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Apocalypse: The puppetmaster
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(Hiatus for the forseable future)
He is a man of many faces, a broken man hidden behind an ever-changing mask. However, as the world slowly turns insane, he might soon discover he is that he is the perfect man to lead the world into a new era.
The credit for the cover art goes to Grandfailure.
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Power 
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As long as this review made you decide not to read this unfinished book, I will have helped save your brain cells. Although I rated it unnecessarily low, it doesn't matter all that much tbh. Overblown emotional drama and walls of text meant I couldn't even finish the first chapter. No wonder the author dropped this dogshite.
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Keeping up the tradition of 5 star self reviews. But I'd also like to say I'm a newbie writer and am just doing this to stave off the boredom of quarantine but If I enjoy it and the response is good I'll keep it up after the lockdown is lifted. Another thing is that I've already planned the basic direction of how I want the novel develop. However, I'm not perfect and so if any of you guys have any ideas you wish to see implemented in the novel or in the future feel free to leave a comment. Anyway, I appreciate all reviews especially ones that give some constructive criticism so don't hold any punches. Hope you enjoy~
Jilid 1
- 1 Warmfront 4 years ago
- 2 Kneebuster 4 years ago
- 3 Is that the sound of the police? 4 years ago
- 4 Superflu 4 years ago
- 5 Not once. But twice! 4 years ago
- 6 Man. Eating. Monsters. 4 years ago
- 7 locked and loaded 4 years ago
- 8 In the eye of the storm 4 years ago
- 9 Splitting like the red sea 4 years ago
Overall 2.2 Mediocre and disappointing. It needs a rewrite, or at least some changes to fit the story together. Writing and background had potential. Writing 3 It’s surprisingly descriptive and not in totally broken English. However, paragraphs need to be separated into related topics. You can’t monologue for 10+ sentences if your thoughts aren’t organized. Also, writing in first person and then changing to third person is just in poor taste. Updating 1 Dropped about 7 months ago after chapter 9 released. Story 2 A fuc’n mess as it ain’t coherent plot. Stuff is contradictory or downright absurd just to justify events. Make the progression logical and your details won’t go to waste. Too much witnessing and not enough interacting. Characters 2 MC... that boi ain’t right... 24, and acts like that? Phew. People are bystanders, test subjects, victims, burdens, or helpers so far. They’re more like NPCs. Background 3 Has the most potential, but wasted by slagging it off to poor transitions, generalizations, plot, and characters.