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Excuse my new colleague and reader, but I am the type that cannot lie when asked for my opinion, because I believe that the truth can always favor better development and evolution of ourselves. Unfortunately my review will not be too positive about your work compared to what you did about my work, but I hope it serves as advice and we can talk about it in the future if you want. You look to have a great sense of creation and imagination, good enough to make me want to write something together with you. (End of my message to the author) (My review starts here) I disagree with your comparison between our stories, mainly due to the fact that in another of my evaluations about another fanfic using Prototype was the similar issue that I considered decisive in my personal opinion. Another protagonist gaining the powers of the Blackvirus with the help of a type of system in the story and nothing more about the game, I cannot understand this type of combination that has everything to go wrong. How can you use two powers with limitless potential together? You got lost because of it. Your writing is messy and a bit uneven, although that doesn't affect the story much, I didn't like your protagonist as he appears to be empty and just a random guy, at first I was thinking about reading like a parody(similar a One Punch Man) and was considering the system as the true protagonist of the story, it was funny until I realized it was just the author getting lost in his own work and decided to stop reading. As for the world and the powers, I considered it one of the strong points of your work, I believe that you can try to create something original instead of trying to write more fanfics when you feel more confident. I skipped a few chapters to look more, including also due to the powers of the Blacklight virus, and unfortunately my opinion has not changed, on the contrary, in the end you admitted that you lost control of your story and that was the main reason for your decision to finish without a proper ending. At least you admited and gave your readers your reason about taking this sadly decision, even if some hated you, this is brave and better that just disappearing. (End of my review)
The beginning is good and thought out really well If you want a quick and easy read i highly recommend this book Good luck to the author in his next endeavor
the novel is garbage. mc has no brain. the author ruins the novel....................................................................................
The idea of having the blacklight virus in the MCU is a brillant idea though it is held back by the ludicrous sudden power jumps, insane rewards for starter quests and the speed at which he gains power. If your looking for a grounded story of someone with the blacklight virus, this isnt it. if your looking for a story where the protagonist has planet destroying capabilities within the first 10 or so chapters, this is your cup of tea.
daddy's fanfic is pleasant to the eyes.....................................................................................................................
I like this Story I hope the author keeps updating consistently. A I will give my stone's
I had this in my library before Author deleted the old chapters and wrote anew. And let me tell you something, I'm really enjoying what I'm reading right now. He's progressing at a really good pace, almost perfect balance b/w earth and his grind( I forgot what it's called zone? Level? All you can eat buffet?). What I'm most happy with is........................ DA LEMON!
well I like the way the story is developing But this ff can still be improved Improve world background and stability of updates Who knows you might get 5 stars review
a work or art its sooo good very good writing good story development very good character desgin updating stability is good and i know when to exept a chapter and a very good world background :)[img=update]
I must say I'm disappointed. It started off okay mc having to unlock the blacklight okay getting stronger all okay till you nerfed the mc taking away his power. so review Writing quality- Nothing to complain about a mistake here and their but its readable. Stability of updates- Not much to say a good amount for a average author doing this for fun. Story development- They had in the beginning an okay set up sure they don't show much but it was fine and we had an op mc but then out of nowhere because of the bs reason of the R.O.B losing a bet he gets nerfed losing powers and things, This is the worst thing you can do in a story epically one focused on an op mc as not does it kill development if not done properly it makes readers drop as they feel that if the author would nerf the mc once with a bs reason why would they not fall back into bad planning and do it again. Character design- Not the best but its average for a op fanfic story. World Background- This is just not good first they introduce a sky high style school in a dc marvel mix with no canon characters then forget about it then throw us into deskside and dc with marvel only being slightly mentioned in all creating a mess. So in all if you enjoy seeing an authors bad planning and foresight f up an novel by nerfing their op mc with a bs reason (it would be fine if it was a good well developed reason but its not) Then go for it if not stay away.
