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Sandy_Sweeney

RECOVERY MASTERS//CRYPTO RECOVERY. There are scam recovery firms that can help you Recover Your Funds from Unregulated Online Investment Scams.My recommendation will be Recovery Masters,USA based group of hackers specialized in lost crypto/funds recovery.They rescued my life retirement funds from an online scammer.Any victim in search of an ethical hacker,Contact Recovery Masters and have your funds recovered back. Contact Info; Mail (Recoverymasters( @) email.cz).

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Bruno_Shaw

SCAM VICTIMS RECOVERS THEIR MONEY THROUGH RECOVERY MASTERS: To anyone who has been a scam victim and you been looking for Means and ways to recover your lost Assets or lost Btc/Crypto Wallets I must recommend Recovery Masters a reputable Crypto recovery company Helping Victims recover their lost Crypto and providing safe ways to protect your wallets from online fraudsters.I must say before my 2.5Btc in my Mycelium wallet was recovered by these expertise I was drowning in depression and had lost all hope in life too.To anyone in shame of losing your Crypto share your issue with the group and have your funds recovered. for more info email: (Recoverymaster at email.cz )

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Armin_Waltz

RECOVER YOUR SCAMMED BITCOIN WITH RECOVERY MASTERS Hi. Please be wise, do not make the same mistake I had made in the past, I was a victim of bitcoin scam, I saw a glamorous review showering praises and marketing an investment firm, I reached out to them on what their contracts are, and I invested $55,000, which I was promised to get my first 15% profit in weeks, when it’s time to get my profits, I got to know the company was bogus, they kept asking me to invest more and I ran out of patience then requested to have my money back, they refused to answer nor refund my funds, not until a friend of mine introduced me to Recovery Masters, so I reached out and after tabling my complaints, they were swift to action and within 36 hours I got back my funds with the due profit. I couldn’t contain the joy in me. I urge you guys to reach out to Recovery Masters on their support email: (Recoverymasters @ email.cz) or WhatsAp +1(551) 202-23-35 ) and don"t forget to say Armin Waltz Recommended you

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Monty_Kay

Contact a Professional Hacker Recovery Masters I Saw A Post Online Talking About RecoveryMasters Who Helped A Lady Get Proofs From Her Cheating Partners Phone, Without Any Physical Touch Which Means It Was Done Remotely, I Then Tried It Out And To My Surprise they Blew Me Off With The Very Type Of Results I Needed I Was Able To See My Spouse's WhatsApp Messages Snapchat Messages Facebook Messages And See His Call Logs And Also Listen To His Incoming Calls As Well You Should Give them A Try Also Contact them through email “ Recoverymasters @ email.cz  ” reach them   For Any Type Of Hacking job Funds recovering , Bitcoin recovering , recover what a ripper took from you contact them  WhatsApp +1(551) 202-23-35 

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Sophie_Duken

RECOVER LOST FUNDS,//RECOVERY MASTERS Many decisions made by top notch investors made many of them fall into the wrong hands, I was once a victim too After being persuaded to invest $197,600 in a bogus Investment platform. I was however in disbelief after finding out this was all scam.I almost lost hope since all this funds was my last savings, but with the recommendations and referral gotten from friends, I was able to retrieve back my funds in a span of 42 hrs.Thanks to the expertise Recovery Masters on email address (Recoverymasters @ email.cz ) they were exceptionally awesome.

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Scott_Wellstone

LOST CRYPTO/ETH/FUNDS RECOVERY EXPERTS;;;RECOVERY MASTERS I happened to fall for a crypto currency scam trick Late last year.Through a phishing scam, a Facebook imposter convinced me of howI would gain a large sum of profit from an authorized crypto company that he claimed helped traders invest and gain large profits. They ripped me of and made a way off with $114000 woth of crypto.I was in disbelief and discomfort as this was my hard earned funds.After reading positive articles and online testimonies about a licensed group of hackers RECOVERY MASTERS of how they are experts in crypto/btc recovery and any form of hacking.After hitting a conversation with them,they were able to recover back my funds.As a form of appreciation this was the best I could do for them. Contact; Email (Recoverymasters @ email.cz). Don't forget to mention Scott referred you.

