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I loved the book. There were some errors but you still brought of the story, I can't wait for the other parts [img=update][img=update][img=recommend]
I have to say you have an intriguing plotline ahead of you. The idea of twins with distinct differences in them may have been a rare imagination ahead. I was a little bit put off on reading the synopsis since it was too long and maybe a little dumping of information. The synopsis was the first one that the readers will read, and if they have read that long, they may back out on reading since you said it all through the front page. Make something that makes the readers plunge into the story because they were so curious about what will happen. That's all I can say, but one thing is for sure, learn from the experience here on WN! You have a great journey ahead!
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It is really an unusual start to a story, I loved the writing, the narration as well as the character design. Loved the whole concept. So far the reading experience is really good. As the FL is introduced it is a joy to read.
I can really see a good story in the making. Horror comedy isn't my genre but some parts got a chuckle out of me and that's more than most comedy nowadays. It may need a little more editing on the dialogue but that doesn't take away from the story.
Really interesting story so far! The beginning was so sad, but showed a lot of intriguing characters. Your story is well paced so far, and Dina is an interesting character as well! I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes. Would recommend.
Nice! Interesting story! I like the action, I like the drama. So many names at the beginning... but that's fine. Please just not use the word "CEO" in your novel. So many people already have "allergy" for that :))) Besides you are doing exellent job! Keep writing! Good luck with it!
Intriguing plot. Two babies separated since birth, having different attitudes... Till what I've read, I found the story really interesting. There are a few grammar mistakes but I think you can work on those as they are not obvious while reading. Good luck [img=recommend]
A solid and startling narration plus a great plot! New hidden gem get! Please keep it up, dear author. Hmnn. How can I help more... Oh, I suggest you make a better cover through Canva or any free app. I feel like your cover isn't doing your writing justice. Please keep up! May the author write more, edit more, enjoy more, and even earn more^^.
From what I read I was quite interested and quickly. The feeling of disappointment of the baby that survived and was not taken was heart-wrenching but set the mood for the entire story perfectly.
The start is really promising and points to a great story every way, flow of thought is very good, several pages along the story the characters and story gain momentum, keeping that pace and story line is very difficult and you wouldn’t realize it unless you were to write a story. Waiting for the horror part now.
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Nice stuff.!! I love the way author takes the theme. apt title and i wanna appreciate writer's ability to Express and communicate the idea through written words.
Oh!!!! What a book , i just can’t wait for the incoming chapters. It’s a interesting book with great plots and twists. It’s an excellent book, that’s worth for your time.
Wow, it is a nice book. Narration and description are on point. It has its own sad fate that brings out the locked emotions in someone... Little errors but can be overlooked as we all are not perfect. It doesn't change the flow of the story and the pace... Author did a good job. Nice one
A well written story. Not too many grammatical errors and shows the plot and characters without too much or too little descriptive writing. Really good so far. Keep up the good work author!!!
First of all, you made me cry in the first chapter, so that means its a great book right from the beginning. I just love your writing style. I cant say much more because its only getting started but I like it a lot so far
This is the story of two twins separated after birth. One of them is taken by a rich family with tons of complications and secret, while the other is adopted secretly because she's officially dead. The characters are interesting, they feel new. I don't see where the story is going because it's too soon, but it will surely arrive at a point where the sisters meet again and find out of the existence of the other. Overall, it's interesting as a story and can evolve in a very good work :)
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I loved the book. There were some errors but you still brought of the story, I can't wait for the other parts [img=update][img=update][img=recommend]
I have to say you have an intriguing plotline ahead of you. The idea of twins with distinct differences in them may have been a rare imagination ahead. I was a little bit put off on reading the synopsis since it was too long and maybe a little dumping of information. The synopsis was the first one that the readers will read, and if they have read that long, they may back out on reading since you said it all through the front page. Make something that makes the readers plunge into the story because they were so curious about what will happen. That's all I can say, but one thing is for sure, learn from the experience here on WN! You have a great journey ahead!
Membuka SPOILER It is really an unusual start to a story, I loved the writing, the narration as well as the character design. Loved the whole concept. So far the reading experience is really good. As the FL is introduced it is a joy to read.
I can really see a good story in the making. Horror comedy isn't my genre but some parts got a chuckle out of me and that's more than most comedy nowadays. It may need a little more editing on the dialogue but that doesn't take away from the story.
Really interesting story so far! The beginning was so sad, but showed a lot of intriguing characters. Your story is well paced so far, and Dina is an interesting character as well! I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes. Would recommend.
Nice! Interesting story! I like the action, I like the drama. So many names at the beginning... but that's fine. Please just not use the word "CEO" in your novel. So many people already have "allergy" for that :))) Besides you are doing exellent job! Keep writing! Good luck with it!
Intriguing plot. Two babies separated since birth, having different attitudes... Till what I've read, I found the story really interesting. There are a few grammar mistakes but I think you can work on those as they are not obvious while reading. Good luck [img=recommend]
A solid and startling narration plus a great plot! New hidden gem get! Please keep it up, dear author. Hmnn. How can I help more... Oh, I suggest you make a better cover through Canva or any free app. I feel like your cover isn't doing your writing justice. Please keep up! May the author write more, edit more, enjoy more, and even earn more^^.
From what I read I was quite interested and quickly. The feeling of disappointment of the baby that survived and was not taken was heart-wrenching but set the mood for the entire story perfectly.
The start is really promising and points to a great story every way, flow of thought is very good, several pages along the story the characters and story gain momentum, keeping that pace and story line is very difficult and you wouldn’t realize it unless you were to write a story. Waiting for the horror part now.
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Nice stuff.!! I love the way author takes the theme. apt title and i wanna appreciate writer's ability to Express and communicate the idea through written words.
Oh!!!! What a book , i just can’t wait for the incoming chapters. It’s a interesting book with great plots and twists. It’s an excellent book, that’s worth for your time.
Wow, it is a nice book. Narration and description are on point. It has its own sad fate that brings out the locked emotions in someone... Little errors but can be overlooked as we all are not perfect. It doesn't change the flow of the story and the pace... Author did a good job. Nice one
A well written story. Not too many grammatical errors and shows the plot and characters without too much or too little descriptive writing. Really good so far. Keep up the good work author!!!
First of all, you made me cry in the first chapter, so that means its a great book right from the beginning. I just love your writing style. I cant say much more because its only getting started but I like it a lot so far
This is the story of two twins separated after birth. One of them is taken by a rich family with tons of complications and secret, while the other is adopted secretly because she's officially dead. The characters are interesting, they feel new. I don't see where the story is going because it's too soon, but it will surely arrive at a point where the sisters meet again and find out of the existence of the other. Overall, it's interesting as a story and can evolve in a very good work :)
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