you nerfed him A LOT and that's what disappointed me, but I still have high hopes for this story
Alright then,by the request of the author I have decided I will write an honest 5 star review and I believe it does deserve a 5 star so let's begin. FIRST: Writing Quality Now I'm not no god of writing and I'm not some guy that reads every moment of there life but I'm pretty sure I can back up my words about the writing quality. The first few chapters before what I will call the {GREAT REBIRTH}, honestly the writing quality was very similar to many other fanfics with an op mc but I'd say it's much better compared to other novels that I've read. The author,based on what I've seen, has edited the fanfic so it has little to no mistakes tho if you're extremely lucky you might find an extra letter in a word but that's from my experience. After the great rebirth tho I see a lot of potential. It's giving me the {GREAT 100 CHAPTER FANFIC} vibes and I will never doubt my instincts when it comes to these type of things. Take my word for it the writing quality is one of the things no one should ever have to complain about. 5 stars. SECOND:STORY DEVELOPMENT I'm being honest,before the rebirth this fanfic had no hope of being very good. The mc was too strong right of the bat and I know some people will complain and say that's what an op mc fanfic should be like but with the amount of strength he had the only exciting thing would be one of those Chinese face slapping trends or a harem which I really don't want and I hope the readers that left after the great rebirth will come to understand this just like I did. Before the Great Rebirth the story development would barely scrape 1nstar but at this point (whilst there haven't been much chapters to back up my words at the time of me writing this) I'd say the story is on a steady path to 5 stars in story development which is why I give it 5 stars. THIRD:Character Design Now I know I keep saying the phrase {Great Rebirth} but only those who have read and understood the meaning of that phrase would understand. Before the Great Rebirth the Character design would (to me) be a solid 2 stars. I guess because most of the characters later introduced like batman and the justice league and such were already introduced before the creation of the fanfic so there not a problem but the other characters whilst the interaction was not dry to me it just seemed like some Chinese cultivation novel with harem in it mixed with a bit of Isekai I guess. But now after the Great Rebirth I could say we're on a steady path towards 5 stars for character design. The fact that I can no really Invision the mc and his interaction with the system is my main reason for giving Character Design 5 stars not that I couldn't Invision the characters before the Great Rebirth, it's just I can now see it clearly without any glasses I guess. FOURTH: Updating stability I really don't have much to say about this. Though the author did take a huge break before deciding the event that took place which I call the GREAT REBIRTH, now that he's comeback I get a chapter everyday pretty much though I'm sure it will slow down once the fanfic gets back on its feet to a more stable ground. Before the Great Rebirth I started reading this a little late, I believe at least 5 chapters were already out and though I can't remember since it was a while ago I do believe that the update stability was around the same then or maybe it was 1 every 2 or 3 days, I can't remember. But all that matters now is the update stability is pretty good for now. LASTLY:World Background For this there's also not much to say. There were a few changes like the superpower academy which I don't know exsists, I haven't really been on the DC grind lately and I got all my knowledge from fanfics either way and then there's the place he ends up after the Great Rebirth which I don't want to spoil even though i already have the spoiler thing on. It's DC and unless you're living under a rock you should have a pretty good idea on the background of DC so it's a solid 5 stars. NP- I really like this fanfic now and I think that whoever decided to read this to the end will like it too after all we all are weebs...right?...anyways the fanfic is improving and I can proudly so that the author is improving in his writing as well. A quick warning though. If you call me dumb for writing this then you will be ignored, basically you'd be wasting your time. If you like this fanfic like me then pour some power stones in the dear authors chapter offering bowl and either put it in your Library, Make a meaningful review or offer advice to the author. Now without more speaking that's all from me. Peace Out.
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if you just started reading this just jump straight to the newest updated chapter author basically scraped all the previous chapter. if you started from chapter 1 and get to the newest chapter you gonna feel disappointed
This WAS a good story. the author even warned us that this was an Overpowered fan fic. but then, in the latest chapters, he nerfed him to the ground. literally. the author was gone for a long time and came up with a nerf. I am very disappointed in you, author. It seems you forgot your own story.
Writing quality is rather unformated and thus hard to read. Big negative points for character and story development. black light virus and being against using it fully? rather mentally challenged... even if he apparently uses it later on but still not fully
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one of the best storys ive ever read and thank you using prototype for his powers not many people us thoughs powers
great story really love it i hope you will be continue the work you should show more marvel universe there is hardly any marvel universe in the book.
Nerfed virus with nerfed mc. . Tsk can't even find a good op mc.. It's shame nerfing original blacklight virus.. It's mash of dc and marvel Universe.. Good luck
I really enjoy this fanfiction because it's decently well written and well-thought-out. overall as long as there is more updating stability I think this could be in the top 10.
Hey, definitely not the best fanfiction out there but an interesting read in my opinion. If you can get over the confusing writing in the first five or so chapters then you'll love the rest of it!
It's very interesting and good so far .......................................................................................................
Pretty good sorry please continue I would like to see him charm his way through the woman of justice league especially Wonder Woman LOLILOLOO
Is this going to be a harem……………………………………………………………………,.,.,.,.,,..,…,.,.,.,.,.,…,.,.,..,.,.,.,,.,.,,.,,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,……,.,..,’,’,’,’,,’’’,’.
