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I like the story but i have some suggestions like make a table like status and missions and fo the mc to be more adventurous and also to widen and make the chap.s longer if it can be thats all but ireally love youre story
Membuka SPOILER
It started generic and went downhill from there. Why Asian novels lack any character development? Why add characters that are not important? And never used? Interesting slow idea that didn't turn out to be any good.
Low review cause crummy dude reviewing every other day 5 stars, not what its for -------------------------------'----- supercalifragilisticexpaladocius
Good Story,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
enjoyable,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,..........................................................................
The story has a very good grammar and I am really fond of the author's approach to the magic aspect of their universe. Additionally, the addition of the planting/beast growing aspect is a very big plus for me. Lastly, although the story is tagged to include game elements, the way that the author incorporates the system is the way I like it as - not too overpowering nor does it saturate the story with endless "blue screens". Overall, from the quality that I have read so far, I would definitely recommend this as it is a very interesting read.
Membuka SPOILER Good story ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
Interesting,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,.................................................................................................................................................................
Manaroot,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,.....................................................................
jump,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,........................................................................................................................................................,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
enjoyable,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,..................................................................................................................
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Till now it is an well written novel. Highlights of this novel are system, premise of story and pace of the story. Mc is above average character (nothing too special but not irritating or naive). Hope author completes this novel.
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
gogo,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,............................................................................................................................................................................../////////////
Celery! The first chapter is really well written. The description of everything is point and it got engaging the moment you wrote "the stick he proudly called a fishing rod." 😂
good going..,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,.........................................................................
Jumpe,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,...........................................................................................................................................
Once upon a time, there was a transmigrator who wound up as a mere ten year old boy in a land he had pretty much no information about. The only thing he had was a system and that OP system gave him the keys to the kingdom! Follow our intrepid hero as he navigates his way to becoming the most overpowered cultivator/mage (as well as the first!) while trying to stay low-key. (Because right now, storywise, he's still about 12-13)
I thought this was a litrpg style novel but then it took a different route. I know its hard mixing rpg elements and wuxia elements. Sometimes if you focus too much on rpg the wuxia/cultivation part suffer and vice versa leaving the readers confused. I was digging the daily tasks system giving it a light litrpg style feel. Not to grindy but still there. But then it just disappeared. And lots and lots of info dump about the cultivation world shoved to you. It feels like the author just gave up on the system.
For being a story that needs to be tested using guinea pig readers such as myself I am genuinely happy. It has great story progression and world building and actually slowly builds up each of the characters making them memorable to the story. Even though the story seems to develop slowly I think otherwise because it shows each step the mc takes to get even the slightest bit stronger. Even the system the mc has is well balanced and fair and actually makes the mc work hard rather than making the mc instantly strong and destroying story progression. Lastly, this story seems to have daily updates which I love and can’t wait to continue reading. Cheers to the magnificent author sensei!
XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP
Enjoyable story................................................................................................................. ..............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Quite a nice idea of a novel with mixed system and cultivation. There are some minor flaws, especially some major in my opinion event are skipped with only rudimentary mention, but it's a pleasant read.
I've read a lot of light novels and I don't know about you guys but it gets redundant sometimes. This story is really fun and so far I haven't started skimming the chapters out if boredom. Keep up the good work Author
One of the best original novel.story telling is very good.nice world building... thanks..... .... .... One hundred and fourty words......... One hundred and fourty words.... One hundred and fourty words.... One hundred and fourty words.... One hundred and fourty words
Membuka SPOILER
This is a really high quality story thats well built and has alot of worldbuilding no easily discernible grammar/spelling mistakes. Interesting plot and a steady progression of the protagonist. If you like a protagonist who isnt overpowered from the start but gets stronger as the story progresses then you should read this book
I have no words to describe how great this story is. If you're on the fence about giving this story a shot, give it a try. You won't regret it.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact cttbx123@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
I like the story but i have some suggestions like make a table like status and missions and fo the mc to be more adventurous and also to widen and make the chap.s longer if it can be thats all but ireally love youre story
Membuka SPOILER It started generic and went downhill from there. Why Asian novels lack any character development? Why add characters that are not important? And never used? Interesting slow idea that didn't turn out to be any good.
Low review cause crummy dude reviewing every other day 5 stars, not what its for -------------------------------'----- supercalifragilisticexpaladocius
Good Story,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
enjoyable,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,..........................................................................
The story has a very good grammar and I am really fond of the author's approach to the magic aspect of their universe. Additionally, the addition of the planting/beast growing aspect is a very big plus for me. Lastly, although the story is tagged to include game elements, the way that the author incorporates the system is the way I like it as - not too overpowering nor does it saturate the story with endless "blue screens". Overall, from the quality that I have read so far, I would definitely recommend this as it is a very interesting read.
Membuka SPOILER Good story ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
Interesting,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,.................................................................................................................................................................
Manaroot,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,.....................................................................
jump,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,........................................................................................................................................................,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
enjoyable,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,..................................................................................................................
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
Till now it is an well written novel. Highlights of this novel are system, premise of story and pace of the story. Mc is above average character (nothing too special but not irritating or naive). Hope author completes this novel.
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
gogo,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,............................................................................................................................................................................../////////////
Celery! The first chapter is really well written. The description of everything is point and it got engaging the moment you wrote "the stick he proudly called a fishing rod." 😂
good going..,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,.........................................................................
Jumpe,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,...........................................................................................................................................
Once upon a time, there was a transmigrator who wound up as a mere ten year old boy in a land he had pretty much no information about. The only thing he had was a system and that OP system gave him the keys to the kingdom! Follow our intrepid hero as he navigates his way to becoming the most overpowered cultivator/mage (as well as the first!) while trying to stay low-key. (Because right now, storywise, he's still about 12-13)
I thought this was a litrpg style novel but then it took a different route. I know its hard mixing rpg elements and wuxia elements. Sometimes if you focus too much on rpg the wuxia/cultivation part suffer and vice versa leaving the readers confused. I was digging the daily tasks system giving it a light litrpg style feel. Not to grindy but still there. But then it just disappeared. And lots and lots of info dump about the cultivation world shoved to you. It feels like the author just gave up on the system.
For being a story that needs to be tested using guinea pig readers such as myself I am genuinely happy. It has great story progression and world building and actually slowly builds up each of the characters making them memorable to the story. Even though the story seems to develop slowly I think otherwise because it shows each step the mc takes to get even the slightest bit stronger. Even the system the mc has is well balanced and fair and actually makes the mc work hard rather than making the mc instantly strong and destroying story progression. Lastly, this story seems to have daily updates which I love and can’t wait to continue reading. Cheers to the magnificent author sensei!
XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP
Enjoyable story................................................................................................................. ..............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Quite a nice idea of a novel with mixed system and cultivation. There are some minor flaws, especially some major in my opinion event are skipped with only rudimentary mention, but it's a pleasant read.
I've read a lot of light novels and I don't know about you guys but it gets redundant sometimes. This story is really fun and so far I haven't started skimming the chapters out if boredom. Keep up the good work Author
One of the best original novel.story telling is very good.nice world building... thanks..... .... .... One hundred and fourty words......... One hundred and fourty words.... One hundred and fourty words.... One hundred and fourty words.... One hundred and fourty words
Membuka SPOILER This is a really high quality story thats well built and has alot of worldbuilding no easily discernible grammar/spelling mistakes. Interesting plot and a steady progression of the protagonist. If you like a protagonist who isnt overpowered from the start but gets stronger as the story progresses then you should read this book
I have no words to describe how great this story is. If you're on the fence about giving this story a shot, give it a try. You won't regret it.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact cttbx123@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.