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lacks emotion, interaction, conversations are bland characters dousnt feel like human read till 150 so [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
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Wow, the novel really is a game changer. I mean you read so many novels to the point where it's just reading,... no pleasure. But this novels really does give you that dose of pleasure that you've been missing out on. Great work Asura.
The story should only be read with your brain off, also do not expect any depth to the MC and the side-cast is non-existent. Basically it really feels 2D which is sad cuz it does have potential, at least a little bit, if onlz Author gave more depth to the world he created. If this got rewritten with more side characters it would be 3.5~3.8, currently it is slightly less than 3.
If i could go higher then five stars i would the Story t he plot the progression and pacing are s tier stuff i dont have much to say but Novela like these are what should be on the number one ranking[img=update][img=recommend]
I think the best thing about this is that you can get a good look at this work and you can use it as a way to make sure your skill level has a
Exp but the books good, the bs with +100 stats was bad i really like the setting of story, his power developement is insanely gud. You shoul give this book a try. Its also written from the mc perspective and that suits me gud.
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I am on 66 and here it is what i thought. Its good.. Better than many novels on this site... Authors also did a good job but here are some problems. 1.Story seems more like summary. 2.Less of interactions with people or anyone. If i summarize all his interactions with other characters it will fit in 2~4 chapters so basically 64~62 chapter this guy talking to himself 3. Its hard to visualize... I was unable to visualize the village or the jungle... 4. No action... Every time you shows the result but no fighting scene. 5. Some Chapters are too short with fillers (I personally don't like 😂😂😂) Anyways Author good job but it can always be better...
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So far it’s really good but I really want to know if they fix the thing where people die and other players join the game and he actually interacts with real people in on like ch 35
I really, really enjoyed this one... it’s a shame it’s pay to read, and the chapters are pretty short, but it is very well thought out and executed. Highly suggest this one.
Im writing this because I just can’t read anymore of this, it’s so painful to read because it’s close to being good. The first like 3-5 chapters were good, but right after everything becomes like a summary. For example (not from the story) if you fight a dragon I wanna read about the fight what happened exactly not a 1 to 3 sentence summary of what happened and the results. The characters at least from the first few chapters don’t get near enough personality or details. I have no idea what anyone but the mc looks like. I want to read a story not a endless summary. It’s to the point where every chapter (of the first 22 or so) should be 2 or 3 times longer to fill in the specifics of all the events of the story.
Disclaimer: These are my opinions. I'll be frank. This novel has a huge potential, but it just didn't live up to it. The huge potential came from the start of the novel, it reminded me of MyLittleBrother's Cultivation Online. Except, the more I read this novel the more I get bored. This didn't seem to planned, it's like the author is making things up the further the story goes. There's nothing wrong about "making things up the further the story goes", but it isn't right either. Plus, the way that the people are sent to the game is the first turn off. Them having automatic ingame family and ****... is weird. Compared to this and other novels, RSSG did it the best in this regard. In RSSG, the players are called Chosen Ones or some other ****. So the NPCs have an explanation for their existence and weird game powers. The second turn off is the way this is written. The grammer, the way that the game text is written, and the naming sense of the author for abilities and etc., is unappealing. The third and final turn off is the somewhat boring, no-hype chapters. The best thing about this novel is that the author replies. Sure there are other cool/nice things, but this is personally the best.
It's relatively well written, but needs a proper editing to make it properly readable. The premise and setting are pretty fun and the combination of game and cultivation are interesting enough. The MC is pretty well fleshed out, but he's supposed to be super intelligent and he really isn't. I mean, that's ok, a character's intellect is capped by their creator's, but most are better at using some sleight of hand to make this less obvious. All of the side characters are true NPCs, they are one-dimensional and uninteresting. The plot feels like it's not all that important, as the MC doesn't seem to care too much about what to do next except level up, so as a byproduct, we readers also feel that way. Honestly it's a bit sad, since there was a good setup in the beginning but end up feeling like you're randomly drifting around. The biggest detractor, or maybe attractor is the whole leveling thing. 90% of the chapters deal with leveling up, rewards from leveling up and then thinking about how to level up. If you're not into that kind of thing you'll quickly get bored. A story I might compare this to is "Reincarnated as a Dragon" but with less interesting combat and no editing. Personally it's not too bad, I read up until the premium started, but the quality of what I've seen so far isn't enough to make me pay for more. I recommend anyone interested also give it a chance, as the chapters are pretty short so it doesn't take too long.
I just want to say that I like this novel a lot! The story is really good, the MC is smart, and the worldbuilding is good. I am really hoping the MC gets out of this alive in the end but I keep thinking that even if he doesn't, he gets 10 years of adventure in the VR World at least. Great job on this novel!
