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Really good I hope this story donβt get dropped like other good ones. Now I am just getting the word count needed to post this review. Itβs still now enough so I am just writing this now.
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as already written in the review already done well written fan fiction ... the author puts a lot of effort to write even if busy with the work so keep it up.
I will not go into details Roughly it is suitable for fanfic lovers of danmachi world with the protagonist, where the mc has kind of down to earth type of background. Not too much op and not too lame Romance is another side where author focuses on since early at the beginning Of the story and it is currently progressing Well in my opinion The main waifu is a bit weird if you ask me but she is great π Language is good so no inconvenience there and flow is also good merging with the world background. While most fanfics focus on the timeline of where bell is in orario or he is almost in orario This one starts few years before that so it has a fresh and a new feeling than most others Overall if the update stability is good or becomes better in the future this will become a nice story with a large fan base
I have seen danmachi fanfic but they usually start at the beginning of the plot not much back and I like those more since they save several characters from their death like Astrea's family π
I like this story its a nice and simply slice of life like novel with anime elements that i really enjoy for a casual read that has enough acrion to keep me interested and anticipate the story development.
its a good story not the best but definately worth reading a seeing where it goes and the writing is improving over time i dont usually write reveiws but auther asked and i thought whatever why not
It's Good Story ππ It's not too rush and had it's on pace Not boring and enjoyable ππ.............................................Niceπ
It's been long time since i wrote review, well i just want to say if you really liked something you must continue what you're doing, idk what to say to review but the star rating is my honest review *cough*
Awesome story.The starting and the consecutive progreesion upto date is very good though the interaction with the story characters are quite lacking(as he just arrived at orario).Hope MC has some nice interaction with the girls in future along with some action. Thank you.
yo keep up the good work I love reading this fic I'm not a very descriptive person so all I can say is don't drop this and keep up the good work
Updates are a bit slow, but everyone has their personal life so np, good quality as well look forward to seeing more in the future. Good luck authorπ
Good fanfic novel. it's an interesting read and if I may add my personal request onto this novel... well, I think it needs faster pacing of the story to progress because it seems too slow (in my opinion...). Also, the chapter release! Pls make it at least 5-7 chps per week, keke
Ilkie this please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue
-Ascension of the white emperor. -literally wish-fulfillment with goddess being his doting wife and wipping his *hmm*. Well, that's might be how emperor of the past was raised... Irony? I don't know, but what I know is that is an absolute clcihe work. With all those things like "first death battle" and all of that. Yeah, sure.
This fanfic is awesome!!!! Please try to release chapters on Daily basis. If not at least try to release 2 Or 3 days. And keep up the good work. Q-1- when will MC arrived in city?? And please make MC join freya familia it will make story interesting.
if you wanna read about a beta Mc who listen to his sugar momma, this novel is for you! ...... .... ...................... ....... .....
the only problem I find in this fan fiction is the updating of the chapters (roughly one chapter every 5 days) PS. I am writing with Google translate so there could be errors
Full Star for an Amazing FanFic! Full Star for an Amazing FanFic! Full Star for an Amazing FanFic! Full Star for an Amazing FanFic! Full Star for an Amazing FanFic! Full Star for an Amazing FanFic!
ΠΡΠ΅Π½Ρ Ρ ΠΎΡΠΎΡΠΎ. ΠΠ΅ ΡΠΌΠ΅ΠΉ Π·Π°Π±ΡΠ°ΡΡΠ²Π°ΡΡ ΡΡΠΎΡ ΡΠ΅Π΄Π΅Π²Ρ.ΠΡΠ΅Π½Ρ Ρ ΠΎΡΠΎΡΠΎ. ΠΠ΅ ΡΠΌΠ΅ΠΉ Π·Π°Π±ΡΠ°ΡΡΠ²Π°ΡΡ ΡΡΠΎΡ ΡΠ΅Π΄Π΅Π²Ρ.ΠΡΠ΅Π½Ρ Ρ ΠΎΡΠΎΡΠΎ. ΠΠ΅ ΡΠΌΠ΅ΠΉ Π·Π°Π±ΡΠ°ΡΡΠ²Π°ΡΡ ΡΡΠΎΡ ΡΠ΅Π΄Π΅Π²Ρ.ΠΡΠ΅Π½Ρ Ρ ΠΎΡΠΎΡΠΎ. ΠΠ΅ ΡΠΌΠ΅ΠΉ Π·Π°Π±ΡΠ°ΡΡΠ²Π°ΡΡ ΡΡΠΎΡ ΡΠ΅Π΄Π΅Π²Ρ.
