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dare i say this is one of my faves on this platform!!! I love the family dynamics with Zane's family so much I'm so invested in this novel hope to seem more
Fantastic story and world building, a few grammatical errors, but not to the point you can't understand whats happening. The main protagonist is written well, no complaints here. The only thing I have a CON about is the uploading of chapters. The story is really great but we only get uploaded chapters every like few months, other than that really amazing novel. I will not be going into detail as to what makes it amazing and great, you'll have to read and find that out yourself!
Loving this book so much. it's very intriguing, interesting and funny too🔥🔥👌👌😍😍😍😍. would love if the author just updated it though😩😩
it's an awesome book👍😍but no update did the author drop it or something do tell if someone know 🤦
Of all the BL novels that I had read, this one was my first and is my favorite. Seeing how Zane develops and grow thru his life, how he come to accept himself and opening up to other is very very warming. Zane is a scheming and cunning man, such people will usually cut off most of their emotions, especially people with such trauma like Zane. Like in one of the chapter, he’s constantly ignores his own suffering n trauma as he think his pain is nothing to mention and other have it worse. That’s really unhealthy, really an unhealthy mentality to have… I’m really glad that Phoenix was there for him tho, hopefully they’ll open up to each other more soon🥰🥹🥰🥹🥰🥹 I’ll definitely say that their development especially the Mc is epically cool n smart. Hopefully he’ll use his enchanting skills to make lots of tools n a few trump cards, even disposable ones are fine. Just so mc will be a bit more safer n prepared for various situations. Magical tools that’ll help him(maybe automatic following and attacking/defending turret smth smth) devices that’ll protect him giving layers of safety ✨🍀✨🍀✨🍀✨ It’s also very very great seeing his relationship with his family, the father n Xavier/Jasper are so very warm in some aspect. Xavier pls be nicer to Zane, Jasper pls be more sane towards Zane. The father is so caring and heartwarming, tho he can be such a worry wart which is kinda cute haha. 🥰😊🥰😊🥰😊 The grandpapa, elders n some others on the other hand can go **** ***, *你这个***，去***你自己**吧. I really hope to see more Zane relationship with his classmates but it’s okay, I believe once school starts for real again for Zane, things will happen👀. Zane will definitely have fun sca- I mean interacting with them hehe 👀 Going back to Zane n Phoenix, their relationship is just cute, warm n very very hot 🥵. Some chapter are deserving of being spicy. Tho I really hope for another session of Zane topping(tho Zane is such a bottom haha, still him topping every now and then is just so hot), and maybe with some edition of elixirs n toys hehe. Maybe in one smexy night, they’ll switch after each round hehehe. It will be so very hot n spicy lol 🥰🥵🥰🥵🥰🥵 PS. I recommend toys n outfits for their special times hehe😏
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Really enjoying this book. Love the characters and the story is very interesting. Only downside is I can't read it more often due to updates but it is worth waiting for the new chapters. 💯 worth it
So the title caught my attention and I thought I would just take a look...and binged all the current chapters in 3 days. I love it and can't wait for more .
I can't wait to read other books by the author. Mr. Author sir 🫡. You are doing well [img=update][img=recommend]
I really quite like the novel, the story telling, the characters. If you’re on the edge, I would recommend you giving this one a shot :) Now I’ll get back to reading.
Im sorry i just love this story??? First actual novel ive spent fp on in a while and totally worth it
Really loving this story so far. It has me very intrigued to see how everything is going to pan out. I look forward to the romance between some couples that I see have potential and of course the mc and ml. Keep going author sama!
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This is a really good book. Honestly, I haven't enjoyed a novel this much in a very long time! The author's story taste, system design and protagonist are all very original and charming. It just hits all the sweet spots. The only flaw is that there's not enough chapters! I binged all available chapters already and would have loved to read lots more. Keep it up, author! :)
It's a good story. The writing is good, I know some people may judge it slightly for the formatting but it works for me. The updates are consistent and the world-building is awesome. The start of the story is interesting from what I can tell. There is a bit of something that's missing and I'm not totally sure what it is. Perhaps there should be more of a focus on the characters and their diagloue. I know we see the riddles and things like that but the early chapters didn't really get me as attached to the people in the story. It got me more attached to the universe, but you really need both for a top-tier story. Still well-done author, this is one of the better Webnovel stories out there. You have a lot of potential and you are creative; that matters more than anything. I look forward to seeing you progress as a writer. I'd also appreciate if you checked out "Avatar: Macai's Journey" if you have the time. Cheers
Hey! Your book is really interesting. However, I do see some grammatical mistakes, and further editing can definitely make the story better. The story development is very interesting, the suspense building very meticulous. Good Job!
