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One of the best game stories in webnovel that gives me the SAO vibe. It was beautifully written with several layers of mystery that made me keep guessing and ask for more. It's written by a talented young author who really did her best to write, find an editor, commission cover, etc. Let's support this author and hope for the best. Well Done Author
A fresh take on an overly explored VRMMO genre . Very little information about the world as of now , but I'm sure that it will be very interesting . ( Review at chapter 17 ) Positives : 1) Solid grammar 2) Interesting world premise 3) No dumb clichès Hopefully the author shifts gears and zooms into a super story 😄😄
even though it looks completed it is not and he’s also still charging coins for something that is not completed and currently paused on production to do another book what are you could’ve just continued the bookies currently writing
Is a pretty good read up to 170 the only complaint I have is that some of the events in the story are really confusing to the point where the story is not really clear, also the power of his brother is unreasonable if he was just number one that would have been enough.
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Stopped reading around Chp 165 This book is pretty interesting. I was actually hooked for a little bit but there are some cons that really disrupt the experience for me. The main thing is that the mysteries are a bit exasperating. The mysteries keep building at the worst times; some people may not mind this but i find it a bit annoying because it interupts my understanding of the MC and his emotions or gives me the impression that hes overly emotional or weak willed. Most of the time when the weird random stuff happen, he doesnt give it too much thought or tries to analyze things intricately. Personally, i just felt he could do a lot more. Overall, your story premise is very good and entertaining. Ive been enjoying the story so far. One thing i would like to add to improve the story is to make the MC more focused, analytical, relentless and less clueless in finding out what really happened to his brother. Lastly, you should tone down the mystery and randomness of the events or increase the time interval between them. We need more of the MMORPG feel and less of the Murder mystery feel.
Of writing this I'm at chapter 110 so far I'm enjoying the series but there's a few problems with the book. For starters is it's hard to tell if they really playing a game, people don't say the right things and finally their isn't a base of the game to give us a idea what is and what isn't capable
Is it harem or no? B--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------->
I read all the way up to when the chapters started to get locked and then a couple more with the passes. It's a very good story and I would recommend it, but sadly I refuse to give money to webnovel. If the Author had a Patreon and I could read the chapters that way I would do it but sadly not.
I was really liking the story until the love interest lost her memories and then the MC gets NTR'ed since she does not remember him. This is not necessary for the rest of the story, there were already enough mysteries to unravel on top of the game content, but the author had to add in this terrible trope
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Congratulations and keep up the good work, I always support you. The novel game this time is cool, it feels like we are playing the game ourselves, continue. level up.
I've never read a game novel before. But after finding this jewel, i can say the plot is very intriguing with interesting character. Hiro is the first MC in male lead story that i liked!
So far so good. The protagonist reminds me of the classic mc manga and anime. I want to see how the protagonist develops further. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I'm not usually a fan of game-themed, stories, but... At first, I thought that Hiro (the MC) was an annoying entitled brat, but I found that's not the case. Rather, after I noticed why he was like that in the beginning, I sympathized with him a little. Futher into the story, I actually found Hiro to be rather cool and lovable at the same time. It feels weird to use those two different words to describe one person, but that's just how it is. Thank everything holy the MC doesn't have a 1D personality. The story development is solid. Not too fast, but not too slow and dragged out either. The world background is built at a nice pace instead of just thrown at the readers with a bunch of info dump, which is something I really appreciate. All in all, a fun read to pass time! If you're looking for a fun, light read, try this story out!
The story has been fantastic so far. I like the direction and speed of the actual plot. Definitely recommend this to all readers... But need more chapters author-san~
very good novel. well written. definetly a must read. very much recommended. Author we need more chapters, more chapters, more chapters.thank you
I like this fiction so far. It's solid. Character development is decent, story development is decent. I really think that this is a good foundation for continuing forward. Importantly, the main character stands out as vibrant and interesting. First, the narrative is ok. It follows a straight line of progress and in the first 10k written it did not deviate. Second, since it is a system-based world, expect the blue window and a lot of notification. I am looking forward to how the story pans out.
WORTH TO ADD! I give five stars for this story because this story deserves it. At the beginning of the story, Hiro appears as an annoying little brother and I hate him but I also like him 😭 The author managed to make the characters very well that's why i like this story. I also really like the world background, reminds me of Sao, by Reki Kawahara. love it 100%
I rarely enjoy reading Game / System' novel. But this story' is an exception for me. It's beautifully writen, fast paced but not too fast, and the flow is balanced. I really enjoyed it. good job author, keep the good work!