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Bella_Jean_3383

HOW TO RECOVER LOST CRYPTOCURRENCY/CONTACT ULTIMATE HACKER JERRY Hi everyone, my name Bellajeans, here's my recommendation................. Ever been a victim of fake investment, trading or any cryptocurrency scam, don’t hesitate to reach out to Ultimatehackerjerry@seznam. Cz) as fast as possible to help recover all your funds. He's truly the best most legit and professional hacker i've ever come across he's a licensed private investigator, very fast and reliable no wonder everyone talks good of his professionalism, he saved me from almost dying of depression after a huge lost to an online investment, Thanks to ultimate hacker Jerry he's a God sent, If anyone ever needs a legit hacker ill will always recommend Jerry... You can also WhatsApp him on (+1 520 -329-0320) The customer care service is very encouraging & welcoming, my conversation with Jerry alone gave me great hope of getting my coins back and in a very short time he recovered my BTC. Thanks

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Christine_Leo_2212

CRYPTOCURRENCY SCAM / FRAUD TRACING & RECOVERY: I had 6.02 BTC in one of my Bitcoin wallets that I thought was lost for good. I’d sent my laptop to a variety of top data recovery firms, but with no luck. After seeing a positive comment about Ultimate Hacker Jerry on “Morning Gossips ”, I decided to try to recover my wallet one last time. Ultimate Hacker Jerry was very responsive, and he recovered my wallet in just a few hours. Ultimate Hacker Jerry acted honorably and in accordance with our agreement. I would highly recommend using Ultimate Hacker Jerry services. He recovers any lost Cryptocurrency no matter how you lost it . Scammed or lost password he will recover it. mail: (Ultimatehackerjerry@seznam. cz)

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Shawn_Eric

CRYPTO SCAM FUND RECOVERY - RECOVERY SCAMMED MONEY BACK: Hello everyone.... Today I'm talking about Cryptocurrency recovery expert, Ultimate hacker Jerry. My Trüst Wallet was swiped, and I lost all of my cryptocurrency investments. I'm not sure if this was due to a phishing link I clicked or not; all I knew is that my wallet was lost. I decided to speak with Ultimate Hacker Jerry after reading numerous reviews of him. I'm happy to report that he didn't let me down. He found all of the missing tokens along with my cryptocurrencies (btc & ethereum), which at the time were valued at roughly $8.6 million total. His fee was reasonable, plus he kept me updated at every turn. Ultimate Hacker Jerry can be reached by Email at ( UltimateHackerJerry@seznam. cz ) I gave him my word that I would personally endorse him for a job well done. Respectfully Shawn Eric, Co-anchor FoxNews © Copyright2022

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Wilder_1602

SCAM VICTIMS RECOVERS THEIR MONEY THROUGH ULTIMATE HACKER JERRY:>  Ultimate Hacker Jerry currently collecting funds back for all victims who fall into scams, Hurry up and contact him explain your situation to him he will help you in all crypto scam recovery funds, bitcoin scam recovery, investment scam, mobile spy and hacking. Contact info; Email:(Ultimatehackerjerry@seznam. cz) When you require his service please say  Wilder Newton referred you Local Guide; Since 2014

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Yggdrasil_

This book is amazing, keep going!  Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?

