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I enjoyed both the original and the rewrite, though I like the rewrite more because of all the stuff he does before he get to Hogwarts. This dude barely even needs the system.
Um cara normal ? A maioria dos protagonistas são caras normais só a armadura da trama pra manter eles vivos afinal vc vê protagonistas tomando venenos que matam só com o toque durar minutos ou segundo pra um milagre acontecer e curar ele segundos d** .só não se perca fazendo um (deus x máquina da vida)kkkkkk
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Please update regularly, i loved the other novel and this one seems even better. Also i loved the cultivation aspect of the last one , it is reminiscent of another novel i read that had a system and cultivation but it was about naruto. The first novel was amazing too
I REALLY LIKE THIS KIND OF NOVELS BUT THEY ALWAYS GET ABANDONED OR THE HISTORY STARTS TO GET REALLY BORING, KEEP GOING ITS REALLY INTERESTING.
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I WOULD LIKE MORE CHAPTERS...IF POSSIBLE...REPLYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WAITING..................................................................................................................................................................
I have not read your original version but I rather like the fact that I got to enjoy reading this version without making any mental comparisons. I think it is excellent writing and character development so far - I hated running out of chapters to read as it was only just enough to hook me! I truly hope you continue this version. I think what I enjoyed the most was the plot beginning and direction.. I found it above the norm going in a very original direction that completely addicted me. I honestly want to beg for updates but I realize that for the writing to maintain its quality it must come at your own pace! Thank you for being willing to write and publish in such an open forum - it takes courage. Great writing and looking forward to your updates!
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This story is pretty good. This is very original as it features Harry reborn. The updates could be faster and more often. I am looking forward to how the story will develop as MC is already super OP.
The story itself is nice. But author has to update more often and consistently. There should also be more of a background story about the main character in the first few chapters. Overall it is not bad so far.
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I quite like this novel. I just hope the author didn't drop it without notice as has been a month since the last update. I also hope that the author has something planned with his mother.
shad YYYeeeessss Ingredients For the dough: 1/2 cup warm water 2 packages yeast 2 teaspoons sugar 4 to 5 cups flour 1/2 cup sugar 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon freshly ground nutmeg 1/2 cup warm milk 1/2 cup melted butter, cooled 5 egg yolks zest of one lemon King Cake Baby For the cream cheese filling: 1 (8-ounce) package room temperature cream cheese 1 cup confectioners sugar 2 Tablespoons flour 1 teaspoon vanilla 2 teaspoons lemon juice For the icing: 2 cup confectioners sugar 4 Tablespoons lemon juice 1 teaspoon vanilla purple, green, and yellow Instructions Combine the warm water with the yeast and 2 teaspoons of sugar. Mix it together and let sit for about 10 minutes. In the bowl of a stand mixer, combine 4 cups of flour, sugar, salt, nutmeg, lemon zest, milk, melted butter, egg yolks, and yeast mixture. Using the dough hook, knead until the dough pulls away from the sides of the mixer. If the dough is very wet, you can add up to one more cup flour. Knead for 5 minutes. Turn the dough out into bowl that has been coated with cooking spray. Turn the dough in the cooking spray and cover with plastic wrap. Let the dough rise until it has doubled, about 1 1/2 hours. Mix together the cream cheese, confectioners sugar, flour, vanilla, and lemon juice. Set aside. Roll the dough into a rectangle about 30 inches long. Spread the cream cheese mixture evenly on the dough. Roll the dough into a cylinder. Line a baking sheet with parchment paper. Put a mason jar in the middle and wrap the dough around the jar. Tuck the ends together to form a ring. Cover with a towel and let rise for another 45 minutes. Bake in a preheated 350 degree oven for about 30 minutes or until golden brown. Take the mason jar out and let cool. Make the icing by whisking the confectioners sugar, lemon juice, and vanilla. Hello baby! Press the plastic baby into the cake. Please be smarter than me. Press it underneath the king cake, not on the top. Cover the King Cake with the icing and sprinkle the cake with sugars alternating the colors.
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i like this story it shows how harry could develop if he was an impressive wizard instead of a child who doesnt want to do anything besides play around and i hope the author can make the other side charicters develop alongside the main like having ron actually know 1 question with out hermione doing his work for him
Wow this is amazing so far and i love it. I really hope he dosen't become close friends with ron... i never really cared for him but how your making harry i doubt he whould be able to stand ron. But im sure you know that lol cant wait for more!
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I am not a writer, nor any type of content creator, so I can not say how much effort you put into your work or how much you care. Therefore, I regret if I sound offensive or disrespectful in my criticism. The protagonist is not insensitive ?, I ask this because of the lack of mention of mourning for his mother, even if he does not know that dead, at least the worry about not seeing her again or because of her situation. That is my only complaint or doubt, otherwise, thank you for uploading this content.
has enormous potential ... I like the way he develops the story. much better than the previous version. <140><140><140><140><140><140><140><140><140><140><140>
The previous version was already very good and this only improves, a sensible Harry, calm but serious and not so gentle, a fanfic not so dark but also not infantile or ****** as the books. If you like HP or find only a good story (my case) this fanfic will satisfy your tastes well for a story with a more interesting protagonist.
I only got one chapter as of now but if it's an improvement on his original work it still recommend this for anyone who likes reading Harry Potter FanFiction or who just like reading good stories
I like this one then the previous one good job author keep uploading 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏
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I enjoyed both the original and the rewrite, though I like the rewrite more because of all the stuff he does before he get to Hogwarts. This dude barely even needs the system.
