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Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels! + Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing contest! This contest is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi, but if you haven’t worked on these genres, that’s TOTALLY FINE! You can refer to the given examples and tips to develop a new story. As all new stories can get cash rewards, this might be your chance to begin your writing career and start to make a living by writing! Not to mention that you can take your chance to win the big cash and get your books published in hardcover! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/3tBG7l7 or contact kerawood.review@gmail.com
Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact ringdom_promptswriting@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
Hey there! Here are some web novel recommendations for whom share the same taste with me. If you like this story, my recommendations are worth a try! https://docs.google.com/document/d/19R5KkqHOOHSMDkF4fHscVmxWcYGh0OntYsv8NglzsQo/edit?usp=sharing
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact kenreview@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
I generally have a rule that I don't review a story of less than 300 chapters, so reviewing one with less than 50 is a definite first. The easiest way for me to describe your story would be a diamond cut by an jeweler who will eventually become a master of his craft. It's somewhat rough and possesses some obvious flaws but it was obviously well thought out and executed to the best of your ability. If that sounds unpleasant go ahead and ignore it. The key part I want you to realize is that this is where you are now and I think you'll go far beyond it eventually. There is a semi-famous saying among writers that "your first million words are practice". This is part of that. I usually don't give targeted advice, because a.) it can be wrong and b.) sometimes you need to figure it out for yourself. I'll break that here because I have a lot of hope for the author you will grow into. First you need to understand the idiom of "Show, Don't Tell". Almost all of Myst's introduction was recounting what happened and consequentially was very passive. By just recanting what happened to him your not only not letting readers discover things and form their own opinions, your also creating a barrier that prevents them from caring about your characters. Readers care because they experience things with your characters. Second you need to work on your pacing. To be frank your story happened too damn fast. If you were where you are in the plot at closer to a hundred chapters in then you'd be better off. Characters get introduced and events happen at a break neck speed that if executed correctly would suck your readers in and have them captivated, but the flip side is that if the timing is off you leave your readers disoriented and wondering what just happened, confused about whether they should care about it. Your characters are exceptional though, even though they would benefit from better introductions and handling. Frankly you made the bold decision to introduce your MC from a point of failure, not just a low point in his life caused by external forces or 'fate' but one of his own making. This is exceptional, especially considering that most of what people put up here are masturbatory power fantasies as opposed to legitimate stories. You set your story apart with your characters and to a lesser degree your use of dialog. Keep writing, write a lot and write ahead if you can. Stories that rely on their characters to carry them need to update more often then stories that are moved by specifics of plot. Your readers read because they 'care', if there are large gaps in updates then you'll lose them.
I like this story! great plot, writing quality and world background (little lost sometimes) The story development is good and the characters is interesting and well written. Great work author.
This was an awesome book, definitely not what I'm used to since I prefer fantasy and romance. This is a Sci-fi, medieval twist based novel. Excellent writing and perfect description of characters. For a character who thought he was ordinary, wasn't so ordinary at all. Great book. Short and sweet and descriptive.
Overall your story is great; it’s written well, and the story is interesting. The only suggestion I have would be to have a chapter where all the sci-fi names/machinery are listed and explained (much like how FCS was explained in chapter 14 iirc). Or make guide us into familiarity by allowing us to grasp each new abbreviation before introducing another term. I love sci-fi, but even this was a little hard for me too follow in the later chapters. The scene with the old man and police officer was rather funny; I would’ve commented, but it kept loading! Anyway, will be following this!
I must say... I'm surprised. It's hard to see a novel about a person going from a less advanced world to a high advenced one. Usually is the other way around. I like it. Only a few grammar error here and there, but what really hooked me up was the interaction between the characters, it was fluid and...human, something quite difficult to find in some novels. Not many forced dialogues. I had a good time reading it, and if you like sci-fi, you might enjoy it.
