My Disciples Are Players.

LV 5

SR_2027

Everything is good until now. Writing quality is good. Almost none grammatical mistakes... Story development is good but hope he just doesn't share his power to his family because they literally threw him away. If that happens and he shares his power to his family saying that his father didn't knew about it or it was his stepmothers fault but she's family, I will literally drop this novel. Hope he doesn't go such way. Character designs is good, but we don't know much about MC's personality and traits but this is just start so nothing can be said about it. But I personally believe that mc is smart but naive... Updating stability good... World background is also good. There are thousands of possibilities for future development of Mc and his sect. =========================== BTW, I have some great ideas for this novel. How about adding many chilché like: a player being reborn, a player which was born in present world of MC but got reincarnated in the new world(from where the players comes), player who can see future, players with their own system, players who have artifacts with great abilities. And our MC can get these power, abilities or artifacts by killing them in game (also dead in real life due to several reasons like electrical cutoff, building collapse or heart attacks...

LV 4

Flaiver

An interesting novel with a very rare story about a sect of players but with magic. There are no complaints about the 4 chapters. Characters react and act realistically with a touch of humor. I have read only one similar novel but there is about cultivators and it is abandoned. I hope for frequent updates and a large number of chapters. And advice to the author if you get tired of writing or run out of ideas to make the last chapter with a skip of time, so what happened and the end of the story (I saw this only in 2-3 stories, which is a pity).

LV 10

Lruska

Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.

LV 1

KRITIK_GASMASK_

Too lazy rn to write a structured review. ..................................................................................................

LV 11

Kurdi123

Sometimes it's stupidly unreasonable and unrealistic. tjtjnsitnitsmi6s6mi6imm6iw6iwmi6mwmu5qmu5qmu5q5umqmu55mumu5q5muqm5 140 words complete

LV 12

Ashton_A

great concept, plot, background, keep up the work. I beg you to never add a love interest to the mc, to one of the players is fine however,.

LV 14

ACE_KinGz

No update ,?? . It's a good story .. Hope u don't drop it .. Hehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehejehehehehehehehejehehejehejejejejejejejejjejejejejejejjejehehejejejehejejjejejejejejejej hehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehejehehehehehehehejehehejehejejejejejejejejjejejejejejejjejehehejejejehejejjejejejejejejej

LV 2

Solo_BiriBiriBiri

4.8 The concept is good (It's not that new but this concept is very rare to see.) The story development is decent. Nothing special is happening yet cause it's still new. For the World Background and Character Design, I think it's still too early to judge on that but I'm hoping to see something new but interesting. Writing Quality, I have a feeling that the author are probably using grammarly which is good. However, sometimes I feel like it's kinda hard to read(?). I think searching for the right synonyms, simplifying the sentence construction, and lessening the use of "," could help. (It might help with the word count too.)

LV 13

Kunnandi

I expect a lot from this novel, and I hope that the author would be willing to listen to his most loyal reader's suggestions. I still have not read the novel yet, but I would soon though I already read a lot of the author's other works, and I can say with the most definite answer that they are good at writing, so I would like to give the benefits of the doubt and rate it five stars.

LV 1

nubasher

Класная книга , хорошое начало , интересный сюжет , жду продолжения!!♡☆♡☆♡☆♡☆♡☆♡☆♡☆♤♧◇◇■□●○♤♧◇■□□○※¤※※♡☆♡☆♡☆☆☆•○●□■◇♧♤◇◇□□○•○□■■♤□□○○□■■♧♤■○•○□■♤♤♤■●•●□■♤♤■◇□○••\■♤♤|

LV 4

SSan1212

It was good while it lasted. It was good while it lasted. It was good while it lasted. It was good while it lasted. It was good while it lasted. It was good while it lasted.

LV 3

Fanfic_Lovers

Sangat luar Sangat luar biasa luar biasa luarSangat luar biasa Sangat luar biasa luar biasaSangat luar Sangat luar biasa luar biasa luarSangat luar biasa Sangat luar biasa luar biasaSangat luar Sangat luar biasa luar biasa luarSangat luar biasa Sangat luar biasa luar biasa

LV 5

Archonstine

This book is extraordinary. Though the credit does go to the author. I have been reading his fanfic which is a must read for MCU fans. The best part about this book is that it obtained the 'hot' label after only 11 chapters.

LV 5

Heavenly_Rain

It’s A good novel with good plot but sometime the characters are somewhat brain dead. It’s understandable since this is the author first original novel.

LV 13

SlothElephant2k18

The story has a good start. Sure there are grammar issues here and there, also some hard to understand lines, but it is still readable. The way the story progress is great. The best part is the story is how the players abu- *Cough* *Cough* Use their immortality as players. So far the story has manage to keep me want to read more chapters. But I don't want to be a jerk who force author to write. Keep up the good work pal! 😁 👍. A little suggestion: I think it will be good if the system also give the players Sign-in reward. Like for the first week since they play, or 10 days.

LV 2

LE_Van_Vinh

ahhhh i miss the game maker novel so much plz update it :<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<

LV 2

IamLadySifofAsgard

[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

LV 4

ShatteredMusic

I came from the fanfic and this book did not dissapoint my expectations. I have notice no holes in the story so far and cant wait to read more

LV 2

Nirio

good.......................................................................................................................................good!

LV 4

drk123x_

keep pumping some chapter we need more. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . .. . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . .. . .. .. . . . . ..