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NeuerGamer

one cannot give 0 stars, so I'll call em 0-4 instead of 1-5 only reviewing chapter 1-6 since I dropped this, but do not regret reading it Writing Quality 3/4 one is given for being readable, good spelling and no major grammar issues (none in this book - check) two for having a flow and no major plotholes (this reads like a coherent story - check) three for being a story that catches my interest, for example unique elements/plot hooks, great humor... (author claimed to be 10-ish during the time he wrote this, this star is given as recognition and encouragement, this is beyond the level of a 10 years old child) four is given for the wow-effect, overall outstanding works or works with something very unique (not given) I currently do not have such a precise system for the other aspects, so take this as an overall first impression. now to the other points Story Development 1/4 feeling a bit rushed, but do be progressing nicely. no plot twists so far. remember, this is a chapter 1-6 review so maybe the story took some twists and turns later, I wouldn't know, but so far it has been moving in one line, fast. this isn't good, but it's not a big deal either since, as I said, beginning so still one star for having a proper story go on, just no more. don't feel discouraged. Character Design 2/4 characters seem to not lack depth, but you did not show it properly. this is more of an overall writing quality issue I will adress later (as I said, 3/4 writing as recognition and encouragement) but for now, remember that while your characters have emotions and are related to each other to the point where they don't feel like paper, only a quick glance was thrown at said emotions to push the story further. people are largely made up of small things and interactions, not just their major plot points. show more little and insignificant things that make us human! Update Stability 4/4 am late to the party but looked good by the chapter data. book finished, no complaints World Background 0/4 severely lacks depth. again, this is a chapter 1-6 review, but I basically learned nothing about the world. there are some nations, a social problem to introduce the bad guys and some talk and events, but everything is just to introduce the cast. it does not feel life like. you told a story, and the world is a quick sketch, a few lines drawn to keep it together. not a real world. SUMMARY/NOTE you got talent, and lack experience (which I can't blame you for). to write a good story, put more effort into the setting. treat your characters as real people and your world as a real world. spend a long time expanding it. come up with your world map, history, legends and common traits of people in different regions, based on the environment. create multiple groups of interests, both for the main plot and side stories, some more and some less influential and some seemingly irrelevant. you may never need them but they are part of the backgrount. dive into politics, economics, disasters, ideologies, agriculture and anything else that shapes places. put together a puzzle. historic events lead to each other, people are changed by history and create new history on top of it. make a world come to life. create complicated traits for even the most insignificant of side characters so you know how they would act in a situation, as a real person. try roleplaying as your characters in front of a mirrow. personality isn't static, let people grow with their experience and sometimes fail or break down. if you like all your characters, if you put enough effort in, not even you may know how an encounter ends before you get to it. chain reaction are great, make use of them. if you want to get somewhere, change the setting until it fits your goal in a way that makes sense. the list goes on. in short, create a world to tell a story in instead of creating a world around a set story. at some point, most details come naturally. it's a lot of work, but very rewarding, and worlds can be used for many stories if you keep expanding them and progressing their timeline. as for writing the plot. slow down, take in the surroundings. no need to jump from one event to the next. people travel (tho not to long, or you end up like lord of the rings - but some scenes here and there can contain travel). they hold complex discussions and thoughts. don't just show what you need to dump information relevant to the plot. let them live their life as living beings. let them observe their surroundings. describe the scenery, the wind, temperature, smell, taste, flight of birds, swaying of trees... the beautiful reflection in a lake, the clouds and stars... write different kinds of scenes, and come up with ways to dumo information on the reader without destroying the immersion. it is ok to sometimes tell the reader more or less directly, but keep it a minor part of what you do. let your characters inform each other, argue and bicker with emotions getting in the way and slowing things down. let your protagonist read things. make a tv announcement they watch, let them miss what comes in the radio to foreshadown for the readers while the character is clueless. you can also include some media, such as a segment of a book or article from your world, instead of a chapter to give your readers some background information while keeping the imersion stable. find your path, find your rhythm, but slow the heck down. make it a world where things happen, not just events in some empty, colourless space. ok, I am getting tired (it's late at my place) so I'll just stop here. if I screwed up let me know, if you have questions I'll answer them, sorry for any typos and any other mess I may have caused. this is not the holy grail, take this mess as some inspiration to find your own way. do things your way, all I'm saying is this needs more background and detail on many levels but given you're a kid or yound teenager that much is already beyond impressive. take your time, to grow and to write and in general. peace

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Seulil2061

Hey guys I'm happy to announce that my book got redemption code and every account will get a total of 100 coins. If anyone's interested please dm me in discord, the iid s Seulil2061#8290

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DemonsDescent

The story is amazing. There are no more words for it. The only problem is that it's not recieving the amount of love it deserves. We should vote for it so that it gets its deserved exposure.

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loveredroses

even though I am at the early stage of reading .this story is soooo nice. I liked the story so much .thank you author for such a beautiful story .....keep writing more

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Cee_Breezy

good good novel , I mean it's full of mysteries and it's perfect for reading and relaxing.. . . ............................................