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Excuse my new colleague and reader, but I am the type that cannot lie when asked for my opinion, because I believe that the truth can always favor better development and evolution of ourselves. Unfortunately my review will not be too positive about your work compared to what you did about my work, but I hope it serves as advice and we can talk about it in the future if you want. You look to have a great sense of creation and imagination, good enough to make me want to write something together with you. (End of my message to the author) (My review starts here) I disagree with your comparison between our stories, mainly due to the fact that in another of my evaluations about another fanfic using Prototype was the similar issue that I considered decisive in my personal opinion. Another protagonist gaining the powers of the Blackvirus with the help of a type of system in the story and nothing more about the game, I cannot understand this type of combination that has everything to go wrong. How can you use two powers with limitless potential together? You got lost because of it. Your writing is messy and a bit uneven, although that doesn't affect the story much, I didn't like your protagonist as he appears to be empty and just a random guy, at first I was thinking about reading like a parody(similar a One Punch Man) and was considering the system as the true protagonist of the story, it was funny until I realized it was just the author getting lost in his own work and decided to stop reading. As for the world and the powers, I considered it one of the strong points of your work, I believe that you can try to create something original instead of trying to write more fanfics when you feel more confident. I skipped a few chapters to look more, including also due to the powers of the Blacklight virus, and unfortunately my opinion has not changed, on the contrary, in the end you admitted that you lost control of your story and that was the main reason for your decision to finish without a proper ending. At least you admited and gave your readers your reason about taking this sadly decision, even if some hated you, this is brave and better that just disappearing. (End of my review)
The beginning is good and thought out really well If you want a quick and easy read i highly recommend this book Good luck to the author in his next endeavor
the novel is garbage. mc has no brain. the author ruins the novel....................................................................................
The idea of having the blacklight virus in the MCU is a brillant idea though it is held back by the ludicrous sudden power jumps, insane rewards for starter quests and the speed at which he gains power. If your looking for a grounded story of someone with the blacklight virus, this isnt it. if your looking for a story where the protagonist has planet destroying capabilities within the first 10 or so chapters, this is your cup of tea.
daddy's fanfic is pleasant to the eyes.....................................................................................................................
I like this Story I hope the author keeps updating consistently. A I will give my stone's
I had this in my library before Author deleted the old chapters and wrote anew. And let me tell you something, I'm really enjoying what I'm reading right now. He's progressing at a really good pace, almost perfect balance b/w earth and his grind( I forgot what it's called zone? Level? All you can eat buffet?). What I'm most happy with is........................ DA LEMON!
well I like the way the story is developing But this ff can still be improved Improve world background and stability of updates Who knows you might get 5 stars review
a work or art its sooo good very good writing good story development very good character desgin updating stability is good and i know when to exept a chapter and a very good world background :)[img=update]
I must say I'm disappointed. It started off okay mc having to unlock the blacklight okay getting stronger all okay till you nerfed the mc taking away his power. so review Writing quality- Nothing to complain about a mistake here and their but its readable. Stability of updates- Not much to say a good amount for a average author doing this for fun. Story development- They had in the beginning an okay set up sure they don't show much but it was fine and we had an op mc but then out of nowhere because of the bs reason of the R.O.B losing a bet he gets nerfed losing powers and things, This is the worst thing you can do in a story epically one focused on an op mc as not does it kill development if not done properly it makes readers drop as they feel that if the author would nerf the mc once with a bs reason why would they not fall back into bad planning and do it again. Character design- Not the best but its average for a op fanfic story. World Background- This is just not good first they introduce a sky high style school in a dc marvel mix with no canon characters then forget about it then throw us into deskside and dc with marvel only being slightly mentioned in all creating a mess. So in all if you enjoy seeing an authors bad planning and foresight f up an novel by nerfing their op mc with a bs reason (it would be fine if it was a good well developed reason but its not) Then go for it if not stay away.