Um cara normal ? A maioria dos protagonistas são caras normais só a armadura da trama pra manter eles vivos afinal vc vê protagonistas tomando venenos que matam só com o toque durar minutos ou segundo pra um milagre acontecer e curar ele segundos d** .só não se perca fazendo um (deus x máquina da vida)kkkkkk
******************************** Good work! ****************************************** ***************************** And i need more! ***************************************
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Please update regularly, i loved the other novel and this one seems even better. Also i loved the cultivation aspect of the last one , it is reminiscent of another novel i read that had a system and cultivation but it was about naruto. The first novel was amazing too
I REALLY LIKE THIS KIND OF NOVELS BUT THEY ALWAYS GET ABANDONED OR THE HISTORY STARTS TO GET REALLY BORING, KEEP GOING ITS REALLY INTERESTING.
Membuka SPOILER I WOULD LIKE MORE CHAPTERS...IF POSSIBLE...REPLYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WAITING..................................................................................................................................................................
I have not read your original version but I rather like the fact that I got to enjoy reading this version without making any mental comparisons. I think it is excellent writing and character development so far - I hated running out of chapters to read as it was only just enough to hook me! I truly hope you continue this version. I think what I enjoyed the most was the plot beginning and direction.. I found it above the norm going in a very original direction that completely addicted me. I honestly want to beg for updates but I realize that for the writing to maintain its quality it must come at your own pace! Thank you for being willing to write and publish in such an open forum - it takes courage. Great writing and looking forward to your updates!
Good Well so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so all all ask so so so so so so so so so so so so so do so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so
More more More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more moreMore more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more i love it
This story is pretty good. This is very original as it features Harry reborn. The updates could be faster and more often. I am looking forward to how the story will develop as MC is already super OP.
The story itself is nice. But author has to update more often and consistently. There should also be more of a background story about the main character in the first few chapters. Overall it is not bad so far.
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I quite like this novel. I just hope the author didn't drop it without notice as has been a month since the last update. I also hope that the author has something planned with his mother.
shad YYYeeeessss Ingredients For the dough: 1/2 cup warm water 2 packages yeast 2 teaspoons sugar 4 to 5 cups flour 1/2 cup sugar 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon freshly ground nutmeg 1/2 cup warm milk 1/2 cup melted butter, cooled 5 egg yolks zest of one lemon King Cake Baby For the cream cheese filling: 1 (8-ounce) package room temperature cream cheese 1 cup confectioners sugar 2 Tablespoons flour 1 teaspoon vanilla 2 teaspoons lemon juice For the icing: 2 cup confectioners sugar 4 Tablespoons lemon juice 1 teaspoon vanilla purple, green, and yellow Instructions Combine the warm water with the yeast and 2 teaspoons of sugar. Mix it together and let sit for about 10 minutes. In the bowl of a stand mixer, combine 4 cups of flour, sugar, salt, nutmeg, lemon zest, milk, melted butter, egg yolks, and yeast mixture. Using the dough hook, knead until the dough pulls away from the sides of the mixer. If the dough is very wet, you can add up to one more cup flour. Knead for 5 minutes. Turn the dough out into bowl that has been coated with cooking spray. Turn the dough in the cooking spray and cover with plastic wrap. Let the dough rise until it has doubled, about 1 1/2 hours. Mix together the cream cheese, confectioners sugar, flour, vanilla, and lemon juice. Set aside. Roll the dough into a rectangle about 30 inches long. Spread the cream cheese mixture evenly on the dough. Roll the dough into a cylinder. Line a baking sheet with parchment paper. Put a mason jar in the middle and wrap the dough around the jar. Tuck the ends together to form a ring. Cover with a towel and let rise for another 45 minutes. Bake in a preheated 350 degree oven for about 30 minutes or until golden brown. Take the mason jar out and let cool. Make the icing by whisking the confectioners sugar, lemon juice, and vanilla. Hello baby! Press the plastic baby into the cake. Please be smarter than me. Press it underneath the king cake, not on the top. Cover the King Cake with the icing and sprinkle the cake with sugars alternating the colors.
Gggggggggggggggggoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooodddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd start need more if possible 1 chap per 2 days? That'll be great if you can thanks
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Membuka SPOILER i like this story it shows how harry could develop if he was an impressive wizard instead of a child who doesnt want to do anything besides play around and i hope the author can make the other side charicters develop alongside the main like having ron actually know 1 question with out hermione doing his work for him
Wow this is amazing so far and i love it. I really hope he dosen't become close friends with ron... i never really cared for him but how your making harry i doubt he whould be able to stand ron. But im sure you know that lol cant wait for more!
Membuka SPOILER I am not a writer, nor any type of content creator, so I can not say how much effort you put into your work or how much you care. Therefore, I regret if I sound offensive or disrespectful in my criticism. The protagonist is not insensitive ?, I ask this because of the lack of mention of mourning for his mother, even if he does not know that dead, at least the worry about not seeing her again or because of her situation. That is my only complaint or doubt, otherwise, thank you for uploading this content.
has enormous potential ... I like the way he develops the story. much better than the previous version. <140><140><140><140><140><140><140><140><140><140><140>
The previous version was already very good and this only improves, a sensible Harry, calm but serious and not so gentle, a fanfic not so dark but also not infantile or ****** as the books. If you like HP or find only a good story (my case) this fanfic will satisfy your tastes well for a story with a more interesting protagonist.
I only got one chapter as of now but if it's an improvement on his original work it still recommend this for anyone who likes reading Harry Potter FanFiction or who just like reading good stories
I like this one then the previous one good job author keep uploading 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