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The first arc started with no introduction, then you'll find that MC is a slave and in MJ around ch 3. It also doesn't help the story with or without the first 15 chapters, it will just bore readers. There's a reason why Oda only reserve 1-3 panels of flashback towards these details. The story is also meh, fanfics with OC MCs that follows the OG MC are mostly rehash. This is just worse.
Honestly I wasn’t going to write anything initially, but this story is too goated for me not to. The growth of 13 & his mental struggles and the observation that Luffy an Zoro makes are all so great. Using Namis base character design and building a entire personality I honestly believe she would have? Breathtaking. Can’t wait for the mext update.
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this story is extremely fun to ready it's one of the best I have ever read so please don't drop this book it would be a real shame. please don't drop
I have read all the chapters so I'm here to say a few things. I like the fact that the MC is a Mink and there seems to be a mystery behind his parents etc. I like the goal of the MC (Kill all the World Nobles), it can add a lot of original events into the story, like being targeted more often etc. The MC joins the straw hats which is fine if the MC being there actually changes how original events play out. The only part of the story I'm not a fan of is the double personality, not that it's bad or anything but It's just not my thing. I would just rather have the MC keep his normal personality, anti-social but tries to learn to be normal like everyone else. Anyway, I hope you eill continue this story!
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i like it very much, havent read anything this fun in a while. I need more! Also is this a harem or no? I dont like harem.
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It's a great story.. I like how you build the mc.. making him strong with time and hardwork, not only by devil fruit.. i understand if 13 have a split personality.. because his time with celestial dragon, how can he survive without it 😁😁
One of my favorite FFs, There are a few things that I personally have a problem with but Other than that its great.…….….esseeeededssssssssssss
Let me be sincere The double personality is a serious let down for me but… This book, this is personally the only sensible and interesting one piece fanfic ive read without any serious grammar problems
only story development is 1 star for me, after 2nd personality disorder came out it just went downhill for me............................................
Starts out okay, but then just follows the whole "meet Straw Hats and follow the OP plot". Terrible FF, honestly one of your worst yet. If you want to basically re-read One Piece, by all means, go for it. It's basically One Piece from a schizophrenic MC's POV.
Awesome so far. Big improvement from the OG novel. Love thirteen as a character and can imagine him actually being apart of the crew. That's how good a job you've done at integrating him into the one piece world. Just hope that the pairings different from the OG, I was never, and will never really be a fan of a Carrot pairing. Carry on the awesome work, I'll be looking forward to the future of this novel.
A very good and interesting story i cant wait to see what would happen in the future , keep it up author and thanks for a good work 👍🏻
Good story! I’m at chapter 67 now, and really like the story so far. The mc is fleshed out and the character interaction is excellent. The story development is good too. I’m curious how the story wil develop with the mc involvement. Keep up the good work author!
MC X Carrot Sulong Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question
do something about the double personality, at least show he is working towards acceptance or recognition. the whole idea is a cliche that is already in the story, there is no need to write about another.
Writing quality is good, formating is a bit off like dialougue but its not unreadable. Main problems are forced plot points and power scaling. The MC before meeting Luffy is consistently beating the strongest slaves in Mary Geoise and is muscled and very strong. Yet In the next arc he gets tripped by normal people and kicked by Nezumi. He can catch bullets but wood cuts him? Also the insane amount of abuse makes no sense for one peice. He is in East Blue- ShoulD be the strongest by a large margin and is basically a doormat until the plot requires him. As far as i have read it is a rehash of cannon with a useless MC.
I don't know about others but for me this is the best one piece fic available in this app. All the characters have the same personality as it was shown in the Anime. I have read till ch 30 but still didn't find any mistakes. MC is cool. He is not like your typical mc who wants to destroy mankind just because he was enslaved by those nobles. MC is not forgiving either as he is not afraid to kill. I just hope you don't drop this author for your previous work. Plz continue this or put this on hiatus while you are focusing on your other work as this is one of the best fanfic I have read in this platform.
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I really enjoyed this fix withs its writing quality and updates,I just dislike that it follows strawhats. ,.... . ..........................,..................
thanks monkey king, i love all your work and im glad you decide to continue this work . 👍👍👍👍
Glad your back. ..................................................................................................................................................
the novel started really good, but i dont know the Mc maybe is a little to much passive. the biggest problem, he know almost nothing about the world and he didn't even trying to learn.
It’s monkey what else do I have to say he is one of the best writers on the platform dont believe me read some of his other work
Monkey is back King I'll give you my power stones............................................................................................
This is a 5 star for me. The writing quality is great, nice development and character design, its a little dark so some people might not like it but its not too dark to the point its not readable either. the details are not 100 percent accurate but its not really important. although the protagonist joins luffy and the group and some might not like this saying its not original, it's from a new point of view, not an otaku coming to one piece and just following the crew. I liked it so far
Well I don't need to read it, to judge the story. Monkey is a phenomenal writer, a bonafide perfectionist, a man of quality, even if he writes trash(lol) than I'll still read it. Trust me if your a regular here than you know what you'll get, but if you're new than I would suggest you to go and read his other stories, I guarantee it you'll not regret it.
dude this book is lit buh seriously u need to update I haven't seen an update in like 2 yrs I'm still waiting tho hope u updat
The first arc started with no introduction, then you'll find that MC is a slave and in MJ around ch 3. It also doesn't help the story with or without the first 15 chapters, it will just bore readers. There's a reason why Oda only reserve 1-3 panels of flashback towards these details. The story is also meh, fanfics with OC MCs that follows the OG MC are mostly rehash. This is just worse.