🙂😜 GOOD STUFF I really enjoyed this novel... the prologue is a fantastic way to immerse the reader into the story and get a smidgen of future Zane before the story actually begins. I enjoyed the riddles and the first chapters of character development... English is good, plot is good, no complains here..definitely worth reading this is really good.. . Keep it up author,
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This novel is... amazing! The plot is interesting and the writing style is also nice. I especially liked how the author described some bits of the MC's past, while not revealing a lot in the prologue. It makes you want to read and know more. I'll definitely continue reading it. Good work author, keep it up.
I've only gotten a bit into chapter two but it seems to be a well designed series. The design detail and multitude of different locations mentioned makes it seem like you've take a lot of time designing the world. Good job, I like the writing.
Fascinating read. The writer paints a vivid picture for the readers and the story moves along steadily. The title is alluring, the plot is compelling and the lead is intriguing enough to keep the readers interested. A must read.
Interesting with good number of twists!! The plot is well planned and written. The background description is written sufficiently, making us visual while reading. The character design to the all the characters is done equally. The quality of writing too improved chapter by chapter. Wonderful storyline!! Keep Going!!
Well done, seriously. I only read the beginning, but I am actually looking forward to read this story when I'll have more time to do so. Added it to my library. The only single thing I could complain about, were a few misspellings, and one or two words, were I could tell you meant something different, just somehow wrote down the wrong word. A simple proof read would do it wonders. Seriously, and I actually mean it, well done.
The story is way more interesting than I thought when I went into it. Other than grammatical errors the story is very well writing and it's something you can be proud of author-san.
Zane is the most attractive character yet! The style is very simple and fun to read. The plot is promising. As i move from chapter to the other you make expect many plot twists and surprises. I hope this story exceeds my imagination. It has so much potential. I am definitely waiting for the next chapter! You're a great author, never forget that.
Your story is great. I really love your writing style. Definitely gonna keep reading. Keep up the good work!
amazing work, great concept and amazing description. I love the storyline, I always love a good adventure novel. keep it up author your work is great ❤️❤️❤️
First off: Zane, cool name. I like it already lol. The MC's a bit interesting. He's definitely not a hero, but he's not really a villain (anti-hero) either. I haven't seen many MCs like this, so this was a fresh twist. The plot has really just began, but I want more chapters already! Keep it up, author!
Interesting story concept and it not at all predictable, it made me read further. Interesting system you've made and the world building is nice. Keep making more chapters!
This is the second book I've read from the author and it is also as interesting as the first one. I added both to my library. Review proper Writing Quality. Excellent. So far as I read the chapters there are no g-errors. Or if there was some that I didn't notice maybe it is because I was engrossed reading. Stability of Updates. Quality over Quantity. That is what I could see in this story. Story Development. I admit. I'm a sucker with system and rebirth (though the male lead chose a different wish when I thought he would choose to back. I won't spoil anything other than that). For me, that was really a refreshing and interesting wish to have. Reading this one completely got me hooked. Character design. All the characters from the mc to the supporting have depths in their characters that made them district from each other which is great. World Background. Well detailed and described. Overall this book is already a great read to me. And I love how the author uses interesting methods to move his story. This one is through a diary and the other one is through a to-do list. 💕 Keep up the good work, author!
Interesting story and characters but quite lengthy in conversation. The character is having one conversation after another. Loved the butterfly effect portion and the world you have created. A bit complex but ambitious and great.