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ohhdarling

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Stephanie_Bolieu

Interesting scifi kinda book. kinda pulls you in for a Good minute These books are Definitely getTing expensive sInce im iMpatIent and want to read it all now

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bibiyenini

In every genre you would have imagined, this sci-fi novel would be that one of the rare gems you have to read! Not only it will be compelling and get you intrigue, but it will also be one of those novels you can root about! One thing I can suggest was that much orderly precise and formally organize the synopsis. Leave a quote that will trigger the curiosity of the readers and they will easily plunge into the story with knowing what your overview was about!

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tomoya_sensei

This is an amazing story, and post-apocalyptic kinda settings are really my favorite really awesome. loved it a lot. The world building is also cool

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Aaliyah_Stark_

This is good. I just read through it and I found it has interesting story formation. PLEASE DO KEEP UPDATING SINCE THE STORY IS COMING OUT OK. Bring in plot twists and you will hit the top for sure. 👍😇

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Hashleey1986

the story and the character design are good , try to change the synopsis except that everything is really good. very well good luck author I'm looking forward to read more chapters

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Pine_Pro

I like the premise of the book, it is promising. However I notice many things that should be mention, like for example the second chapter were a bunch of colonels were talking, I think the author should give them on the specific country where they from. Also, the book is set on the future so I might be expecting a lot of world building since we know little about the book and what countries are participated. Overall, the book is nice and it is quite refreshing to see a script like writing style and shows who is talking to or being talked to. Anyway, kudos for the author and best of luck!

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Dawn_in_dark

This is amazing sci-fiction I have read. I'm actually not in this genre but still liked it very much. It is interesting creation. Keep it up author. Like to read more. Make sure to give regular updates. All the best ❤️❤️

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Aryna_Stan

It isn't everyday you bump into a scifi book like this, it's a really awesome book and even though the book is still at it's early stages you can tell that it has a lot of potential. Good work Author!!

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Dvanzy6

This is a very great novel. I like the plot and drama surrounding it in the first parts and the narrations of the story made it more dramatic in the feeling. If you're interested in teens fiction with a unique storyline, then this is for you. :)

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Sandy_Sweeney

RECOVERY MASTERS//CRYPTO RECOVERY. There are scam recovery firms that can help you Recover Your Funds from Unregulated Online Investment Scams.My recommendation will be Recovery Masters,USA based group of hackers specialized in lost crypto/funds recovery.They rescued my life retirement funds from an online scammer.Any victim in search of an ethical hacker,Contact Recovery Masters and have your funds recovered back. Contact Info; Mail (Recoverymasters( @) email.cz).

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Bruno_Shaw

SCAM VICTIMS RECOVERS THEIR MONEY THROUGH RECOVERY MASTERS: To anyone who has been a scam victim and you been looking for Means and ways to recover your lost Assets or lost Btc/Crypto Wallets I must recommend Recovery Masters a reputable Crypto recovery company Helping Victims recover their lost Crypto and providing safe ways to protect your wallets from online fraudsters.I must say before my 2.5Btc in my Mycelium wallet was recovered by these expertise I was drowning in depression and had lost all hope in life too.To anyone in shame of losing your Crypto share your issue with the group and have your funds recovered. for more info email: (Recoverymaster at email.cz )

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Armin_Waltz

RECOVER YOUR SCAMMED BITCOIN WITH RECOVERY MASTERS Hi. Please be wise, do not make the same mistake I had made in the past, I was a victim of bitcoin scam, I saw a glamorous review showering praises and marketing an investment firm, I reached out to them on what their contracts are, and I invested $55,000, which I was promised to get my first 15% profit in weeks, when it’s time to get my profits, I got to know the company was bogus, they kept asking me to invest more and I ran out of patience then requested to have my money back, they refused to answer nor refund my funds, not until a friend of mine introduced me to Recovery Masters, so I reached out and after tabling my complaints, they were swift to action and within 36 hours I got back my funds with the due profit. I couldn’t contain the joy in me. I urge you guys to reach out to Recovery Masters on their support email: (Recoverymasters @ email.cz) or WhatsAp +1(551) 202-23-35 ) and don"t forget to say Armin Waltz Recommended you