Honestly I wasn’t going to write anything initially, but this story is too goated for me not to. The growth of 13 & his mental struggles and the observation that Luffy an Zoro makes are all so great. Using Namis base character design and building a entire personality I honestly believe she would have? Breathtaking. Can’t wait for the mext update.
Membuka SPOILER this story is extremely fun to ready it's one of the best I have ever read so please don't drop this book it would be a real shame. please don't drop
I have read all the chapters so I'm here to say a few things. I like the fact that the MC is a Mink and there seems to be a mystery behind his parents etc. I like the goal of the MC (Kill all the World Nobles), it can add a lot of original events into the story, like being targeted more often etc. The MC joins the straw hats which is fine if the MC being there actually changes how original events play out. The only part of the story I'm not a fan of is the double personality, not that it's bad or anything but It's just not my thing. I would just rather have the MC keep his normal personality, anti-social but tries to learn to be normal like everyone else. Anyway, I hope you eill continue this story!
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i like it very much, havent read anything this fun in a while. I need more! Also is this a harem or no? I dont like harem.
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It's a great story.. I like how you build the mc.. making him strong with time and hardwork, not only by devil fruit.. i understand if 13 have a split personality.. because his time with celestial dragon, how can he survive without it 😁😁
One of my favorite FFs, There are a few things that I personally have a problem with but Other than that its great.…….….esseeeededssssssssssss
Let me be sincere The double personality is a serious let down for me but… This book, this is personally the only sensible and interesting one piece fanfic ive read without any serious grammar problems
only story development is 1 star for me, after 2nd personality disorder came out it just went downhill for me............................................
Starts out okay, but then just follows the whole "meet Straw Hats and follow the OP plot". Terrible FF, honestly one of your worst yet. If you want to basically re-read One Piece, by all means, go for it. It's basically One Piece from a schizophrenic MC's POV.
Awesome so far. Big improvement from the OG novel. Love thirteen as a character and can imagine him actually being apart of the crew. That's how good a job you've done at integrating him into the one piece world. Just hope that the pairings different from the OG, I was never, and will never really be a fan of a Carrot pairing. Carry on the awesome work, I'll be looking forward to the future of this novel.
A very good and interesting story i cant wait to see what would happen in the future , keep it up author and thanks for a good work 👍🏻
Good story! I’m at chapter 67 now, and really like the story so far. The mc is fleshed out and the character interaction is excellent. The story development is good too. I’m curious how the story wil develop with the mc involvement. Keep up the good work author!
MC X Carrot Sulong Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question Question
do something about the double personality, at least show he is working towards acceptance or recognition. the whole idea is a cliche that is already in the story, there is no need to write about another.
Writing quality is good, formating is a bit off like dialougue but its not unreadable. Main problems are forced plot points and power scaling. The MC before meeting Luffy is consistently beating the strongest slaves in Mary Geoise and is muscled and very strong. Yet In the next arc he gets tripped by normal people and kicked by Nezumi. He can catch bullets but wood cuts him? Also the insane amount of abuse makes no sense for one peice. He is in East Blue- ShoulD be the strongest by a large margin and is basically a doormat until the plot requires him. As far as i have read it is a rehash of cannon with a useless MC.
I don't know about others but for me this is the best one piece fic available in this app. All the characters have the same personality as it was shown in the Anime. I have read till ch 30 but still didn't find any mistakes. MC is cool. He is not like your typical mc who wants to destroy mankind just because he was enslaved by those nobles. MC is not forgiving either as he is not afraid to kill. I just hope you don't drop this author for your previous work. Plz continue this or put this on hiatus while you are focusing on your other work as this is one of the best fanfic I have read in this platform.
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I really enjoyed this fix withs its writing quality and updates,I just dislike that it follows strawhats. ,.... . ..........................,..................
thanks monkey king, i love all your work and im glad you decide to continue this work . 👍👍👍👍
Glad your back. ..................................................................................................................................................
the novel started really good, but i dont know the Mc maybe is a little to much passive. the biggest problem, he know almost nothing about the world and he didn't even trying to learn.
It’s monkey what else do I have to say he is one of the best writers on the platform dont believe me read some of his other work
Monkey is back King I'll give you my power stones............................................................................................
This is a 5 star for me. The writing quality is great, nice development and character design, its a little dark so some people might not like it but its not too dark to the point its not readable either. the details are not 100 percent accurate but its not really important. although the protagonist joins luffy and the group and some might not like this saying its not original, it's from a new point of view, not an otaku coming to one piece and just following the crew. I liked it so far
Well I don't need to read it, to judge the story. Monkey is a phenomenal writer, a bonafide perfectionist, a man of quality, even if he writes trash(lol) than I'll still read it. Trust me if your a regular here than you know what you'll get, but if you're new than I would suggest you to go and read his other stories, I guarantee it you'll not regret it.
dude this book is lit buh seriously u need to update I haven't seen an update in like 2 yrs I'm still waiting tho hope u updat