Interesting start, very well done! Can't wait to read more chapters, keep up the very good work and all the very best for WSA 2022 hope you do well :)
This one give me fresh vibe to Gaming genre. Written beautifully with interesting plot and lot mysteries Yeah, but anyway! I need more Hiro x Liberty, she is just soo Cute!
I read the early chapters of this novel a month ago and immediately drawn in. The premise is very promising as it explores humans desire for a second chance after life for their loved ones and themselves. I am so happy Sabet has finally published the story here on Webnovel. I can't wait to keep reading more. Writing quality = 5 stars. For a newbie author, this is very impressive. Story development = 5 stars so far. I've read all available chapters and really like how it's progressing. We get information on the game slowly but in a good pace with enough mystery to keep us guessing. Good flow and pacing. Character design = 5 stars for now. Only saw a few characters so far but they are well thought lot and relatable. Updating stability = 5 stars. One chapter per day now, though I predict it's going to be more once the book is contracted. World background = solid five stars for the one I've seen so far. Can't wait to read more.
This novel has a good plot development and every chara is pretty interesting. It is easy to read and catch up to, so refreshing; nice to fill the free time. But one thing that misses in this novel... why u didn't put a "comedy" tag, author? I laugh several times srsly hahaha LIBE IS SO CUTE AND HER ACTION TO HIRO KILLS ME 🤣🤣
Hi! I am the author of this novel. Firstly, I really want to scream because I am so excited to finally released this novel! Yeay! *Hand Clapping for myself*. My name is Sabet, I am a female author who loves to play online game (too much). So that will be the main reason why I want to write a Game Novel, and boom! here we got LAST SHELTER ONLINE. My nationality is Indonesia, but currently I am active as a college student in number one Engineering Campus in Thailand. Yes, I got scholarship! But sadly, I can not graduate on time due to COVID-19 pandemic. And the bad news is, my scholarship will be run out soon. So I need to work hard to pay my study and my life in abroad (I can feel the MC here). I wish that my novel can be loved and enjoyed by everyone, I wish that I can win this biggest competition of WSA 2022. In order to do that, your support is very important to me. Best Wishes, Sabet_Saga.
One of the best game stories in webnovel that gives me the SAO vibe. It was beautifully written with several layers of mystery that made me keep guessing and ask for more. It's written by a talented young author who really did her best to write, find an editor, commission cover, etc. Let's support this author and hope for the best. Well Done Author
A fresh take on an overly explored VRMMO genre . Very little information about the world as of now , but I'm sure that it will be very interesting . ( Review at chapter 17 ) Positives : 1) Solid grammar 2) Interesting world premise 3) No dumb clichès Hopefully the author shifts gears and zooms into a super story 😄😄
even though it looks completed it is not and he’s also still charging coins for something that is not completed and currently paused on production to do another book what are you could’ve just continued the bookies currently writing
Is a pretty good read up to 170 the only complaint I have is that some of the events in the story are really confusing to the point where the story is not really clear, also the power of his brother is unreasonable if he was just number one that would have been enough.
Membuka SPOILER Stopped reading around Chp 165 This book is pretty interesting. I was actually hooked for a little bit but there are some cons that really disrupt the experience for me. The main thing is that the mysteries are a bit exasperating. The mysteries keep building at the worst times; some people may not mind this but i find it a bit annoying because it interupts my understanding of the MC and his emotions or gives me the impression that hes overly emotional or weak willed. Most of the time when the weird random stuff happen, he doesnt give it too much thought or tries to analyze things intricately. Personally, i just felt he could do a lot more. Overall, your story premise is very good and entertaining. Ive been enjoying the story so far. One thing i would like to add to improve the story is to make the MC more focused, analytical, relentless and less clueless in finding out what really happened to his brother. Lastly, you should tone down the mystery and randomness of the events or increase the time interval between them. We need more of the MMORPG feel and less of the Murder mystery feel.
Of writing this I'm at chapter 110 so far I'm enjoying the series but there's a few problems with the book. For starters is it's hard to tell if they really playing a game, people don't say the right things and finally their isn't a base of the game to give us a idea what is and what isn't capable
Is it harem or no? B--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------->
I read all the way up to when the chapters started to get locked and then a couple more with the passes. It's a very good story and I would recommend it, but sadly I refuse to give money to webnovel. If the Author had a Patreon and I could read the chapters that way I would do it but sadly not.