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Monty_Kay

Contact a Professional Hacker Recovery Masters I Saw A Post Online Talking About RecoveryMasters Who Helped A Lady Get Proofs From Her Cheating Partners Phone, Without Any Physical Touch Which Means It Was Done Remotely, I Then Tried It Out And To My Surprise they Blew Me Off With The Very Type Of Results I Needed I Was Able To See My Spouse's WhatsApp Messages Snapchat Messages Facebook Messages And See His Call Logs And Also Listen To His Incoming Calls As Well You Should Give them A Try Also Contact them through email “ Recoverymasters @ email.cz  ” reach them   For Any Type Of Hacking job Funds recovering , Bitcoin recovering , recover what a ripper took from you contact them  WhatsApp +1(551) 202-23-35 

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Sophie_Duken

RECOVER LOST FUNDS,//RECOVERY MASTERS Many decisions made by top notch investors made many of them fall into the wrong hands, I was once a victim too After being persuaded to invest $197,600 in a bogus Investment platform. I was however in disbelief after finding out this was all scam.I almost lost hope since all this funds was my last savings, but with the recommendations and referral gotten from friends, I was able to retrieve back my funds in a span of 42 hrs.Thanks to the expertise Recovery Masters on email address (Recoverymasters @ email.cz ) they were exceptionally awesome.

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Scott_Wellstone

LOST CRYPTO/ETH/FUNDS RECOVERY EXPERTS;;;RECOVERY MASTERS I happened to fall for a crypto currency scam trick Late last year.Through a phishing scam, a Facebook imposter convinced me of howI would gain a large sum of profit from an authorized crypto company that he claimed helped traders invest and gain large profits. They ripped me of and made a way off with $114000 woth of crypto.I was in disbelief and discomfort as this was my hard earned funds.After reading positive articles and online testimonies about a licensed group of hackers RECOVERY MASTERS of how they are experts in crypto/btc recovery and any form of hacking.After hitting a conversation with them,they were able to recover back my funds.As a form of appreciation this was the best I could do for them. Contact; Email (Recoverymasters @ email.cz). Don't forget to mention Scott referred you.

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Bella_Jean_3383

HOW TO RECOVER LOST CRYPTOCURRENCY/CONTACT ULTIMATE HACKER JERRY Hi everyone, my name Bellajeans, here's my recommendation................. Ever been a victim of fake investment, trading or any cryptocurrency scam, don’t hesitate to reach out to Ultimatehackerjerry@seznam. Cz) as fast as possible to help recover all your funds. He's truly the best most legit and professional hacker i've ever come across he's a licensed private investigator, very fast and reliable no wonder everyone talks good of his professionalism, he saved me from almost dying of depression after a huge lost to an online investment, Thanks to ultimate hacker Jerry he's a God sent, If anyone ever needs a legit hacker ill will always recommend Jerry... You can also WhatsApp him on (+1 520 -329-0320) The customer care service is very encouraging & welcoming, my conversation with Jerry alone gave me great hope of getting my coins back and in a very short time he recovered my BTC. Thanks

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Christine_Leo_2212

CRYPTOCURRENCY SCAM / FRAUD TRACING & RECOVERY: I had 6.02 BTC in one of my Bitcoin wallets that I thought was lost for good. I’d sent my laptop to a variety of top data recovery firms, but with no luck. After seeing a positive comment about Ultimate Hacker Jerry on “Morning Gossips ”, I decided to try to recover my wallet one last time. Ultimate Hacker Jerry was very responsive, and he recovered my wallet in just a few hours. Ultimate Hacker Jerry acted honorably and in accordance with our agreement. I would highly recommend using Ultimate Hacker Jerry services. He recovers any lost Cryptocurrency no matter how you lost it . Scammed or lost password he will recover it. mail: (Ultimatehackerjerry@seznam. cz)