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I genuinely don't understand all the hype around this novel. I've only completely read through chapter 22 but I randomly unlocked and read further chapters to make sure I was only right about the early chapters. This book is a mess. Its background is completely unoriginal as is the world. The characters in the starting village are completely flat and lack reasonable personalities. In addition to the poor character writing the story is basically just a list in chronological order of what the mc does. The killer for me is that it is genuinely unreadable as the author makes mistakes every sentence and nothing flows correctly making the experience jarring and unpleasant.
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I really like this story. At first I thought I was gonna get something similar to The Devils Cage, but nah, this it great in its own right. I really look forward to the further growth of this.
Absolutely love this read i await every day to see if there is another chaper release. Cannot fault it, progression is at a steady pace and doest throw too much on you straight away to put you off. Would recommend.
There is a detailed background, wonderful story and little light is cute. I enjoy this novel greatly, so much so that it is one of my favorites.
It kept me reading cuz i love gaming style novels thats why i give such a rating...overall author tries to get better as story develops(and i believe he will be better in his next novel) but worldbuilding character design and side characters are very weak...What kept me mostly is the original idea of the MC and his powers but after that the inconsistency of the world is pretty bad...😅 if u arent into gaming novels dont bother....😁😁
This story is good in a general sense, in fact it was quite stable. Then it all went to hell when he left the light domain. This is just my personal opinion so others can read and decide on their own. I simply preferred how it was written before. It's like each side (when he was in the light domain and after he left) were written by two completely different authors, and are two different stories.
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I really like your work on this book as it is very good 👍 quality and very well presented. The Character of this story has already been through a lot and will still have to go through a lot more, but he has a strong 💪 will to persist. His nicest trait is that he doesn't just do dumb things but thinks about his every move 🤔. What i like the most is that it is not your average transmigration story where they are all more or less the same in their development. So go on an continue. If you haven't already read it then what are you even doing here go on and read it .🤗🤗🤗🤗😺😺😺😺👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Loving how you slowly reveal the information to the reader while creating mysteries that need to be solved. Characters development is awe inspiring and has me excited for whats to come. Love his guilty pleasure 😂
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I have read up to volume two so what I review about will just be regarding those chapters. The story kept me engaged and reading into the night . the story progresses at a reasonable rate and still has room for more development.
lacks emotion, interaction, conversations are bland characters dousnt feel like human read till 150 so [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
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Wow, the novel really is a game changer. I mean you read so many novels to the point where it's just reading,... no pleasure. But this novels really does give you that dose of pleasure that you've been missing out on. Great work Asura.
The story should only be read with your brain off, also do not expect any depth to the MC and the side-cast is non-existent. Basically it really feels 2D which is sad cuz it does have potential, at least a little bit, if onlz Author gave more depth to the world he created. If this got rewritten with more side characters it would be 3.5~3.8, currently it is slightly less than 3.
If i could go higher then five stars i would the Story t he plot the progression and pacing are s tier stuff i dont have much to say but Novela like these are what should be on the number one ranking[img=update][img=recommend]
I think the best thing about this is that you can get a good look at this work and you can use it as a way to make sure your skill level has a
Exp but the books good, the bs with +100 stats was bad i really like the setting of story, his power developement is insanely gud. You shoul give this book a try. Its also written from the mc perspective and that suits me gud.
Membuka SPOILER I am on 66 and here it is what i thought. Its good.. Better than many novels on this site... Authors also did a good job but here are some problems. 1.Story seems more like summary. 2.Less of interactions with people or anyone. If i summarize all his interactions with other characters it will fit in 2~4 chapters so basically 64~62 chapter this guy talking to himself 3. Its hard to visualize... I was unable to visualize the village or the jungle... 4. No action... Every time you shows the result but no fighting scene. 5. Some Chapters are too short with fillers (I personally don't like 😂😂😂) Anyways Author good job but it can always be better...
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So far it’s really good but I really want to know if they fix the thing where people die and other players join the game and he actually interacts with real people in on like ch 35
I really, really enjoyed this one... it’s a shame it’s pay to read, and the chapters are pretty short, but it is very well thought out and executed. Highly suggest this one.
Im writing this because I just can’t read anymore of this, it’s so painful to read because it’s close to being good. The first like 3-5 chapters were good, but right after everything becomes like a summary. For example (not from the story) if you fight a dragon I wanna read about the fight what happened exactly not a 1 to 3 sentence summary of what happened and the results. The characters at least from the first few chapters don’t get near enough personality or details. I have no idea what anyone but the mc looks like. I want to read a story not a endless summary. It’s to the point where every chapter (of the first 22 or so) should be 2 or 3 times longer to fill in the specifics of all the events of the story.