the writing is good and all, but his backstory is really bad... he died because he was cheated on by his girlfriend with the rich man and the henchmen killed him, really? truck-kun was more original. and this goddess who looks more like a teenager? I can't read beyond cap 5, in the moral (in my language, this sentence makes sense because I'm using the translator to write)...
*sigh* we need more . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . ..... .. . . . . . . . . . . . . .
Mc Background done alright, lots of Fanfics where mc good karma and given rewards for karma. very common but this is one of the few fanfics where effort was actually done for the background of Mc there is also the transition from mc death to reincarnation, usually it goes Here are your wishes then goodbye. But you actually made the ROB a goddess and a lover, it's not new but not the same old boring Take your wishes and leave. still 5 chaps so thats all I can talk about as for this FanFic to become a multiverse it is very likely so Author should be careful in which content to add in this fanfic cuz multiverse types are likely to get tiring in the long run, tho if you enjoy what you will write then it might be fine.[img=fp]
That is beautiful story. Because the danmachi caractère is nice .................................................iilmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
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excelent . . . .... . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . .. . . . . .
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The story is quite captivating to the point you get sucked into it. Itβs currently not to far so I canβ give it a perfect 5 however, it already shows development and interesting story Updating and length of story is pretty consistent currently as well so thats always a plus. To the author keep up the hard work and by chapter 50 I may change this review to 5 star
Really good I hope this story donβt get dropped like other good ones. Now I am just getting the word count needed to post this review. Itβs still now enough so I am just writing this now.
Membuka SPOILER as already written in the review already done well written fan fiction ... the author puts a lot of effort to write even if busy with the work so keep it up.
I will not go into details Roughly it is suitable for fanfic lovers of danmachi world with the protagonist, where the mc has kind of down to earth type of background. Not too much op and not too lame Romance is another side where author focuses on since early at the beginning Of the story and it is currently progressing Well in my opinion The main waifu is a bit weird if you ask me but she is great π Language is good so no inconvenience there and flow is also good merging with the world background. While most fanfics focus on the timeline of where bell is in orario or he is almost in orario This one starts few years before that so it has a fresh and a new feeling than most others Overall if the update stability is good or becomes better in the future this will become a nice story with a large fan base
I have seen danmachi fanfic but they usually start at the beginning of the plot not much back and I like those more since they save several characters from their death like Astrea's family π
I like this story its a nice and simply slice of life like novel with anime elements that i really enjoy for a casual read that has enough acrion to keep me interested and anticipate the story development.
its a good story not the best but definately worth reading a seeing where it goes and the writing is improving over time i dont usually write reveiws but auther asked and i thought whatever why not
It's Good Story ππ It's not too rush and had it's on pace Not boring and enjoyable ππ.............................................Niceπ
It's been long time since i wrote review, well i just want to say if you really liked something you must continue what you're doing, idk what to say to review but the star rating is my honest review *cough*
Awesome story.The starting and the consecutive progreesion upto date is very good though the interaction with the story characters are quite lacking(as he just arrived at orario).Hope MC has some nice interaction with the girls in future along with some action. Thank you.
yo keep up the good work I love reading this fic I'm not a very descriptive person so all I can say is don't drop this and keep up the good work
Updates are a bit slow, but everyone has their personal life so np, good quality as well look forward to seeing more in the future. Good luck authorπ
Good fanfic novel. it's an interesting read and if I may add my personal request onto this novel... well, I think it needs faster pacing of the story to progress because it seems too slow (in my opinion...). Also, the chapter release! Pls make it at least 5-7 chps per week, keke
Ilkie this please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue Please continue
-Ascension of the white emperor. -literally wish-fulfillment with goddess being his doting wife and wipping his *hmm*. Well, that's might be how emperor of the past was raised... Irony? I don't know, but what I know is that is an absolute clcihe work. With all those things like "first death battle" and all of that. Yeah, sure.