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Shawn_Eric

CRYPTO SCAM FUND RECOVERY - RECOVERY SCAMMED MONEY BACK: Hello everyone.... Today I'm talking about Cryptocurrency recovery expert, Ultimate hacker Jerry. My Trüst Wallet was swiped, and I lost all of my cryptocurrency investments. I'm not sure if this was due to a phishing link I clicked or not; all I knew is that my wallet was lost. I decided to speak with Ultimate Hacker Jerry after reading numerous reviews of him. I'm happy to report that he didn't let me down. He found all of the missing tokens along with my cryptocurrencies (btc & ethereum), which at the time were valued at roughly $8.6 million total. His fee was reasonable, plus he kept me updated at every turn. Ultimate Hacker Jerry can be reached by Email at ( UltimateHackerJerry@seznam. cz ) I gave him my word that I would personally endorse him for a job well done. Respectfully Shawn Eric, Co-anchor FoxNews © Copyright2022

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Wilder_1602

SCAM VICTIMS RECOVERS THEIR MONEY THROUGH ULTIMATE HACKER JERRY:>  Ultimate Hacker Jerry currently collecting funds back for all victims who fall into scams, Hurry up and contact him explain your situation to him he will help you in all crypto scam recovery funds, bitcoin scam recovery, investment scam, mobile spy and hacking. Contact info; Email:(Ultimatehackerjerry@seznam. cz) When you require his service please say  Wilder Newton referred you Local Guide; Since 2014

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Yggdrasil_

This book is amazing, keep going!  Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?

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NeuerGamer

one cannot give 0 stars, so I'll call em 0-4 instead of 1-5 only reviewing chapter 1-6 since I dropped this, but do not regret reading it Writing Quality 3/4 one is given for being readable, good spelling and no major grammar issues (none in this book - check) two for having a flow and no major plotholes (this reads like a coherent story - check) three for being a story that catches my interest, for example unique elements/plot hooks, great humor... (author claimed to be 10-ish during the time he wrote this, this star is given as recognition and encouragement, this is beyond the level of a 10 years old child) four is given for the wow-effect, overall outstanding works or works with something very unique (not given) I currently do not have such a precise system for the other aspects, so take this as an overall first impression. now to the other points Story Development 1/4 feeling a bit rushed, but do be progressing nicely. no plot twists so far. remember, this is a chapter 1-6 review so maybe the story took some twists and turns later, I wouldn't know, but so far it has been moving in one line, fast. this isn't good, but it's not a big deal either since, as I said, beginning so still one star for having a proper story go on, just no more. don't feel discouraged. Character Design 2/4 characters seem to not lack depth, but you did not show it properly. this is more of an overall writing quality issue I will adress later (as I said, 3/4 writing as recognition and encouragement) but for now, remember that while your characters have emotions and are related to each other to the point where they don't feel like paper, only a quick glance was thrown at said emotions to push the story further. people are largely made up of small things and interactions, not just their major plot points. show more little and insignificant things that make us human! Update Stability 4/4 am late to the party but looked good by the chapter data. book finished, no complaints World Background 0/4 severely lacks depth. again, this is a chapter 1-6 review, but I basically learned nothing about the world. there are some nations, a social problem to introduce the bad guys and some talk and events, but everything is just to introduce the cast. it does not feel life like. you told a story, and the world is a quick sketch, a few lines drawn to keep it together. not a real world. SUMMARY/NOTE you got talent, and lack experience (which I can't blame you for). to write a good story, put more effort into the setting. treat your characters as real people and your world as a real world. spend a long time expanding it. come up with your world map, history, legends and common traits of people in different regions, based on the environment. create multiple groups of interests, both for the main plot and side stories, some more and some less influential and some seemingly irrelevant. you may never need them but they are part of the backgrount. dive into politics, economics, disasters, ideologies, agriculture and anything else that shapes places. put together a puzzle. historic events lead to each other, people are changed by history and create new history on top of it. make a world come to life. create complicated traits for even the most insignificant of side characters so you know how they would act in a situation, as a real person. try roleplaying as your characters in front of a mirrow. personality isn't static, let people grow with their experience and sometimes fail or break down. if you like all your characters, if you put enough effort in, not even you may know how an encounter ends before you get to it. chain reaction are great, make use of them. if you want to get somewhere, change the setting until it fits your goal in a way that makes sense. the list goes on. in short, create a world to tell a story in instead of creating a world around a set story. at some point, most details come naturally. it's a lot of work, but very rewarding, and worlds can be used for many stories if you keep expanding them and progressing their timeline. as for writing the plot. slow down, take in the surroundings. no need to jump from one event to the next. people travel (tho not to long, or you end up like lord of the rings - but some scenes here and there can contain travel). they hold complex discussions and thoughts. don't just show what you need to dump information relevant to the plot. let them live their life as living beings. let them observe their surroundings. describe the scenery, the wind, temperature, smell, taste, flight of birds, swaying of trees... the beautiful reflection in a lake, the clouds and stars... write different kinds of scenes, and come up with ways to dumo information on the reader without destroying the immersion. it is ok to sometimes tell the reader more or less directly, but keep it a minor part of what you do. let your characters inform each other, argue and bicker with emotions getting in the way and slowing things down. let your protagonist read things. make a tv announcement they watch, let them miss what comes in the radio to foreshadown for the readers while the character is clueless. you can also include some media, such as a segment of a book or article from your world, instead of a chapter to give your readers some background information while keeping the imersion stable. find your path, find your rhythm, but slow the heck down. make it a world where things happen, not just events in some empty, colourless space. ok, I am getting tired (it's late at my place) so I'll just stop here. if I screwed up let me know, if you have questions I'll answer them, sorry for any typos and any other mess I may have caused. this is not the holy grail, take this mess as some inspiration to find your own way. do things your way, all I'm saying is this needs more background and detail on many levels but given you're a kid or yound teenager that much is already beyond impressive. take your time, to grow and to write and in general. peace

