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Omg!! Horrible writing!! Idea Is good but writing is all over the place. hard to understand. need to Edit, rewite, re-read, edit again before reupload man. this is like a 3rd graders writing.
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This book is unfortunately unoriginal and rushed. The author changes nothing at first and the feeling I get when reading this is that they don't care about the story. It has potential to be a great story but falls flat. My advice to the author is flesh it out a bit more even if you don't want to change the main storyline much, add in a system that penalizes MC for deviation through weakening. Also that rewards MC for sticking to plot. The first 5 chapters should be at least 12 instead.
Hi! This is Ada, an editor of the international Suspense/Thriller Writing Contest I. I see great potential in your book, but your book is so underrated here. Thus, I invited you to join the contest a week ago. Please reply to me. Letβs discuss in detail.
BAD just bad read up to 5 chapters couldn't read no more. So you reincarnate and become goku but you don't change anything. Also with just 5 chapters you sum up everything to the androids making it rushed no sense either. Then you tell everyone your not goku but a reincarnated person? No matter what your dead after that. And why reincarnated if your not going to change anything, or just live your life the way you want. very bad book one of the worse on this site.
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The plot and everything is good but it is super super confusing like to the point were you have no clue to what is happening in some parts and he randomly says somthing and it is like he changes his mind and goes off to say something completely different than what was first said
hello I have a question I have written a story and I see many people cant give me any power stones do you know why??? and the story is goooooooood.
Well it is nice waiting for the next chapter can improve vocabulary and separate into more paragraphs but overall I will give around 3 or 4 star.
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Omg!! Horrible writing!! Idea Is good but writing is all over the place. hard to understand. need to Edit, rewite, re-read, edit again before reupload man. this is like a 3rd graders writing.
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This book is unfortunately unoriginal and rushed. The author changes nothing at first and the feeling I get when reading this is that they don't care about the story. It has potential to be a great story but falls flat. My advice to the author is flesh it out a bit more even if you don't want to change the main storyline much, add in a system that penalizes MC for deviation through weakening. Also that rewards MC for sticking to plot. The first 5 chapters should be at least 12 instead.
Hi! This is Ada, an editor of the international Suspense/Thriller Writing Contest I. I see great potential in your book, but your book is so underrated here. Thus, I invited you to join the contest a week ago. Please reply to me. Letβs discuss in detail.
BAD just bad read up to 5 chapters couldn't read no more. So you reincarnate and become goku but you don't change anything. Also with just 5 chapters you sum up everything to the androids making it rushed no sense either. Then you tell everyone your not goku but a reincarnated person? No matter what your dead after that. And why reincarnated if your not going to change anything, or just live your life the way you want. very bad book one of the worse on this site.
Membuka SPOILER FREE ENTRY CONTEST! Contend for a total of $30,000οΌοΌοΌ Hi! Many authors have won big cash prizes in our SWA II. Now Suspense/Thriller Writing Contest I is hot in progress. It is your turn to win with your suspense stories and thrillers this time. We have a financial support program for every entry, not to mention the access to the grand prizes and publishing your books in hardcover. Just imagine your book on the shelf with a best-seller golden label! Β Both posted stories and new stories can join us. Don't miss this chance, as your writing deserves much more. Join us now! Please email adaren06*@*gmail.com (delete *). for more details.
The plot and everything is good but it is super super confusing like to the point were you have no clue to what is happening in some parts and he randomly says somthing and it is like he changes his mind and goes off to say something completely different than what was first said
hello I have a question I have written a story and I see many people cant give me any power stones do you know why??? and the story is goooooooood.
Well it is nice waiting for the next chapter can improve vocabulary and separate into more paragraphs but overall I will give around 3 or 4 star.
What do you think about the story? Do you have any ideas on how to improve the story comment to let me knowπππ.................Please support me.