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Love this book tremendously so far. The main character is charming and plays cunningly with his smooth facade. The developing romance is endearing and the introduction in this magical world is well-developed. Definitely one of the gems in Webnovel!
dare i say this is one of my faves on this platform!!! I love the family dynamics with Zane's family so much I'm so invested in this novel hope to seem more
Fantastic story and world building, a few grammatical errors, but not to the point you can't understand whats happening. The main protagonist is written well, no complaints here. The only thing I have a CON about is the uploading of chapters. The story is really great but we only get uploaded chapters every like few months, other than that really amazing novel. I will not be going into detail as to what makes it amazing and great, you'll have to read and find that out yourself!
Loving this book so much. it's very intriguing, interesting and funny too🔥🔥👌👌😍😍😍😍. would love if the author just updated it though😩😩
it's an awesome book👍😍but no update did the author drop it or something do tell if someone know 🤦
Of all the BL novels that I had read, this one was my first and is my favorite. Seeing how Zane develops and grow thru his life, how he come to accept himself and opening up to other is very very warming. Zane is a scheming and cunning man, such people will usually cut off most of their emotions, especially people with such trauma like Zane. Like in one of the chapter, he’s constantly ignores his own suffering n trauma as he think his pain is nothing to mention and other have it worse. That’s really unhealthy, really an unhealthy mentality to have… I’m really glad that Phoenix was there for him tho, hopefully they’ll open up to each other more soon🥰🥹🥰🥹🥰🥹 I’ll definitely say that their development especially the Mc is epically cool n smart. Hopefully he’ll use his enchanting skills to make lots of tools n a few trump cards, even disposable ones are fine. Just so mc will be a bit more safer n prepared for various situations. Magical tools that’ll help him(maybe automatic following and attacking/defending turret smth smth) devices that’ll protect him giving layers of safety ✨🍀✨🍀✨🍀✨ It’s also very very great seeing his relationship with his family, the father n Xavier/Jasper are so very warm in some aspect. Xavier pls be nicer to Zane, Jasper pls be more sane towards Zane. The father is so caring and heartwarming, tho he can be such a worry wart which is kinda cute haha. 🥰😊🥰😊🥰😊 The grandpapa, elders n some others on the other hand can go **** ***, *你这个***，去***你自己**吧. I really hope to see more Zane relationship with his classmates but it’s okay, I believe once school starts for real again for Zane, things will happen👀. Zane will definitely have fun sca- I mean interacting with them hehe 👀 Going back to Zane n Phoenix, their relationship is just cute, warm n very very hot 🥵. Some chapter are deserving of being spicy. Tho I really hope for another session of Zane topping(tho Zane is such a bottom haha, still him topping every now and then is just so hot), and maybe with some edition of elixirs n toys hehe. Maybe in one smexy night, they’ll switch after each round hehehe. It will be so very hot n spicy lol 🥰🥵🥰🥵🥰🥵 PS. I recommend toys n outfits for their special times hehe😏
Membuka SPOILER Really enjoying this book. Love the characters and the story is very interesting. Only downside is I can't read it more often due to updates but it is worth waiting for the new chapters. 💯 worth it
So the title caught my attention and I thought I would just take a look...and binged all the current chapters in 3 days. I love it and can't wait for more .
I can't wait to read other books by the author. Mr. Author sir 🫡. You are doing well [img=update][img=recommend]
I really quite like the novel, the story telling, the characters. If you’re on the edge, I would recommend you giving this one a shot :) Now I’ll get back to reading.
Im sorry i just love this story??? First actual novel ive spent fp on in a while and totally worth it
Really loving this story so far. It has me very intrigued to see how everything is going to pan out. I look forward to the romance between some couples that I see have potential and of course the mc and ml. Keep going author sama!
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Membuka SPOILER This is a really good book. Honestly, I haven't enjoyed a novel this much in a very long time! The author's story taste, system design and protagonist are all very original and charming. It just hits all the sweet spots. The only flaw is that there's not enough chapters! I binged all available chapters already and would have loved to read lots more. Keep it up, author! :)
It's a good story. The writing is good, I know some people may judge it slightly for the formatting but it works for me. The updates are consistent and the world-building is awesome. The start of the story is interesting from what I can tell. There is a bit of something that's missing and I'm not totally sure what it is. Perhaps there should be more of a focus on the characters and their diagloue. I know we see the riddles and things like that but the early chapters didn't really get me as attached to the people in the story. It got me more attached to the universe, but you really need both for a top-tier story. Still well-done author, this is one of the better Webnovel stories out there. You have a lot of potential and you are creative; that matters more than anything. I look forward to seeing you progress as a writer. I'd also appreciate if you checked out "Avatar: Macai's Journey" if you have the time. Cheers
Hey! Your book is really interesting. However, I do see some grammatical mistakes, and further editing can definitely make the story better. The story development is very interesting, the suspense building very meticulous. Good Job!
