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first reviewer lesss gooo[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I find the writing style(grammaticals, etc.) very good, like what I would get in a bookstore novel good. But i only managed to read to chapter 24/25, before I could not take it anymore and stopped reading. I think, for me, the major problem for this novel is that the show and tell do not go hand in hand. The tell of this novel promises you an awesome MC: old/experienced, wizened/knowledgeable powerhouse. Like Ni Li from Tales of Demons and Gods. The show of this novel delivers you a pubertal idiotic incapable muscle brained teenager. The generic mc template you get in so many online novels nowadays = Nothing special, oversaturated and quite frankly very boring. This is a problem as show ranks higher than tell for a reader and the fact that every time the MC's past "awesome" self is mentioned, it is kept very vague(How old was MC really when he died? etc.) makes it harder and harder to believe what the tell promises you. The author wants to show strongly that being reborn does not equal a smooth live again as you can see from the MC's interaction with his former best friend, how to handle the situation in his city, unexpected situations occur again and again and the MC can only passively react to them, etc. This further undermines what the tell promises the reader and strengthens how incapable, stupid the MC is. At chapter 24 my impression was that the MC being able to solve the events is more due to plotarmor and less the MC's ability. The idea is fine itself for me, but the things the author used were the wrong ones to proof it. Another frustrating point is the MC's illness and non-existent cultivation talent. It is written that the MC can't sprint more than 30 seconds before being out of breath and yet by chapter 24 the MC has fought 4 times personally within the time span of 1 day. If the author had made the MC deal with his illness and non-existent talent in a realistic way like thinking of original, believable solutions, then this setting would have been awesome and perfectly differentiated our MC from Ni Lie and any other generic MC template out there. But what you get instead is a disappointment. It's nothing but a cheap excuse for the author to write otherwise supposed to be easy fights as dangerous, exciting fights with real stakes at risk.
first reviewer lesss gooo[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I find the writing style(grammaticals, etc.) very good, like what I would get in a bookstore novel good. But i only managed to read to chapter 24/25, before I could not take it anymore and stopped reading. I think, for me, the major problem for this novel is that the show and tell do not go hand in hand. The tell of this novel promises you an awesome MC: old/experienced, wizened/knowledgeable powerhouse. Like Ni Li from Tales of Demons and Gods. The show of this novel delivers you a pubertal idiotic incapable muscle brained teenager. The generic mc template you get in so many online novels nowadays = Nothing special, oversaturated and quite frankly very boring. This is a problem as show ranks higher than tell for a reader and the fact that every time the MC's past "awesome" self is mentioned, it is kept very vague(How old was MC really when he died? etc.) makes it harder and harder to believe what the tell promises you. The author wants to show strongly that being reborn does not equal a smooth live again as you can see from the MC's interaction with his former best friend, how to handle the situation in his city, unexpected situations occur again and again and the MC can only passively react to them, etc. This further undermines what the tell promises the reader and strengthens how incapable, stupid the MC is. At chapter 24 my impression was that the MC being able to solve the events is more due to plotarmor and less the MC's ability. The idea is fine itself for me, but the things the author used were the wrong ones to proof it. Another frustrating point is the MC's illness and non-existent cultivation talent. It is written that the MC can't sprint more than 30 seconds before being out of breath and yet by chapter 24 the MC has fought 4 times personally within the time span of 1 day. If the author had made the MC deal with his illness and non-existent talent in a realistic way like thinking of original, believable solutions, then this setting would have been awesome and perfectly differentiated our MC from Ni Lie and any other generic MC template out there. But what you get instead is a disappointment. It's nothing but a cheap excuse for the author to write otherwise supposed to be easy fights as dangerous, exciting fights with real stakes at risk.