This fanfic is awesome!!!! Please try to release chapters on Daily basis. If not at least try to release 2 Or 3 days. And keep up the good work. Q-1- when will MC arrived in city?? And please make MC join freya familia it will make story interesting.
if you wanna read about a beta Mc who listen to his sugar momma, this novel is for you! ...... .... ...................... ....... .....
the only problem I find in this fan fiction is the updating of the chapters (roughly one chapter every 5 days) PS. I am writing with Google translate so there could be errors
Full Star for an Amazing FanFic! Full Star for an Amazing FanFic! Full Star for an Amazing FanFic! Full Star for an Amazing FanFic! Full Star for an Amazing FanFic! Full Star for an Amazing FanFic!
ΠΡΠ΅Π½Ρ Ρ ΠΎΡΠΎΡΠΎ. ΠΠ΅ ΡΠΌΠ΅ΠΉ Π·Π°Π±ΡΠ°ΡΡΠ²Π°ΡΡ ΡΡΠΎΡ ΡΠ΅Π΄Π΅Π²Ρ.ΠΡΠ΅Π½Ρ Ρ ΠΎΡΠΎΡΠΎ. ΠΠ΅ ΡΠΌΠ΅ΠΉ Π·Π°Π±ΡΠ°ΡΡΠ²Π°ΡΡ ΡΡΠΎΡ ΡΠ΅Π΄Π΅Π²Ρ.ΠΡΠ΅Π½Ρ Ρ ΠΎΡΠΎΡΠΎ. ΠΠ΅ ΡΠΌΠ΅ΠΉ Π·Π°Π±ΡΠ°ΡΡΠ²Π°ΡΡ ΡΡΠΎΡ ΡΠ΅Π΄Π΅Π²Ρ.ΠΡΠ΅Π½Ρ Ρ ΠΎΡΠΎΡΠΎ. ΠΠ΅ ΡΠΌΠ΅ΠΉ Π·Π°Π±ΡΠ°ΡΡΠ²Π°ΡΡ ΡΡΠΎΡ ΡΠ΅Π΄Π΅Π²Ρ.
the writing is good and all, but his backstory is really bad... he died because he was cheated on by his girlfriend with the rich man and the henchmen killed him, really? truck-kun was more original. and this goddess who looks more like a teenager? I can't read beyond cap 5, in the moral (in my language, this sentence makes sense because I'm using the translator to write)...
*sigh* we need more . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . ..... .. . . . . . . . . . . . . .
Mc Background done alright, lots of Fanfics where mc good karma and given rewards for karma. very common but this is one of the few fanfics where effort was actually done for the background of Mc there is also the transition from mc death to reincarnation, usually it goes Here are your wishes then goodbye. But you actually made the ROB a goddess and a lover, it's not new but not the same old boring Take your wishes and leave. still 5 chaps so thats all I can talk about as for this FanFic to become a multiverse it is very likely so Author should be careful in which content to add in this fanfic cuz multiverse types are likely to get tiring in the long run, tho if you enjoy what you will write then it might be fine.[img=fp]
That is beautiful story. Because the danmachi caractère is nice .................................................iilmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
excelent . . . .... . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . .. . . . . .
β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
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The story is quite captivating to the point you get sucked into it. Itβs currently not to far so I canβ give it a perfect 5 however, it already shows development and interesting story Updating and length of story is pretty consistent currently as well so thats always a plus. To the author keep up the hard work and by chapter 50 I may change this review to 5 star