Disclaimer: These are my opinions. I'll be frank. This novel has a huge potential, but it just didn't live up to it. The huge potential came from the start of the novel, it reminded me of MyLittleBrother's Cultivation Online. Except, the more I read this novel the more I get bored. This didn't seem to planned, it's like the author is making things up the further the story goes. There's nothing wrong about "making things up the further the story goes", but it isn't right either. Plus, the way that the people are sent to the game is the first turn off. Them having automatic ingame family and ****... is weird. Compared to this and other novels, RSSG did it the best in this regard. In RSSG, the players are called Chosen Ones or some other ****. So the NPCs have an explanation for their existence and weird game powers. The second turn off is the way this is written. The grammer, the way that the game text is written, and the naming sense of the author for abilities and etc., is unappealing. The third and final turn off is the somewhat boring, no-hype chapters. The best thing about this novel is that the author replies. Sure there are other cool/nice things, but this is personally the best.
It's relatively well written, but needs a proper editing to make it properly readable. The premise and setting are pretty fun and the combination of game and cultivation are interesting enough. The MC is pretty well fleshed out, but he's supposed to be super intelligent and he really isn't. I mean, that's ok, a character's intellect is capped by their creator's, but most are better at using some sleight of hand to make this less obvious. All of the side characters are true NPCs, they are one-dimensional and uninteresting. The plot feels like it's not all that important, as the MC doesn't seem to care too much about what to do next except level up, so as a byproduct, we readers also feel that way. Honestly it's a bit sad, since there was a good setup in the beginning but end up feeling like you're randomly drifting around. The biggest detractor, or maybe attractor is the whole leveling thing. 90% of the chapters deal with leveling up, rewards from leveling up and then thinking about how to level up. If you're not into that kind of thing you'll quickly get bored. A story I might compare this to is "Reincarnated as a Dragon" but with less interesting combat and no editing. Personally it's not too bad, I read up until the premium started, but the quality of what I've seen so far isn't enough to make me pay for more. I recommend anyone interested also give it a chance, as the chapters are pretty short so it doesn't take too long.
I just want to say that I like this novel a lot! The story is really good, the MC is smart, and the worldbuilding is good. I am really hoping the MC gets out of this alive in the end but I keep thinking that even if he doesn't, he gets 10 years of adventure in the VR World at least. Great job on this novel!
Membuka SPOILER I genuinely don't understand all the hype around this novel. I've only completely read through chapter 22 but I randomly unlocked and read further chapters to make sure I was only right about the early chapters. This book is a mess. Its background is completely unoriginal as is the world. The characters in the starting village are completely flat and lack reasonable personalities. In addition to the poor character writing the story is basically just a list in chronological order of what the mc does. The killer for me is that it is genuinely unreadable as the author makes mistakes every sentence and nothing flows correctly making the experience jarring and unpleasant.
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I really like this story. At first I thought I was gonna get something similar to The Devils Cage, but nah, this it great in its own right. I really look forward to the further growth of this.
Absolutely love this read i await every day to see if there is another chaper release. Cannot fault it, progression is at a steady pace and doest throw too much on you straight away to put you off. Would recommend.
There is a detailed background, wonderful story and little light is cute. I enjoy this novel greatly, so much so that it is one of my favorites.
It kept me reading cuz i love gaming style novels thats why i give such a rating...overall author tries to get better as story develops(and i believe he will be better in his next novel) but worldbuilding character design and side characters are very weak...What kept me mostly is the original idea of the MC and his powers but after that the inconsistency of the world is pretty bad...😅 if u arent into gaming novels dont bother....😁😁
This story is good in a general sense, in fact it was quite stable. Then it all went to hell when he left the light domain. This is just my personal opinion so others can read and decide on their own. I simply preferred how it was written before. It's like each side (when he was in the light domain and after he left) were written by two completely different authors, and are two different stories.
Membuka SPOILER I really like your work on this book as it is very good 👍 quality and very well presented. The Character of this story has already been through a lot and will still have to go through a lot more, but he has a strong 💪 will to persist. His nicest trait is that he doesn't just do dumb things but thinks about his every move 🤔. What i like the most is that it is not your average transmigration story where they are all more or less the same in their development. So go on an continue. If you haven't already read it then what are you even doing here go on and read it .🤗🤗🤗🤗😺😺😺😺👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Loving how you slowly reveal the information to the reader while creating mysteries that need to be solved. Characters development is awe inspiring and has me excited for whats to come. Love his guilty pleasure 😂
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I have read up to volume two so what I review about will just be regarding those chapters. The story kept me engaged and reading into the night . the story progresses at a reasonable rate and still has room for more development.