I was really liking the story until the love interest lost her memories and then the MC gets NTR'ed since she does not remember him. This is not necessary for the rest of the story, there were already enough mysteries to unravel on top of the game content, but the author had to add in this terrible trope
Membuka SPOILER Congratulations and keep up the good work, I always support you. The novel game this time is cool, it feels like we are playing the game ourselves, continue. level up.
I've never read a game novel before. But after finding this jewel, i can say the plot is very intriguing with interesting character. Hiro is the first MC in male lead story that i liked!
So far so good. The protagonist reminds me of the classic mc manga and anime. I want to see how the protagonist develops further. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I'm not usually a fan of game-themed, stories, but... At first, I thought that Hiro (the MC) was an annoying entitled brat, but I found that's not the case. Rather, after I noticed why he was like that in the beginning, I sympathized with him a little. Futher into the story, I actually found Hiro to be rather cool and lovable at the same time. It feels weird to use those two different words to describe one person, but that's just how it is. Thank everything holy the MC doesn't have a 1D personality. The story development is solid. Not too fast, but not too slow and dragged out either. The world background is built at a nice pace instead of just thrown at the readers with a bunch of info dump, which is something I really appreciate. All in all, a fun read to pass time! If you're looking for a fun, light read, try this story out!
The story has been fantastic so far. I like the direction and speed of the actual plot. Definitely recommend this to all readers... But need more chapters author-san~
very good novel. well written. definetly a must read. very much recommended. Author we need more chapters, more chapters, more chapters.thank you
I like this fiction so far. It's solid. Character development is decent, story development is decent. I really think that this is a good foundation for continuing forward. Importantly, the main character stands out as vibrant and interesting. First, the narrative is ok. It follows a straight line of progress and in the first 10k written it did not deviate. Second, since it is a system-based world, expect the blue window and a lot of notification. I am looking forward to how the story pans out.
WORTH TO ADD! I give five stars for this story because this story deserves it. At the beginning of the story, Hiro appears as an annoying little brother and I hate him but I also like him 😭 The author managed to make the characters very well that's why i like this story. I also really like the world background, reminds me of Sao, by Reki Kawahara. love it 100%
I rarely enjoy reading Game / System' novel. But this story' is an exception for me. It's beautifully writen, fast paced but not too fast, and the flow is balanced. I really enjoyed it. good job author, keep the good work!
Interesting start, very well done! Can't wait to read more chapters, keep up the very good work and all the very best for WSA 2022 hope you do well :)
This one give me fresh vibe to Gaming genre. Written beautifully with interesting plot and lot mysteries Yeah, but anyway! I need more Hiro x Liberty, she is just soo Cute!
I read the early chapters of this novel a month ago and immediately drawn in. The premise is very promising as it explores humans desire for a second chance after life for their loved ones and themselves. I am so happy Sabet has finally published the story here on Webnovel. I can't wait to keep reading more. Writing quality = 5 stars. For a newbie author, this is very impressive. Story development = 5 stars so far. I've read all available chapters and really like how it's progressing. We get information on the game slowly but in a good pace with enough mystery to keep us guessing. Good flow and pacing. Character design = 5 stars for now. Only saw a few characters so far but they are well thought lot and relatable. Updating stability = 5 stars. One chapter per day now, though I predict it's going to be more once the book is contracted. World background = solid five stars for the one I've seen so far. Can't wait to read more.
This novel has a good plot development and every chara is pretty interesting. It is easy to read and catch up to, so refreshing; nice to fill the free time. But one thing that misses in this novel... why u didn't put a "comedy" tag, author? I laugh several times srsly hahaha LIBE IS SO CUTE AND HER ACTION TO HIRO KILLS ME 🤣🤣
Hi! I am the author of this novel. Firstly, I really want to scream because I am so excited to finally released this novel! Yeay! *Hand Clapping for myself*. My name is Sabet, I am a female author who loves to play online game (too much). So that will be the main reason why I want to write a Game Novel, and boom! here we got LAST SHELTER ONLINE. My nationality is Indonesia, but currently I am active as a college student in number one Engineering Campus in Thailand. Yes, I got scholarship! But sadly, I can not graduate on time due to COVID-19 pandemic. And the bad news is, my scholarship will be run out soon. So I need to work hard to pay my study and my life in abroad (I can feel the MC here). I wish that my novel can be loved and enjoyed by everyone, I wish that I can win this biggest competition of WSA 2022. In order to do that, your support is very important to me. Best Wishes, Sabet_Saga.