Pokemon professor

LV 13

Looki124

it's a cool idea to have the mc becoming a professeur but it is not well executed, you go to fast on yours story example in other story it take 1 chapter to die and meet god another one to state is whish and a little bit of world building and another one to start is adventure and you did all of this in one chapter and not even a long chapter. And because you have little to no spacing between major event in your text you can miss major information like when i first read your first chapter i totally miss the part where he talk to god Your story can be a good one because you know what your mc want to do all you need is to dilute your story to not have to much information and a little bit of “mise en page” and your story can be awesome

LV 4

Steven_Beck_5008

This chapter keeps getting better and better I can’t stop reading this book it’s really good so please keep writing this book and please write write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it thank you 🙏😁😊🙏😊😁🙏😊😁😁😃😊🙏😇😇☺️😃😊🙏😁

LV 4

VampireAncestor_

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