Shades of the New World

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NakedApron

Author-special-five-star-review!!! Version 3!!! (Probably final version) Thanks a lot, to everyone who’s taking their time to read through all my stuff. I really don't know why I thought it was a good idea to put a suicide scene in my synopsis… It not like it’s a story defining scene in the novel or anything either, it’s just a part of a side-story that I love very dearly. Layla Pog T_T Anyway, in this review, I’ll try to explain my story and why you should read it. And just like how the review system works, I’ll divide this review into four parts (Writing quality, Story, Characters and World-building) and give my thought process on them. Writing quality: Most of the story, you’ll see something similar to what I wrote on the synopsis. Since this was my first time writing anything, the novel had some problems which I've been trying my best to fix over time, but finally, I can confidently say that I've done a good job of cleaning up the story (for the most part). I can also confidently say that you will find typos, grammatical or punctual mistakes and some repeats of words and expressions and whatnot. (I did a spelling check like four times and I still find some mistakes here and there to this day. I'm sorry I’m a failure) Story - General feel: Alright, after you’ve just read the synopsis (or if you know the previous review I put here), you probably think that this novel is something grim dark and depressing, right? You’re right. At least, on some occasions. Those “some occasions” mostly being the side stories and the World building stuff that pops out throughout the story. But if I were to write a completely honest synopsis, it would probably go like this: [A 300-year-old spirit does slice-of-life things in another world. There’s also some stuff about him trying to achieve immortality, unearthing the secrets of the Final Empress, discovering the history of a broken empire, yada yada.] So yeh. Story – Themes Hmm… I guess the biggest theme in my novel turned out to be one’s identity. Although I want to explain this part a bit better, honestly, I’m struggling a bit with the concept myself, so I guess you can see me trying to wrap my head around it through Evin’s story. There’s also some more parts expressing such mind-blowing new ideas like: life sucking, war being bad, ethical dilemmas, ignoring morals entirely due to circumstances and then feeling bad, etc, etc. Story - Pacing and development: Warning: Slow story. If you don’t like slow stories don’t read. I don’t know how, but I’m able to write on seemingly the most mundane of things continuously, and most readers love them for whatever reason. There’s also the side stories that pop out occasionally. Obviously, I try to connect them into the main story and push the story ahead, but a lot of others will probably feel bored through it and want to kill themselves. That’s completely okay. Just leave the story and read a more fast-paced story; there’s like at least 16 of them on the site(I know since I tried counting them all). Characters: My goal when I was writing this story, is that every character could become a waifu for someone(even the MC! nANI?) and that they don’t just exist to further the plotline. Also, even if I don’t write about it on the novel all the time, I try to give every character a proper backstory (that exists in a very rudimentary way inside my head). This helps a lot in helping me decide what kind of actions they will take in certain situations. I’m also focusing a lot on giving the charas proper flaws and whatnot so they can get satisfying development and whatnot. MC: Also, MC will make dumb mistakes, suboptimal decisions, weird thoughts a lot of times. He will not be perfect, he will not always win, and he will not always be cool. So, if you want a self-insert power-fantasy story, then this novel is probably not for you. But I don’t want you to think that this novel literally has no satisfying moments. I’d write a bunch of stuff here to prove this point to you, but I feel that you should experience it yourself. World-Building: It’s lit fam. At least according to all the readers. And honestly, I really like it as well, so I spend a lot of time trying to keep things consistent and plot-hole free. Sadly, I do a really shit job at it, so feel free to point out any inconsistencies you may find and call me a degenerate human being for writing such low-quality content. Don’t worry, I won’t cry. Jokes aside, I’m actually thinking of taking a 1 or 2 week break to dedicate all my to fixing some stuff, but At any rate, that’s all for now, thanks for reading till the end. Enjoy.

LV 3

Mamelunka

This novel made me realize how unfair Webnovel is when it comes to popularity of the books. This story is written better than most of the popular stuff, yet it has so little views... I like that we have ACTUAL reincarnation here (I mean that MC dies and is reborn). In some reincarnation stories it's more like body transitioning (MC is unhappy then BOOM they're someone else). You did this the way it shoul be done imo. I don't know how many more chapters you plan to publish but I hope you'll get the recognition you deserve :)

LV 11

EternalNightLotus

This is an excellent novel with a well thought out beginning and structured storyline. The author has not neglected the set up of the new world and every new character POV adds something to that detail. I like that we see the mc before his reincarnation rather than him simply waking up in a random body with his entire history and past forgotten. Glimpses of his former persona come through in his reasoning and there is logic behind his actions based on that prior knowledge which really adds layers of depth to the character and its really refreshing to read. Keep up the good work!

LV 3

SmilingPerson

hmmm... This is a nicely written, well-thought out world that the author has created here. The way the character interactions go is satisfying and refreshing compared to other similar reincarnation or transmigration stories. It is a good read if u r looking for some magic and isekai action, but since the author is new to writing, I would advice being lenient with some stuff. For the Author: You are doing a good job so far and I hope u keep improving and providing us with attractive chaps

LV 4

ViolentCareBare

As much as i like it, I really dislike the whole aspect of the mc being in a toddlers body for the majority of the story, its just a massive put off. I get the premise of it with him being a child of the empress and stuff, but i would of thoroughly enjoy it alot more he unlocked his memories of his past life when he got to a certain level of skill or power with magic. I have just never really enjoyed the whole genius baby thing, its a really over done concept with reincarnation novels. But all in all, i did enjoy it and keep up the work king!!