🙂😜 GOOD STUFF I really enjoyed this novel... the prologue is a fantastic way to immerse the reader into the story and get a smidgen of future Zane before the story actually begins. I enjoyed the riddles and the first chapters of character development... English is good, plot is good, no complains here..definitely worth reading this is really good.. . Keep it up author,
Membuka SPOILER This novel is... amazing! The plot is interesting and the writing style is also nice. I especially liked how the author described some bits of the MC's past, while not revealing a lot in the prologue. It makes you want to read and know more. I'll definitely continue reading it. Good work author, keep it up.
I've only gotten a bit into chapter two but it seems to be a well designed series. The design detail and multitude of different locations mentioned makes it seem like you've take a lot of time designing the world. Good job, I like the writing.
Fascinating read. The writer paints a vivid picture for the readers and the story moves along steadily. The title is alluring, the plot is compelling and the lead is intriguing enough to keep the readers interested. A must read.
Interesting with good number of twists!! The plot is well planned and written. The background description is written sufficiently, making us visual while reading. The character design to the all the characters is done equally. The quality of writing too improved chapter by chapter. Wonderful storyline!! Keep Going!!
Well done, seriously. I only read the beginning, but I am actually looking forward to read this story when I'll have more time to do so. Added it to my library. The only single thing I could complain about, were a few misspellings, and one or two words, were I could tell you meant something different, just somehow wrote down the wrong word. A simple proof read would do it wonders. Seriously, and I actually mean it, well done.
The story is way more interesting than I thought when I went into it. Other than grammatical errors the story is very well writing and it's something you can be proud of author-san.
Zane is the most attractive character yet! The style is very simple and fun to read. The plot is promising. As i move from chapter to the other you make expect many plot twists and surprises. I hope this story exceeds my imagination. It has so much potential. I am definitely waiting for the next chapter! You're a great author, never forget that.
Your story is great. I really love your writing style. Definitely gonna keep reading. Keep up the good work!
amazing work, great concept and amazing description. I love the storyline, I always love a good adventure novel. keep it up author your work is great ❤️❤️❤️
First off: Zane, cool name. I like it already lol. The MC's a bit interesting. He's definitely not a hero, but he's not really a villain (anti-hero) either. I haven't seen many MCs like this, so this was a fresh twist. The plot has really just began, but I want more chapters already! Keep it up, author!
Interesting story concept and it not at all predictable, it made me read further. Interesting system you've made and the world building is nice. Keep making more chapters!
This is the second book I've read from the author and it is also as interesting as the first one. I added both to my library. Review proper Writing Quality. Excellent. So far as I read the chapters there are no g-errors. Or if there was some that I didn't notice maybe it is because I was engrossed reading. Stability of Updates. Quality over Quantity. That is what I could see in this story. Story Development. I admit. I'm a sucker with system and rebirth (though the male lead chose a different wish when I thought he would choose to back. I won't spoil anything other than that). For me, that was really a refreshing and interesting wish to have. Reading this one completely got me hooked. Character design. All the characters from the mc to the supporting have depths in their characters that made them district from each other which is great. World Background. Well detailed and described. Overall this book is already a great read to me. And I love how the author uses interesting methods to move his story. This one is through a diary and the other one is through a to-do list. 💕 Keep up the good work, author!
Interesting story and characters but quite lengthy in conversation. The character is having one conversation after another. Loved the butterfly effect portion and the world you have created. A bit complex but ambitious and great.
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Love this book tremendously so far. The main character is charming and plays cunningly with his smooth facade. The developing romance is endearing and the introduction in this magical world is well-developed. Definitely one of the gems in Webnovel!