you nerfed him A LOT and that's what disappointed me, but I still have high hopes for this story
Alright then,by the request of the author I have decided I will write an honest 5 star review and I believe it does deserve a 5 star so let's begin. FIRST: Writing Quality Now I'm not no god of writing and I'm not some guy that reads every moment of there life but I'm pretty sure I can back up my words about the writing quality. The first few chapters before what I will call the {GREAT REBIRTH}, honestly the writing quality was very similar to many other fanfics with an op mc but I'd say it's much better compared to other novels that I've read. The author,based on what I've seen, has edited the fanfic so it has little to no mistakes tho if you're extremely lucky you might find an extra letter in a word but that's from my experience. After the great rebirth tho I see a lot of potential. It's giving me the {GREAT 100 CHAPTER FANFIC} vibes and I will never doubt my instincts when it comes to these type of things. Take my word for it the writing quality is one of the things no one should ever have to complain about. 5 stars. SECOND:STORY DEVELOPMENT I'm being honest,before the rebirth this fanfic had no hope of being very good. The mc was too strong right of the bat and I know some people will complain and say that's what an op mc fanfic should be like but with the amount of strength he had the only exciting thing would be one of those Chinese face slapping trends or a harem which I really don't want and I hope the readers that left after the great rebirth will come to understand this just like I did. Before the Great Rebirth the story development would barely scrape 1nstar but at this point (whilst there haven't been much chapters to back up my words at the time of me writing this) I'd say the story is on a steady path to 5 stars in story development which is why I give it 5 stars. THIRD:Character Design Now I know I keep saying the phrase {Great Rebirth} but only those who have read and understood the meaning of that phrase would understand. Before the Great Rebirth the Character design would (to me) be a solid 2 stars. I guess because most of the characters later introduced like batman and the justice league and such were already introduced before the creation of the fanfic so there not a problem but the other characters whilst the interaction was not dry to me it just seemed like some Chinese cultivation novel with harem in it mixed with a bit of Isekai I guess. But now after the Great Rebirth I could say we're on a steady path towards 5 stars for character design. The fact that I can no really Invision the mc and his interaction with the system is my main reason for giving Character Design 5 stars not that I couldn't Invision the characters before the Great Rebirth, it's just I can now see it clearly without any glasses I guess. FOURTH: Updating stability I really don't have much to say about this. Though the author did take a huge break before deciding the event that took place which I call the GREAT REBIRTH, now that he's comeback I get a chapter everyday pretty much though I'm sure it will slow down once the fanfic gets back on its feet to a more stable ground. Before the Great Rebirth I started reading this a little late, I believe at least 5 chapters were already out and though I can't remember since it was a while ago I do believe that the update stability was around the same then or maybe it was 1 every 2 or 3 days, I can't remember. But all that matters now is the update stability is pretty good for now. LASTLY:World Background For this there's also not much to say. There were a few changes like the superpower academy which I don't know exsists, I haven't really been on the DC grind lately and I got all my knowledge from fanfics either way and then there's the place he ends up after the Great Rebirth which I don't want to spoil even though i already have the spoiler thing on. It's DC and unless you're living under a rock you should have a pretty good idea on the background of DC so it's a solid 5 stars. NP- I really like this fanfic now and I think that whoever decided to read this to the end will like it too after all we all are weebs...right?...anyways the fanfic is improving and I can proudly so that the author is improving in his writing as well. A quick warning though. If you call me dumb for writing this then you will be ignored, basically you'd be wasting your time. If you like this fanfic like me then pour some power stones in the dear authors chapter offering bowl and either put it in your Library, Make a meaningful review or offer advice to the author. Now without more speaking that's all from me. Peace Out.
Membuka SPOILER if you just started reading this just jump straight to the newest updated chapter author basically scraped all the previous chapter. if you started from chapter 1 and get to the newest chapter you gonna feel disappointed
This WAS a good story. the author even warned us that this was an Overpowered fan fic. but then, in the latest chapters, he nerfed him to the ground. literally. the author was gone for a long time and came up with a nerf. I am very disappointed in you, author. It seems you forgot your own story.
Writing quality is rather unformated and thus hard to read. Big negative points for character and story development. black light virus and being against using it fully? rather mentally challenged... even if he apparently uses it later on but still not fully
Membuka SPOILER one of the best storys ive ever read and thank you using prototype for his powers not many people us thoughs powers
great story really love it i hope you will be continue the work you should show more marvel universe there is hardly any marvel universe in the book.
Nerfed virus with nerfed mc. . Tsk can't even find a good op mc.. It's shame nerfing original blacklight virus.. It's mash of dc and marvel Universe.. Good luck
I really enjoy this fanfiction because it's decently well written and well-thought-out. overall as long as there is more updating stability I think this could be in the top 10.
Hey, definitely not the best fanfiction out there but an interesting read in my opinion. If you can get over the confusing writing in the first five or so chapters then you'll love the rest of it!
It's very interesting and good so far .......................................................................................................
Pretty good sorry please continue I would like to see him charm his way through the woman of justice league especially Wonder Woman LOLILOLOO
Is this going to be a harem……………………………………………………………………,.,.,.,.,,..,…,.,.,.,.,.,…,.,.,..,.,.,.,,.,.,,.,,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,……,.,..,’,’,’,’,,’’’,’.
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