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The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
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I really like your Story and i hope you keep writing it, your writing quality is one of the best and your story is captivating. keep it up π
Este es segundo que leo de esta serie y por mucho supera al otro aunque si es una pena que jueguen tanto con los sentimientos del mc digo que sepa superarlos pero los perdona fΓ‘cilmente lastima que se actualice tan poco
An absolute menace you turned the mc into a simp, you give a system that forces someone to do their biddings and make the girls a yandere, I'd you want a harem that much in your story please do it right it makes my blood boil with it, especially being force by the system lol ( just my opinion as a reader)
I need more, just read all the chapters that are out and my god π it really pulled me into the world. do a patreon or something I just need more of this.
The novel is great. This is my assessment of the novel. But Yandere, you put yourself in a corner, and you have to choose one of the two girls and the other girl dies. I want to see how you get yourself out of the corner. I know you can get out of the corner easily, but you will spoil the novel and don't get me wrong I wish the two girls escape from death but in a smart way (I really want to give you a punch in the face you made me torn between the two and I want him to get both together, you made Their personalities interesting . I'm afraid of the third that comes in the way.β Now to the big problem, please do an update? Don't leave us hanging
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The story isn't that bad actually, it's just frustrating. The mc placed himself in a tough spot and thinks like a teenager. The "love interests" are also portrayed as teenagers that are stupid, BUT, I have to agree that the story is good, but it follows plot a little too much, at least until chapter 27 (wich is where I'm currently at). I don't suggest reading the comment's, since most of them are kids that wish for a steady and predictable plot and don't understand the character development the mc and other are going through. Basically, a good story, it follows plot until ch 27 at least, it has good character development and I actually like how it's starting to separate from canon, I mean that in chapter 27 some things happen that drift the story from canon, and I actually hope it doesnt follow canon. It has a lot of potential.
The story isnβt a 5 star but I mean I like it and i enjoyed reading it granted I think this thing with Erica is messed up because it seems like heβs just gonna do what Allison and Lydia are doing to him to her.
I like this story a lot, however the systems quests are horrible. They are basically forced 80% of the time ----------------------------------------------------------
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Except for the update stability, i like everything about this novel...[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend]
the two unpleasant girls who had a partner became yanderes because of the mc thanks to the system just for talking to Erica, it couldn't be more forced, if you want to read it that's fine but I quit
Give Erica a high human potion and try to let Lydia and Alison down by saying he loves them as friends. Because love doesnβt always mean girlfriend and the system never said what kind of love. This will give him a one up on the system by finding a loop hole hope this helps love your stories.
Everything was beautiful, and beautiful almost perfect if it weren't for the time required to update but it was bearable pity that chapter 27 gave a definitive ending to the story because of its author who decided to force the plot of the MC simply an instant death for her story that will be forgotten like the hundreds of stories of the webnovel Like another failure of the bunch, Teen wolf still without a good fanfic story I just hope that the Wizard of teen wolf doesn't screw it up as the Invecil author of this story
it's the first fanfic I have ever read where the system is alright but the MC is useless. the MC is totally beta and runs around female characters he runs after Alison who never had romantic interest in him so ends up losing her then runs towards Lydia but that doesn't work either so he now runs to Erica like desperate teen on hormones
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I don't give a **** what people say , this book is great ..................πππππππππππΏππππππΏπππππππππππππππππππ
author has a ntr fetish! BEWARE OF THE CUCKLORD!BEWARE OF THE CUCKLORD!BEWARE OF THE CUCKLORD!BEWARE OF THE CUCKLORD!BEWARE OF THE CUCKLORD!BEWARE OF THE CUCK LORD!
I really hate MC , he is just a dumb rag Ggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
Allison Argent and Lydia Martin as the MC Love is okay but I think it's better to leave Allison x Scott because it was necessary in the series, that goes for Lydia x Stiles because he has always been in love with her since the beginning. Malia Tate x MC would be good because she broke up with Stiles in order to protect him from her mother. I don't know if they got back together but they just don't really suit with each other. Malia was a wild coyote, abrasive, spunky, quick to violence, sarcastic and has a tendency to be blunt and speak her mind while Stiles is sarcastic, funny and outspoken but was still very in love with Lydia. it was fun while it last but doesn't seem that it'll be a long term relationship. Scott and Malia ended up together but I seriously don't want that to happen since the series makes it look like the MC Scott always ends up dating one of his friends like Allison and Kira. It's like the MC always chase after the girls in his pack, As an MC HE MUST DATE A GIRL FROM ONE OF HIS FRIENDS? I mean come on he could have dated another girl who isn't even in his group. I get the supernatural and all but he could have a hidden relationship for all I know... anyway, back to the MC x Malia Tate because of his personality, he could helped Malia better than Scott could... Don't ask me why cuz they just look cute together, Lydia and Allison leaving them as a friend is bette
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My opinion so far. For me it was already cool to read about this universe. Then came the presentation of characters and so far so good, but when it arrived in the system... just too bad, it doesn't even make sense.It only serves to make (oblige) the protagonists to take certain actions and interact with the original characters.Plus there isn't a decent explanation as to why he has this system beyond convenient. Then came all this unpleasant drama (which hopefully ended up in this chapter 26) which degraded the story a lot in my opinion, which took away a lot of my initial enthusiasm
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
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I really like your Story and i hope you keep writing it, your writing quality is one of the best and your story is captivating. keep it up π
Este es segundo que leo de esta serie y por mucho supera al otro aunque si es una pena que jueguen tanto con los sentimientos del mc digo que sepa superarlos pero los perdona fΓ‘cilmente lastima que se actualice tan poco
An absolute menace you turned the mc into a simp, you give a system that forces someone to do their biddings and make the girls a yandere, I'd you want a harem that much in your story please do it right it makes my blood boil with it, especially being force by the system lol ( just my opinion as a reader)
I need more, just read all the chapters that are out and my god π it really pulled me into the world. do a patreon or something I just need more of this.