LV 2

Tangerqueen

Hiya! Attached is a breakdown of my review: Writing Quality 4/5: Noticed a few grammar errors here and there, some that I commented on, some that I didn't. I think some (like the missing period) should be catchable after a few proofreads. Update Stability 5/5: Not much to comment on there. Honestly the length of the chapters are super impressive. Story Development 4/5: I think you're aware of the issue since I noticed you mentioning this in the author's comments. I think it might be because I don't really read ML novels that much, but the first few chaps made me feel a bit overwhelmed. Especially with all the names being tossed around, some parts took a few rereads for me to get a grasp on what was happening. Character Design 5/5: Seems super detailed so far! World Background 5/5: This category took my breath away! The first few paragraphs describing the world literally gave me chills ahahaha. Your descriptions are probably your greatest strength, so I would say try to couple that with the action and the info a bit more so that there's more of a balance. Overall super good moods you set! Like it definitely matched what I expected after seeing your cover lel

LV 4

Old_Soul

I've been silently reading this novel and I'm impressed by the world that the Author is creating here. The characters are also likeable. if u r looking for a novel to read that has Magic, reincarnated MC, good worldbuilding, characters and progression then read this.

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GERALDO_BRITO

I NEED MORE

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Felipe_Aguiar

miss the updates

LV 4

sst_154

Hey poor reader here, I only read till chapter 100. For what ive read so far this novel has the same potential as some of the top 10 spots in the webnovel rankings. Great worldbuilding and characterdevelopement. no infodumps or passages that bored me whatsoever. At this point im really looking forward to where this story goes. It definitly deserves a lot more attention than it got up till now. Hope my comment can get other people to give this great story a try too, you wont be dissapointed.

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DaoistzZztKO

This book is great! (I am trying to get free chapters)! lllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll llllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllv

LV 2

Felipe_Aguiar

the start is not that good and the way that knowledge is so hard to get gives supreme magus vibes. The concept of magic in this world is weird in the sense that authorities are governing certain aspects of reality and the magus is only offering raw magic. Nevertheless the infusion of true meaning in specialities makes the novel system that much intriguing. Its fair to say this novel is snowballing in a sense that it only gets better and the writing quality in it self is top notch. I super recomend this and my only time being truly bored was the flashback monotous and extended experience that Evin had while sorting out his memories to the former authority

LV 2

Kinsamay

I think that the story has a god passing, and when they talk about thing like gore it is chill and not over dramatic and I like how they make past event have something to do with future events.

LV 15

OD_NM

I'm at chap 100 and I really like the novel so far. The plot, the story background, the characters, everthing is quite good. However, there's a thing about the story that I really dislike which is the age of the characters. I mean... having an infant fighting a bunch of bad guys is not very realistic, at least physically. I get that author already explain that mages mature really quick, but I still find it quite absurd for little children 2-4 years old to have the capabilities to fight not just commoners but other mages too. You could just add more time skips and get the story to officially start when the MC is about at least 8 yo or so, fighting bad guys at 8 yo is already a very fa growth spurt for me. The fight scenes are actually pretty good if I ignore the age.

LV 10

WriterForFun80085

꠸ ꪖꪑ ꪻꫝꫀ ꫀ᥊ρ ꪮᠻ ꪑꪗ ᠻ꠸ꪀᧁꫀ᥅. ᭙ꫀ᥇ꪀꪮꪜꫀꪶ ꠸ᦓ ꪑꪗ ᥇ꪮᦔꪗ, ꪖꪀᦔ ꫀ᥊ρ ꠸ᦓ ꪑꪗ ᥇ꪶꪮꪮᦔ. ꠸ ꫝꪖꪜꫀ ᥴ᥅ꫀꪖꪻꫀᦔ ꪮꪜꫀ᥅ ꪖ ꪻꫝꪮꪊᦓꪖꪀᦔ ꪊᦓꫀꪶꫀᦓᦓ ᥅ꫀꪜ꠸ꫀ᭙ᦓ. ꫝꪖꪜꫀ ᭙꠸ꪻꫝᦓꪻꪮꪮᦔ ρꪖ꠸ꪀ ꪻꪮ ᥴ᥅ꫀꪖꪻꫀ ꪑꪖꪀꪗ ᥅ꫀꪜ꠸ꫀ᭙ᦓ. ꪗꫀꪻ, ꪻꫝꪮᦓꫀ ᥅ꫀꪜ꠸ꫀ᭙ᦓ ᭙꠸ꪶꪶ ꪀꫀꪜꫀ᥅ ꫝꪮꪶᦔ ꪖꪀꪗꪻꫝ꠸ꪀᧁ. ᦓꪮ, ꪖᦓ ꠸ ρ᥅ꪖꪗ...... ꪊꪀꪶ꠸ꪑ꠸ꪻꫀᦔ ꫀ᥊ρ ᭙ꪮ᥅ᛕᦓ!!!

LV 13

lil_bitch

one of my fav reincarnation into fantasy/magic novels out there. immensely detailed and original magic system. proper character development where although the MC isn't perfect, he's far from being a wuss or a "beta".just read the first 10 chapter to get a feel of what the rest of the story is like.

LV 14

Jordan_Brock_4891

A great story overall. One of my favourite ones on the site. Start of the story is really interesting and well written, the character development of the MC and Arza is brilliant as well. Rith and the comics could do with more background but I'm sure thats coming later. Really enjoying it so far

LV 10

sanehuman

Wheres the comedy tag? I'm getting some good laughs. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------