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Жду продолжение, произведение интересное и необычное. Возможно то что вы сделали будет новым жанром фанфиков. Так что я очень жду продолжение этого произведения.
Noice. 🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🥭🥭🥭🥭🥭🥭🥭
Very good story. Plot, grammar, language - all is good. I hope for updates. If author has patreon/paypal/koffe or something, I am willing to donate
This is the reason i don’t read fan-fic’s that don’t have 20 plus chapters most don’t make to 20
It was GOOD until like most fanfic cultivation novels they stop updating :( it is sad to see it happen every time unable to reach enlightenment
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Great start and has good direction. Very unique to others I have read of the same fan-fic. Great potential, I hope you continue the story soon.
У лукоморья дуб зелёный; Златая цепь на дубе том: И днём и ночью кот учёный Всё ходит по цепи кругом; Идёт направо — песнь заводит, Налево — сказку говорит. Там чудеса: там леший бродит, Русалка на ветвях сидит; Там на неведомых дорожках Следы невиданных зверей; Избушка там на курьих ножках Стоит без окон, без дверей; Там лес и дол видений полны; Там о заре прихлынут волны На брег песчаный и пустой, И тридцать витязей прекрасных Чредой из вод выходят ясных, И с ними дядька их морской; Там королевич мимоходом Пленяет грозного царя; Там в облаках перед народом Через леса, через моря Колдун несёт богатыря; В темнице там царевна тужит, А бурый волк ей верно служит; Там ступа с Бабою Ягой Идёт, бредёт сама собой, Там царь Кащей над златом чахнет; Там русский дух… там Русью пахнет! И там я был, и мёд я пил; У моря видел дуб зелёный; Под ним сидел, и кот учёный Свои мне сказки говорил.
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Hasta el momento a ido bastante bien, ya sea en la progresión de la historia todo ah estado interesante, el único problema que tengo con esto es lo que tardan en subir nuevos capítulos. Sin embargo agradezco el trabajo y espero que lo sigan publicando....
man you gotta update more or its gonna stagnate anyways keep it going man keep bringing the good stuff!! ...................................
Very good writing it's don't have much hole and the story was not that rush and I like mc antics.I like how the goes I hope to see more ...................
I Love It!!! More Plss!!!![img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I love this story , I researched for this plot a long ago , and now I find one , as a fan and reader please don't drop or canceled it, and thanks
MoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeMoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee MoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeMoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeMoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeMoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
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was searching for copper and found gold. this is a very good novel. the grammar is Excellent and its very well done. its very funny too and i cant wait to see how you will change canon. will the 3 sides peace treaty still happen? im most curious about how you will deal with Raiser and interact with the girls. From the original i plead you add Koneko, Akeno and Rias to the H. i even wonder... will issei teach cultivation to rias and the other? Koneko should be very compatible with cultivation due to seinjutsu
The only way for this to be better is to fûck rias after riser is defeated. And write for us a very steamy and yummy sêx chapter 9f at least 5.000 words long with aika, rias and issei. With him leaving both of them dead tired and silly faces(âhêgâô). Time for him to AWAKEN. A hârêm king must be boundless in bed.
Great story, hope you continue it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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Хорошее произведение, надеюсь первой девушкой будет Риас, все же мне она больше всего понравилась в аниме) Поскорее бы продолжение, удачи и успехов автору
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Everything is top notch. The interaction between the characters is amazing, MC is written in a fantastic manner, and I really want to see where the story will go in the future. I highly recommend this.
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For a dxd fic it is amazingly feeling what made dxd such a fun anime keeping issei his perverted and heartwarming self well still showing maturity in a way believable to his character
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Жду продолжение, произведение интересное и необычное. Возможно то что вы сделали будет новым жанром фанфиков. Так что я очень жду продолжение этого произведения.
Noice. 🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🍏🥭🥭🥭🥭🥭🥭🥭
Very good story. Plot, grammar, language - all is good. I hope for updates. If author has patreon/paypal/koffe or something, I am willing to donate
This is the reason i don’t read fan-fic’s that don’t have 20 plus chapters most don’t make to 20
It was GOOD until like most fanfic cultivation novels they stop updating :( it is sad to see it happen every time unable to reach enlightenment
Plsssss Updateeeeeeee[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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Great start and has good direction. Very unique to others I have read of the same fan-fic. Great potential, I hope you continue the story soon.
У лукоморья дуб зелёный; Златая цепь на дубе том: И днём и ночью кот учёный Всё ходит по цепи кругом; Идёт направо — песнь заводит, Налево — сказку говорит. Там чудеса: там леший бродит, Русалка на ветвях сидит; Там на неведомых дорожках Следы невиданных зверей; Избушка там на курьих ножках Стоит без окон, без дверей; Там лес и дол видений полны; Там о заре прихлынут волны На брег песчаный и пустой, И тридцать витязей прекрасных Чредой из вод выходят ясных, И с ними дядька их морской; Там королевич мимоходом Пленяет грозного царя; Там в облаках перед народом Через леса, через моря Колдун несёт богатыря; В темнице там царевна тужит, А бурый волк ей верно служит; Там ступа с Бабою Ягой Идёт, бредёт сама собой, Там царь Кащей над златом чахнет; Там русский дух… там Русью пахнет! И там я был, и мёд я пил; У моря видел дуб зелёный; Под ним сидел, и кот учёный Свои мне сказки говорил.
WE NEEED MORE!!!!!!!![img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Hasta el momento a ido bastante bien, ya sea en la progresión de la historia todo ah estado interesante, el único problema que tengo con esto es lo que tardan en subir nuevos capítulos. Sin embargo agradezco el trabajo y espero que lo sigan publicando....
man you gotta update more or its gonna stagnate anyways keep it going man keep bringing the good stuff!! ...................................
Very good writing it's don't have much hole and the story was not that rush and I like mc antics.I like how the goes I hope to see more ...................
I Love It!!! More Plss!!!![img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I love this story , I researched for this plot a long ago , and now I find one , as a fan and reader please don't drop or canceled it, and thanks
MoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeMoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee MoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeMoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeMoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeMoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Membuka SPOILER i love it...............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
was searching for copper and found gold. this is a very good novel. the grammar is Excellent and its very well done. its very funny too and i cant wait to see how you will change canon. will the 3 sides peace treaty still happen? im most curious about how you will deal with Raiser and interact with the girls. From the original i plead you add Koneko, Akeno and Rias to the H. i even wonder... will issei teach cultivation to rias and the other? Koneko should be very compatible with cultivation due to seinjutsu
The only way for this to be better is to fûck rias after riser is defeated. And write for us a very steamy and yummy sêx chapter 9f at least 5.000 words long with aika, rias and issei. With him leaving both of them dead tired and silly faces(âhêgâô). Time for him to AWAKEN. A hârêm king must be boundless in bed.
Great story, hope you continue it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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Membuka SPOILER Хорошее произведение, надеюсь первой девушкой будет Риас, все же мне она больше всего понравилась в аниме) Поскорее бы продолжение, удачи и успехов автору
for word count .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. ..
Everything is top notch. The interaction between the characters is amazing, MC is written in a fantastic manner, and I really want to see where the story will go in the future. I highly recommend this.
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For a dxd fic it is amazingly feeling what made dxd such a fun anime keeping issei his perverted and heartwarming self well still showing maturity in a way believable to his character
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