The novel is great. This is my assessment of the novel. But Yandere, you put yourself in a corner, and you have to choose one of the two girls and the other girl dies. I want to see how you get yourself out of the corner. I know you can get out of the corner easily, but you will spoil the novel and don't get me wrong I wish the two girls escape from death but in a smart way (I really want to give you a punch in the face you made me torn between the two and I want him to get both together, you made Their personalities interesting . I'm afraid of the third that comes in the way.β Now to the big problem, please do an update? Don't leave us hanging
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The story isn't that bad actually, it's just frustrating. The mc placed himself in a tough spot and thinks like a teenager. The "love interests" are also portrayed as teenagers that are stupid, BUT, I have to agree that the story is good, but it follows plot a little too much, at least until chapter 27 (wich is where I'm currently at). I don't suggest reading the comment's, since most of them are kids that wish for a steady and predictable plot and don't understand the character development the mc and other are going through. Basically, a good story, it follows plot until ch 27 at least, it has good character development and I actually like how it's starting to separate from canon, I mean that in chapter 27 some things happen that drift the story from canon, and I actually hope it doesnt follow canon. It has a lot of potential.
The story isnβt a 5 star but I mean I like it and i enjoyed reading it granted I think this thing with Erica is messed up because it seems like heβs just gonna do what Allison and Lydia are doing to him to her.
I like this story a lot, however the systems quests are horrible. They are basically forced 80% of the time ----------------------------------------------------------
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Except for the update stability, i like everything about this novel...[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend]
the two unpleasant girls who had a partner became yanderes because of the mc thanks to the system just for talking to Erica, it couldn't be more forced, if you want to read it that's fine but I quit
Give Erica a high human potion and try to let Lydia and Alison down by saying he loves them as friends. Because love doesnβt always mean girlfriend and the system never said what kind of love. This will give him a one up on the system by finding a loop hole hope this helps love your stories.
Everything was beautiful, and beautiful almost perfect if it weren't for the time required to update but it was bearable pity that chapter 27 gave a definitive ending to the story because of its author who decided to force the plot of the MC simply an instant death for her story that will be forgotten like the hundreds of stories of the webnovel Like another failure of the bunch, Teen wolf still without a good fanfic story I just hope that the Wizard of teen wolf doesn't screw it up as the Invecil author of this story
it's the first fanfic I have ever read where the system is alright but the MC is useless. the MC is totally beta and runs around female characters he runs after Alison who never had romantic interest in him so ends up losing her then runs towards Lydia but that doesn't work either so he now runs to Erica like desperate teen on hormones
ΠΡΠ° ΠΊΠ½ΠΈΠ³Π° Π²Π΅Π»ΠΈΠΊΠΎΠ»Π΅ΠΏΠ½Π°.πππππππππππΏππππππΏππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππΏππππππΏπππππππππππππππππππ
I don't give a **** what people say , this book is great ..................πππππππππππΏππππππΏπππππππππππππππππππ
author has a ntr fetish! BEWARE OF THE CUCKLORD!BEWARE OF THE CUCKLORD!BEWARE OF THE CUCKLORD!BEWARE OF THE CUCKLORD!BEWARE OF THE CUCKLORD!BEWARE OF THE CUCK LORD!
I really hate MC , he is just a dumb rag Ggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
Allison Argent and Lydia Martin as the MC Love is okay but I think it's better to leave Allison x Scott because it was necessary in the series, that goes for Lydia x Stiles because he has always been in love with her since the beginning. Malia Tate x MC would be good because she broke up with Stiles in order to protect him from her mother. I don't know if they got back together but they just don't really suit with each other. Malia was a wild coyote, abrasive, spunky, quick to violence, sarcastic and has a tendency to be blunt and speak her mind while Stiles is sarcastic, funny and outspoken but was still very in love with Lydia. it was fun while it last but doesn't seem that it'll be a long term relationship. Scott and Malia ended up together but I seriously don't want that to happen since the series makes it look like the MC Scott always ends up dating one of his friends like Allison and Kira. It's like the MC always chase after the girls in his pack, As an MC HE MUST DATE A GIRL FROM ONE OF HIS FRIENDS? I mean come on he could have dated another girl who isn't even in his group. I get the supernatural and all but he could have a hidden relationship for all I know... anyway, back to the MC x Malia Tate because of his personality, he could helped Malia better than Scott could... Don't ask me why cuz they just look cute together, Lydia and Allison leaving them as a friend is bette
Foi muito bom eu gostei muito boa Foi muito bom eu gostei muito boa Foi muito bom eu gostei muito boa Foi muito bom eu gostei muito boa Foi muito bom eu gostei muito boa
My opinion so far. For me it was already cool to read about this universe. Then came the presentation of characters and so far so good, but when it arrived in the system... just too bad, it doesn't even make sense.It only serves to make (oblige) the protagonists to take certain actions and interact with the original characters.Plus there isn't a decent explanation as to why he has this system beyond convenient. Then came all this unpleasant drama (which hopefully ended up in this chapter 26) which degraded the story a lot in my opinion, which took away a lot of my initial enthusiasm
Thought it was really good. Too bad author dropped