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Es una buena historia desde lo complicado hasta las habilidades obtenidas tambiΓ©n la forma en que lo desarrollas forma variantes que cambia la historia para bien y para mal en un mΓnimo significado
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The author may like the story they are fanfictioning, but they don't seem to stay consistent with any plot. The mc is doesn't use his skill to the max and is annoying in too many ways. Meh.....
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hallow thor, I come from Indonesia, honestly I really like your fanfic novel, which I think is interesting and good, and every word is funny, and I hope this novel will continue unlike other novels that stop in the middle of the road.. and I have a suggestion. .. it would be nice to skip a few years of thor so that I can quickly enter/go to another world
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It was a fun read. I just liked the bloodlines and skill copying. The story timelines and plot were absolutely screwed up though. Stuff was happening that wasn't meant to be happening yet, or had already happened yet. I hope it is continued, but make sure to check over what is supposed to be happening author, it seems like you are almost trying to go off of memory or something when you write this.
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Would have been great if the timeline isn't messed up.. Like c'mon man, you've made about 3/4 naruto fanfic and you still get confused with its timelines? Like wtf... And like every other fanfic you had, you'd drop this too.
Hey Author-san, is this story dropped or just hiatus??? But cool story and cool premise and was hoping that MC would go to a different world soon!!
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Please continue posting pages to this book as I really enjoy reading it and I hope that the negative reviews don't discourage you from posting more pages to this book. I actually like how the book isn't limited to wait was happening in the anime as this is a fan made book I assume.
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I donβt understand some bad critique. It is a fanfic and the author should have the liberty to write what he wants. The grammar is ok and the story nice. Itβs definitely not the best, but I enjoyed it. I wish author will continue to write, because it has much potential.
It's pretty good actually.. I like this type of mc.smart,strong,kind to other and absolutely did not act like some chinese novel young master..i really hate that one.. The character blend really well with the original story.. though the story kinda fast..thats alright because i'm waiting for him to go to new world.. [img=update]
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interesting. sorry it's abandoned..interesting. sorry it's abandoned..interesting. sorry it's abandoned..................................................
Es una buena historia desde lo complicado hasta las habilidades obtenidas tambiΓ©n la forma en que lo desarrollas forma variantes que cambia la historia para bien y para mal en un mΓnimo significado
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The author may like the story they are fanfictioning, but they don't seem to stay consistent with any plot. The mc is doesn't use his skill to the max and is annoying in too many ways. Meh.....
noiceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
its okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okayits okay
Membuka SPOILER hallow thor, I come from Indonesia, honestly I really like your fanfic novel, which I think is interesting and good, and every word is funny, and I hope this novel will continue unlike other novels that stop in the middle of the road.. and I have a suggestion. .. it would be nice to skip a few years of thor so that I can quickly enter/go to another world
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It was a fun read. I just liked the bloodlines and skill copying. The story timelines and plot were absolutely screwed up though. Stuff was happening that wasn't meant to be happening yet, or had already happened yet. I hope it is continued, but make sure to check over what is supposed to be happening author, it seems like you are almost trying to go off of memory or something when you write this.
Udiwija olmayan JiJes9aosoeoje8qihwuwl ok nwbzici de ok e non di mi 28383737hbfkidiabkwoζδΈθ―dilindΙnullum rbieofn de juni non tnri8ckenwjiaooaproornej de ickrnrnicww rnucubebwwj tu soa9 bud
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Would have been great if the timeline isn't messed up.. Like c'mon man, you've made about 3/4 naruto fanfic and you still get confused with its timelines? Like wtf... And like every other fanfic you had, you'd drop this too.
Hey Author-san, is this story dropped or just hiatus??? But cool story and cool premise and was hoping that MC would go to a different world soon!!
I cant remember when i stopped reading this shit but this i really bad.[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=fp][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Please continue posting pages to this book as I really enjoy reading it and I hope that the negative reviews don't discourage you from posting more pages to this book. I actually like how the book isn't limited to wait was happening in the anime as this is a fan made book I assume.
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I donβt understand some bad critique. It is a fanfic and the author should have the liberty to write what he wants. The grammar is ok and the story nice. Itβs definitely not the best, but I enjoyed it. I wish author will continue to write, because it has much potential.
It's pretty good actually.. I like this type of mc.smart,strong,kind to other and absolutely did not act like some chinese novel young master..i really hate that one.. The character blend really well with the original story.. though the story kinda fast..thats alright because i'm waiting for him to go to new world.. [img=update]