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Life after a glass of water

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Penulis: KageMugen

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The main character finds himself stuck in a virtual reality game by accident while his mother tries to get him back from the company that created it who want to use him for research purposes.

Parents Strongly Cautioned

Status Power Mingguan

Rank -- Peringkat Power
Stone -- Power stone

Anda Mungkin Juga Menyukai

4Ulasan-ulasan

  • Kualitas penulisan
  • Stabilitas Pembaruan
  • Pengembangan Cerita
  • Desain Karakter
  • Latar Belakang Dunia

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Zehell2218

first of all make synopsis it's important. Second. From first chapter why do I only see a few dialogue? It's like narrating a story without life inside. overall the idea is good

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Fiona_Singer

After Reading the first chapter I thought it would go just like another Sword-Art-Online style harem manga, but I'm glad the author chose the realistic touch instead. Corporate Social Responsibility is a trendy topic and the background information about Rowan's family can easily appeal to readers' sympathy, further adding tense to the conflict between the two sides. What needs to be improved, however, is the writing style. There are no barriers of understanding the plots, of course, but the way of narrating is a bit too straight-line, and some information is a little too concentrated in one part of the story, which will slow the pace unnecessarily. But these skills can be acquired through reading and practice, what I truly valued here is the originality and the courage of discarding those "popular" but cheesy, vulgar cliches, and even just for this, it's already better than 70% percent of the big hits on the front page. Applause for the author.

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Gourmet_DAO

I read all three chapters. The prologue was a bit tight, the plot of the action is more intriguing, the development of the action is exciting. The culmination is an intrigue, a possible experiment on a person, violent corporations ... where, life, a person is estimated in profit, loss. There is a struggle of the humanistic beginning with the mercantile interest, the usual everyday routine. It is better to remain silent and stay with the money or stand up for the unfamiliar little boy, but lose money. The struggle of the soul and mind. Usually money is taken up over conscience. But on the Day of Judgment, such a choice will have a price - fire. Is it worth it? Everyone makes the choice himself. Atheists have a concept of an inner conscience, whether a person can, while looking at himself in the mirror, respect himself or want to spit in the reflection. The author managed to reflect this well in the game of emotions, to show the nature of man. It was interesting to read. The author can only wish to write original works, choose their own stories, and not cliches, remakes of existing works. Since the author has a creative streak, inspiration, has a good syllable, I am sure that he will be able to write his own unique novel, with an original plot. Probably now he is just like all beginners to the author, just wants to get his hand, success in the difficult way - becoming a prose writer! respectfully

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Mavislin11

Not much can be said for 6 chapters, but it was worth the read. The characters are good, with the story pacing being quite alright. The world background and plot are also great.

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