As the title implies, the villager goes from fantasy to sci-fi! And it's not the same as a certain strange trap who uses mechas in a fantasy world! The author actually uses science fiction elements! It's really interesting in regards to how book 1 went (won't spoil for anyone). If you like sci-fi and are tired of normal reincarnation to fantasy, join Megane-san's journey as he continues this unique story! >3</
So I'll giving you some review.... I saw your post in the forum. I didn't actually read your novel, Because firstly I'm not a fan of a novel like this but I really thought that you are a good writer... Good luck to your novel😃😃😃
The story seems really interesting so far. The character appearances and how they interact with each other is perfect and well since I’m a fan of gore I’d read most of the things that are gory yours does a quite good job. Keep it up and I’m looking forward to the new chapters
I like the mind twist when that fantasy setting turns into a sci-fi setting. I also like that the author has clearly put in effort into researching sci fi themes and terms and has flavoured his work with it, granting a more robust sci-fi feel. Thumbs up!
Decided to be shameless and post a five star review, just cause I can lol. Kidding aside, hope you guys out there do try the novel out. It still has problems and kinks I need to work on, but I'm confident enough to guarantee that the grammar is above average, despite my weakness in using punctuation marks hehe. It's SciFi and Fantasy mashed together, but with a twist. It has Mecha too. Do check it out. And please leave some reviews if you have the time. I'll appreciate some feedback. Any kind of feedback! I'm that desperate lol. Cheers y'all.
The plot is amazing, it fans out smoothly over the chapters. I was instantly hooked after reading first few chapters. The character development and writing proficiency is good, except for a few grammatical errors here and there. Will readily recommend it to readers if they are interested in sci fi and adventurous plots like this one. Keep up the good work 👍
The story is progressing fine. Writing quality is good. I would suggest less of gore. But then if that is your story style, you shouldn't stray. Overall nice story. Good luck.
This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter 16. This is a reversed transported to another world / reincarnated in another world story. It adds the extra spice of both characters involved in the transit retaining their memories, even though it seems to be one entity rather than two conflicting souls sharing one body. This is a story I'm sad to review, because the whole is less than the sum of the parts. Part by part it's a solid five stars all over, but when put together there are cracks in the picture. It all starts out as a campfire tale, the kind where you, the reader, have to envision yourself sitting at a campfire listening to a wizzened greybeard telling the tale of his youth. Sure there are tense errors that can't be chalked down to the taleteller wavering between the tale in the past and his comments about that past, but they're minor and don't disturb the flow. And it's all wonderfully told from that very special first person point of view. Then we have the transit. Suddenly story-snippets in third person point of view are inserted, and for me this is a big no-no. Deciding to run a story in first person allows the author some leeway when it comes to tenses. As an author you get close and personal with the reader, but it comes at the cost of a smaller world, one limited to what can be experienced by the narrator. Adding third person snippets is cheating. The world transited to isn't modern Earth. It's our far future. So kudos for a great setting. Fantasy land goes visiting space opera. Then things get horribly confusing. Flashbacks all over the place, long sections of third person narration just occasionally interspersed by what the main character experiences, back to the now, next flashback, back to the now, next flashback, and after I while I suffer from temporal car-sickness. Stars. Writing: Four stars. Near perfect langage accompanied by mixing first person and third person point of views randomly inserted in the story. Updates: Five stars. Perfect. Story: Three stars. Each and every single part is a rock solid five star chunk, but when joined together we have an unholy mess. Character: Five stars. No discussion. Superb characterisation. World: Five stars. Same here. Superb depiction of the setting, or in this case, settings. Lastly, this is a tale that should have been told straight for the sake of coherence, but readers should give it a chance, because as soon as the temporal chaos is taken care of you'll be reading one hell of a Sci-Fi story told in all but perfect native English where the very language used have a personality of its own.
