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Never gonna give you up Never gonna let you down Never gonna run around and desert you Never gonna make you cry Never gonna say goodbye Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you
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Bro está increíble por favor continuar es muy raro en contra Noveles de este género bien echas, La historia está bien echa, tiene un desarrollo de personaje bien echo el crecimiento de poder del personaje principal es constante y bien echo
The writing is great, I loved the MC's powers, his relationship with the perosnagens and everything else until the first third of these thirty chapters... But things just went awry long after Leah came into the story. It was disheartening to see a second girl emerge out of absolute nowhere and seduce the MC in an instant just for being hot, even though he was already sentimentally involved with Edythe. I also noticed that after that point the personalities of the MC and other characters were suddenly distorted, forced. The story got lost there.
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not into the love triangle stuff. the wishes were pretty lame tbh. basically just asked to be a roided up wolf shifter. its also hard to care about edythe. shes basically just edward in the books and u have changed her personality quite a bit so its basically just a lackluster OC. idk.
good fanfic with good story developement read it if you like twilight........................................................................................
The story is okay. It's not a work of art I had to stop at chapter 10 finally, the story is not for me. The MC's power requests are weird and especially not clear enough, you live in a world where immortality is available, ask for a few things like Hope Mikaelson, he will have everything.The romantic interest is not due all interesting, just a female copy of Edward, She has no personality. The moment it was dropped in the timeline is silly, he is a genius but is still in a normal class and suddenly becoming a genius is going to seem weird,he has no time to adapt to the chronology, so he doesn't know how to fight, he won't have time to do a few good things in such a short time. in short, there is a whole lot of hole in the plot. If the author rewrites history, he could turn it into a masterpiece. I really hope he does.
I really hope you come back and start making this story again because it's a really good story and the development is really great I hope to see this story getting updates one day
what can I say you only wrote 30 chapter and I am chapter 18 but here mc is still a sissy.And why is he so weak.........so much for getting good wishes😑😑😑
It's sad when an author is really passionate about their work and all anyone can do is whine and complain about where they take their story there is a fine line between critiquing and just out right being rude just for the sake of it I really like your fic it interested me if you ever get that writers itch I'll be here seeing where your story goes
I looooove your style of writing, the story development, the incredible grammar, everything. I really hope you would someday get back to writing this.
Author come back please and keep updating this story and don’t just leave it on 30 chapters its a good story with an interesting take I’m pretty sure I’m not the only one who wants more of this story. I’ll redo my review when you come back since it’s only the update stability that isn’t something I can comment on.
You ****ed up when you made a love triangle in the the story also its like you change his personality from cool,smart,and understanding to dense,dumb,and beta.
Cara isso tá muito bom, é bem diferente de outros que eu li que tinha harém aqui parece bem mais realista com as brigas e discussões tô gostando muito dessa pegada
5 star i just want to a Say that shhshshshsbsbsbsbshsjsjsjsjsjsjshsjwgjwhw ig go id e go eiwi go go id go id di JCC by on no on no hak jadi ibu d ff di di zina Xin Xin Xin Xin fun<up up+Yoo Eun
Exp....................................................................................................................................... thanks for the book
Real shame this is dropped. Oh well, It was a fun ride while it lasted. Hopefully you'll pick this up again, but I doubt it. Since this stupid system requires me to post a review over 140 characters: dudiwjfbekamqprifjsnwkdm.
this is the best Twilight ff I've come across on here. I wish the author would pick the story back up, it's a great read even though it's so short.
It's great story, and progress is going grt but need more updates faster so that we can enjoy better Update faster, nd need like a like stories more
I just wish the author would update this story, i binge read it the first moment i got ahold of it. I just simply love everything about this story.
One of the best damn books I've ever read that was even better than the fanfiction it was based on. The twilight author should look to this book for some pointers on how to make his writing my interesting.
Man this is good!! I always love the werewolves from Noblesse and thanks for making his transformation look handsome cuz for what i Know other werewolves transformation looks horrifying..any way this dropped? If it is then that's just sad. This is a very good twilight fan-fic where the mc is not a vampire.
This is a really good story I hope you continue with this story your a great writer and this story had me drawn in the whole time I really hope you come back and keep going with this.
I like this book I hope you can finish the rest of the book. This book made me want to read other twilight fanfic's and now I'm annoyed looking for a good book
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Sorry author its was getting good around the start but then you had to bring leah into it while it was forced kinda ruined it for me, but other people so keep it up for their sake
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Dude where are you? Come back and start writing again, this story's really good. It makes the original material actually interesting. ......
I love this!!!! I can't wait for more! Im really excited for the final transformation. I really don't have much else to say other than I am really enjoying this, and I don't even like twilight!
