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yoyoyoyo. I like the way that he dies is from his insane girlfriend, im wondering how this might affect his personality since he was probably in an abusive relationship. When it says that Christian is told what the System is, its probably best for us to learn that along with him, maybe throwing out some of those key premises of the world we're going to be exploring as a hook. I'm curious whether or not the System is an afterlife or not and whether other people end up going there after death, but you could use Christian being given this info, as a way of telling us this aswell. I really do think that the premise has great potential of becoming a really cool story and hope you continue to write this. I'm excited about the world-building that you will expand on in future and hope that we run into a whole cast of interesting characters along the way. [img=recommend]
will you update this again? its a good story for a start hope you'll keep this story going. hakshe dkdndidnehsbdjs dkaubeoanudbsidbr skshwmkz
yoyoyoyo. I like the way that he dies is from his insane girlfriend, im wondering how this might affect his personality since he was probably in an abusive relationship. When it says that Christian is told what the System is, its probably best for us to learn that along with him, maybe throwing out some of those key premises of the world we're going to be exploring as a hook. I'm curious whether or not the System is an afterlife or not and whether other people end up going there after death, but you could use Christian being given this info, as a way of telling us this aswell. I really do think that the premise has great potential of becoming a really cool story and hope you continue to write this. I'm excited about the world-building that you will expand on in future and hope that we run into a whole cast of interesting characters along the way. [img=recommend]
will you update this again? its a good story for a start hope you'll keep this story going. hakshe dkdndidnehsbdjs dkaubeoanudbsidbr skshwmkz