .. .. .. . .. .. .. . .... ... .... ... ... .. .. .. .. .... .. ... .. .. .. .
very good, but this being canonical, I particularly like the divergences, but for first readers of one piece ff I highly recommend it, excellent writing and fluid and very funny too, I will keep an eye on future works by this author.
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honestly to me it feels like you capture every character personality real well and also your fanfic is amazing don't ever drop please ps your novel has spoiled me like no other
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While the novel quality is good the story is bland as mc let the thing play as they should be in anime.I mean he could kill his father easily.(carbon monoxide kn sleep).he didnot develop air air fruit to full potential.like hydrogen and oxygen blast.or plasma.sound attack .or vaccum.
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bad mood? read this. want a good book to read? read this. wanna have an amazing time? read this. love the humour. best op ff I've read in a while
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im loving your novel even if i wish there were more chapters always a suc.ker for good one piece fics ......................................
the beginning takes a bit of time and the concept of guardian angel seems more to be taken on a whim by the MC but as soon as the MC has a minimum of freedom it becomes one of the most stupidly brilliant fanfiction on this site (according to my own reading of course) bars of non-stop laughter, jokes that are renewed and well-dosed rehearsal comics with the added bonus of well-hidden character development set up
The author is quite literally telling a story. With this i mean he relies too much on telling instead of showing. It is one of the worst cases of 'telling-not-showing' I've seen in this site. At least when it comes to grammar things are good enough. But the style is the worst. About the story. MC is an observer of the main plot. He becomes OP quickly and decides to take a backseat role to the events of the manga. It's bland and kinda boring but at least it's something I've never seen before in a fanfic. This is for those who get mad at authors for completely changing the original plot. This author instead barely changes anything. Dialogues are cliche and cringy but there is some personality to the main character and the other characters. Only a tiny bit. But at least they're not complete robots. This is something you read when you don't have absolutely anything better to do. Like most stories in this website. I wouldn't say it is the worst thing I've read here, though. It is middle of the pack. Not the worst but not among the good ones.
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Soooo this is easily one of the best reads, I have ever read, writing quality is top notch, the characters feel alive, pacing is glorious, world backround… it’s one piece, one chapter a day. Overall good job
The best one FF about One Piece i want more plz !!!........................................................................................................
Well that's it. ......,,......,.,.,.,.,.,..,.......,,......,.,.,.,.,.,..,.......,,......,.,.,.,.,.,..,.......,,......,.,.,.,.,.,..,.......,,......,.,.,.,.,.,..,.......,,......,.,.,.,.,.,..,
If I’m being quite honest this is one of the best one piece stories I have read and I read a lot. The author has a way with comedy I rarely see. The plot has great depth large variety and again plenty of comedy. This is a story any one piece fan would love. The MC of this story fits so well into the one piece vers that it is staggering.
Фф про дебила. Человек который полагается на других=мёртвый человек. Сама личность Мс меня просто бесит. Да и решение автора глупы. .....................................................................................................................................
I like this kinda novel even tho its following cannon but still good comedy so please author dont drop this FF will suport u with my powerrrrr
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I like the mc’s personality. He’s like a mix of Deadpool and Tobi. Overall I would like to change some things like the way he used his DF, cuz for some reason the author made him strong yet he didn’t want him to get TOO OP skills from his DF…. Bruhhhhh the Mc can do soooo much with just being a Air Human. If he awakens it no one will now the limit of the DF if he just used his ‘imagination’.
there are many inconsistencies that for the most part are to force the plot, to begin with he ate a logia, judge couldn't even use haki with his lodge he was almost invincible where he was, it's fine that it would be, the author finds it anticlimactic to kill judge but It wouldn't be so bad either, maybe she could take care of germa 66 with the help of her mother and even without the birth of sanji she could join the mugiwara and be a nanny which I guess was the goal of the fanfic, it would have been much better than this trashy development
Membuka SPOILER The story is good, MC is bit a Manipulative and NO Haram . .. .. .. .. . .. .. .. . .... ... .... ... ... .. .. .. .. .... .. ... .. .. .. .
very good, but this being canonical, I particularly like the divergences, but for first readers of one piece ff I highly recommend it, excellent writing and fluid and very funny too, I will keep an eye on future works by this author.
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honestly to me it feels like you capture every character personality real well and also your fanfic is amazing don't ever drop please ps your novel has spoiled me like no other
I love this one piece fan fiction llllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll
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While the novel quality is good the story is bland as mc let the thing play as they should be in anime.I mean he could kill his father easily.(carbon monoxide kn sleep).he didnot develop air air fruit to full potential.like hydrogen and oxygen blast.or plasma.sound attack .or vaccum.
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bad mood? read this. want a good book to read? read this. wanna have an amazing time? read this. love the humour. best op ff I've read in a while
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Love what you doing with this fic. quite good. please don't ruin it [img=fp] . I WANT MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE
im loving your novel even if i wish there were more chapters always a suc.ker for good one piece fics ......................................
the beginning takes a bit of time and the concept of guardian angel seems more to be taken on a whim by the MC but as soon as the MC has a minimum of freedom it becomes one of the most stupidly brilliant fanfiction on this site (according to my own reading of course) bars of non-stop laughter, jokes that are renewed and well-dosed rehearsal comics with the added bonus of well-hidden character development set up