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Seulil2061

Hey guys I'm happy to announce that my book got redemption code and every account will get a total of 100 coins. If anyone's interested please dm me in discord, the iid s Seulil2061#8290

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DemonsDescent

The story is amazing. There are no more words for it. The only problem is that it's not recieving the amount of love it deserves. We should vote for it so that it gets its deserved exposure.

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loveredroses

even though I am at the early stage of reading .this story is soooo nice. I liked the story so much .thank you author for such a beautiful story .....keep writing more

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Cee_Breezy

good good novel , I mean it's full of mysteries and it's perfect for reading and relaxing.. . . ............................................

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ohhdarling

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CharLi3001

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Ami_Moro

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Stephanie_Bolieu

Interesting scifi kinda book. kinda pulls you in for a Good minute These books are Definitely getTing expensive sInce im iMpatIent and want to read it all now

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bibiyenini

In every genre you would have imagined, this sci-fi novel would be that one of the rare gems you have to read! Not only it will be compelling and get you intrigue, but it will also be one of those novels you can root about! One thing I can suggest was that much orderly precise and formally organize the synopsis. Leave a quote that will trigger the curiosity of the readers and they will easily plunge into the story with knowing what your overview was about!

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tomoya_sensei

This is an amazing story, and post-apocalyptic kinda settings are really my favorite really awesome. loved it a lot. The world building is also cool

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Aaliyah_Stark_

This is good. I just read through it and I found it has interesting story formation. PLEASE DO KEEP UPDATING SINCE THE STORY IS COMING OUT OK. Bring in plot twists and you will hit the top for sure. 👍😇

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Hashleey1986

the story and the character design are good , try to change the synopsis except that everything is really good. very well good luck author I'm looking forward to read more chapters

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Pine_Pro

I like the premise of the book, it is promising. However I notice many things that should be mention, like for example the second chapter were a bunch of colonels were talking, I think the author should give them on the specific country where they from. Also, the book is set on the future so I might be expecting a lot of world building since we know little about the book and what countries are participated. Overall, the book is nice and it is quite refreshing to see a script like writing style and shows who is talking to or being talked to. Anyway, kudos for the author and best of luck!

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Dawn_in_dark

This is amazing sci-fiction I have read. I'm actually not in this genre but still liked it very much. It is interesting creation. Keep it up author. Like to read more. Make sure to give regular updates. All the best ❤️❤️

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Aryna_Stan

It isn't everyday you bump into a scifi book like this, it's a really awesome book and even though the book is still at it's early stages you can tell that it has a lot of potential. Good work Author!!

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Dvanzy6

This is a very great novel. I like the plot and drama surrounding it in the first parts and the narrations of the story made it more dramatic in the feeling. If you're interested in teens fiction with a unique storyline, then this is for you. :)

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