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TO THE AUTHOR, 1. Writing quality - 5/5 but can become best. 2. Story Development - Make it more better, also make it to boruto or more than it and in the final arc Battle between Celestial clans(Otsuski's) and Earthlings. 3. Character design - It is good but make him an Grey(Neutral hero type) character, also make MC his own Sage Modes(Make this technique ever evolving with unlimited potential without any side effects as it combines Nature energy, Chakra and Universe Energy) as he himself is the first to master it (Which can be learned by all but very hard to Master it as the level ups the harder it becomes) by combining all Sage modes at present making it permanent in his body appearing only tattos on his body not like glowing or becoming pale like, Make MC his own various justsu's with Yin and Yang - like permanent Ressurection, Immortality technique, other offensive and defensive techinques, etc., other elements too esp., Wood and water style(Convinient for travel by making a stay also helps people and Nature), beyond Grandmaster level in Sealing Techniques especially runes/coding likes, Weaponary, Smithery or more and making him a jack of all trades - Master of all. *Make_Ino, Karin and Hinata_MC wives. *Also Make MC an Organization like the Mixture of both of SPY and HEROS alike by recruiting people's around the world after the War as Countries becomes more co-operative like World Council (Or just Make it). 4. Updating Stability - 1/5, 5. World Background - Make it Light as well as Dark. *Make the chapters long for it's too short to read. THANKS! -READER
Saya buruk dalam menulis review tapi novel ini sangat bagus, tolong dilanjutkan. Salam dari indonesia. ...,............................................................................... ......
very nice! But is there romance? ....... ../././././././.././././/./././././././.././..//././.././/./../././/./.././/./././././././././/./././.
One of the downfalls of reading something back to back is that small, repeated errors end up compounding. In this case, the word 'through' is consistently and annoyingly misspelled as 'trough'! As for the actual work itself, it's not bad. I'm well past the halfway mark of what's available, but it's definitely amongst the best amongst the recent 'Naruto' fics I've tried. Earlier, I'd get caught up with how vaguely sociopathic the MC seemed to be, especially compared to the original MCs, but given the dark starting premise, it makes it's own sense. Maybe I'll have different, more developed thoughts by the time I get to the final chapter here, but regardless, I won't consider it total a waste of time. Updates stability brings down the average as I'm not sure if it even finishes, given the other comments.
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TO THE AUTHOR, 1. Writing quality - 5/5 but can become best. 2. Story Development - Make it more better, also make it to boruto or more than it and in the final arc Battle between Celestial clans(Otsuski's) and Earthlings. 3. Character design - It is good but make him an Grey(Neutral hero type) character, also make MC his own Sage Modes(Make this technique ever evolving with unlimited potential without any side effects as it combines Nature energy, Chakra and Universe Energy) as he himself is the first to master it (Which can be learned by all but very hard to Master it as the level ups the harder it becomes) by combining all Sage modes at present making it permanent in his body appearing only tattos on his body not like glowing or becoming pale like, Make MC his own various justsu's with Yin and Yang - like permanent Ressurection, Immortality technique, other offensive and defensive techinques, etc., other elements too esp., Wood and water style(Convinient for travel by making a stay also helps people and Nature), beyond Grandmaster level in Sealing Techniques especially runes/coding likes, Weaponary, Smithery or more and making him a jack of all trades - Master of all. *Make_Ino, Karin and Hinata_MC wives. *Also Make MC an Organization like the Mixture of both of SPY and HEROS alike by recruiting people's around the world after the War as Countries becomes more co-operative like World Council (Or just Make it). 4. Updating Stability - 1/5, 5. World Background - Make it Light as well as Dark. *Make the chapters long for it's too short to read. THANKS! -READER
Saya buruk dalam menulis review tapi novel ini sangat bagus, tolong dilanjutkan. Salam dari indonesia. ...,............................................................................... ......
very nice! But is there romance? ....... ../././././././.././././/./././././././.././..//././.././/./../././/./.././/./././././././././/./././.
One of the downfalls of reading something back to back is that small, repeated errors end up compounding. In this case, the word 'through' is consistently and annoyingly misspelled as 'trough'! As for the actual work itself, it's not bad. I'm well past the halfway mark of what's available, but it's definitely amongst the best amongst the recent 'Naruto' fics I've tried. Earlier, I'd get caught up with how vaguely sociopathic the MC seemed to be, especially compared to the original MCs, but given the dark starting premise, it makes it's own sense. Maybe I'll have different, more developed thoughts by the time I get to the final chapter here, but regardless, I won't consider it total a waste of time. Updates stability brings down the average as I'm not sure if it even finishes, given the other comments.