Incredibly well written, with good grammar and spelling to boot. It's a real shame this was dropped years ago, since it's among the best twilight fanfics I've read
Le MC est bizarre il pense une chose et en fait une autre c con [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Never gonna give you up Never gonna let you down Never gonna run around and desert you Never gonna make you cry Never gonna say goodbye Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you
Membuka SPOILER Bro está increíble por favor continuar es muy raro en contra Noveles de este género bien echas, La historia está bien echa, tiene un desarrollo de personaje bien echo el crecimiento de poder del personaje principal es constante y bien echo
The writing is great, I loved the MC's powers, his relationship with the perosnagens and everything else until the first third of these thirty chapters... But things just went awry long after Leah came into the story. It was disheartening to see a second girl emerge out of absolute nowhere and seduce the MC in an instant just for being hot, even though he was already sentimentally involved with Edythe. I also noticed that after that point the personalities of the MC and other characters were suddenly distorted, forced. The story got lost there.
Membuka SPOILER not into the love triangle stuff. the wishes were pretty lame tbh. basically just asked to be a roided up wolf shifter. its also hard to care about edythe. shes basically just edward in the books and u have changed her personality quite a bit so its basically just a lackluster OC. idk.
good fanfic with good story developement read it if you like twilight........................................................................................
The story is okay. It's not a work of art I had to stop at chapter 10 finally, the story is not for me. The MC's power requests are weird and especially not clear enough, you live in a world where immortality is available, ask for a few things like Hope Mikaelson, he will have everything.The romantic interest is not due all interesting, just a female copy of Edward, She has no personality. The moment it was dropped in the timeline is silly, he is a genius but is still in a normal class and suddenly becoming a genius is going to seem weird,he has no time to adapt to the chronology, so he doesn't know how to fight, he won't have time to do a few good things in such a short time. in short, there is a whole lot of hole in the plot. If the author rewrites history, he could turn it into a masterpiece. I really hope he does.
I really hope you come back and start making this story again because it's a really good story and the development is really great I hope to see this story getting updates one day
what can I say you only wrote 30 chapter and I am chapter 18 but here mc is still a sissy.And why is he so weak.........so much for getting good wishes😑😑😑
It's sad when an author is really passionate about their work and all anyone can do is whine and complain about where they take their story there is a fine line between critiquing and just out right being rude just for the sake of it I really like your fic it interested me if you ever get that writers itch I'll be here seeing where your story goes
I looooove your style of writing, the story development, the incredible grammar, everything. I really hope you would someday get back to writing this.
Author come back please and keep updating this story and don’t just leave it on 30 chapters its a good story with an interesting take I’m pretty sure I’m not the only one who wants more of this story. I’ll redo my review when you come back since it’s only the update stability that isn’t something I can comment on.
You ****ed up when you made a love triangle in the the story also its like you change his personality from cool,smart,and understanding to dense,dumb,and beta.
Cara isso tá muito bom, é bem diferente de outros que eu li que tinha harém aqui parece bem mais realista com as brigas e discussões tô gostando muito dessa pegada
5 star i just want to a Say that shhshshshsbsbsbsbshsjsjsjsjsjsjshsjwgjwhw ig go id e go eiwi go go id go id di JCC by on no on no hak jadi ibu d ff di di zina Xin Xin Xin Xin fun<up up+Yoo Eun
Exp....................................................................................................................................... thanks for the book
Real shame this is dropped. Oh well, It was a fun ride while it lasted. Hopefully you'll pick this up again, but I doubt it. Since this stupid system requires me to post a review over 140 characters: dudiwjfbekamqprifjsnwkdm.
this is the best Twilight ff I've come across on here. I wish the author would pick the story back up, it's a great read even though it's so short.
It's great story, and progress is going grt but need more updates faster so that we can enjoy better Update faster, nd need like a like stories more
I just wish the author would update this story, i binge read it the first moment i got ahold of it. I just simply love everything about this story.
One of the best damn books I've ever read that was even better than the fanfiction it was based on. The twilight author should look to this book for some pointers on how to make his writing my interesting.
Man this is good!! I always love the werewolves from Noblesse and thanks for making his transformation look handsome cuz for what i Know other werewolves transformation looks horrifying..any way this dropped? If it is then that's just sad. This is a very good twilight fan-fic where the mc is not a vampire.
This is a really good story I hope you continue with this story your a great writer and this story had me drawn in the whole time I really hope you come back and keep going with this.
I like this book I hope you can finish the rest of the book. This book made me want to read other twilight fanfic's and now I'm annoyed looking for a good book
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Sorry author its was getting good around the start but then you had to bring leah into it while it was forced kinda ruined it for me, but other people so keep it up for their sake
Membuka SPOILER Dude where are you? Come back and start writing again, this story's really good. It makes the original material actually interesting. ......
I love this!!!! I can't wait for more! Im really excited for the final transformation. I really don't have much else to say other than I am really enjoying this, and I don't even like twilight!
Incredibly well written, with good grammar and spelling to boot. It's a real shame this was dropped years ago, since it's among the best twilight fanfics I've read