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Wow! This story is really intriguing 💞💞 I still wanna know more about this story. Great start by the way, the story development is quiet good too. While you handle very well the translation. Keep up the good work, and always do your best. Good luck to us. 😉😉
It's really a great story. I would love to know further!!! the story is quite interesting while reading. Good works Author. My best regards to you😄
This is a really interesting story so far! I like the similarities between Ryuu and the MC before he fell into the "rabbit hole" (they both have a little sister that worries about them ^~^)! The writing is phenomenal, there wasn't any grammar mistakes at all! The writing and story flows very smoothly, and the pace is really nice~ I like that it's in 1st POV, something I haven't encountered before in WN c: The update stability is also really nice, it seems to be updated every 1-2 days which is awesome, especially for a new book! Very interesting story that people should check out if they like the science fiction genre~ Hoping for the best!
This story is one that i would like more if. I really hope it continues to progress. Author keep up the great work. I need more story. The only draw back is that we do not see enough of the merging of two lives. How is it going to work? I need to know more please
Hey guys. This here is my first work posted here on webnovel.com. As I am still very new to writing, I'd appreciate any feedback for my work, positive or otherwise. Please do give it a try. It may not appeal to everyone, I would like to try making it a somewhat unique reading experience. Thanks in advance guys and gals.
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels! + Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing contest! This contest is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi, but if you haven’t worked on these genres, that’s TOTALLY FINE! You can refer to the given examples and tips to develop a new story. As all new stories can get cash rewards, this might be your chance to begin your writing career and start to make a living by writing! Not to mention that you can take your chance to win the big cash and get your books published in hardcover! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/3tBG7l7 or contact kerawood.review@gmail.com
Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact ringdom_promptswriting@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
Hey there! Here are some web novel recommendations for whom share the same taste with me. If you like this story, my recommendations are worth a try! https://docs.google.com/document/d/19R5KkqHOOHSMDkF4fHscVmxWcYGh0OntYsv8NglzsQo/edit?usp=sharing
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact kenreview@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
I generally have a rule that I don't review a story of less than 300 chapters, so reviewing one with less than 50 is a definite first. The easiest way for me to describe your story would be a diamond cut by an jeweler who will eventually become a master of his craft. It's somewhat rough and possesses some obvious flaws but it was obviously well thought out and executed to the best of your ability. If that sounds unpleasant go ahead and ignore it. The key part I want you to realize is that this is where you are now and I think you'll go far beyond it eventually. There is a semi-famous saying among writers that "your first million words are practice". This is part of that. I usually don't give targeted advice, because a.) it can be wrong and b.) sometimes you need to figure it out for yourself. I'll break that here because I have a lot of hope for the author you will grow into. First you need to understand the idiom of "Show, Don't Tell". Almost all of Myst's introduction was recounting what happened and consequentially was very passive. By just recanting what happened to him your not only not letting readers discover things and form their own opinions, your also creating a barrier that prevents them from caring about your characters. Readers care because they experience things with your characters. Second you need to work on your pacing. To be frank your story happened too damn fast. If you were where you are in the plot at closer to a hundred chapters in then you'd be better off. Characters get introduced and events happen at a break neck speed that if executed correctly would suck your readers in and have them captivated, but the flip side is that if the timing is off you leave your readers disoriented and wondering what just happened, confused about whether they should care about it. Your characters are exceptional though, even though they would benefit from better introductions and handling. Frankly you made the bold decision to introduce your MC from a point of failure, not just a low point in his life caused by external forces or 'fate' but one of his own making. This is exceptional, especially considering that most of what people put up here are masturbatory power fantasies as opposed to legitimate stories. You set your story apart with your characters and to a lesser degree your use of dialog. Keep writing, write a lot and write ahead if you can. Stories that rely on their characters to carry them need to update more often then stories that are moved by specifics of plot. Your readers read because they 'care', if there are large gaps in updates then you'll lose them.
I like this story! great plot, writing quality and world background (little lost sometimes) The story development is good and the characters is interesting and well written. Great work author.
This was an awesome book, definitely not what I'm used to since I prefer fantasy and romance. This is a Sci-fi, medieval twist based novel. Excellent writing and perfect description of characters. For a character who thought he was ordinary, wasn't so ordinary at all. Great book. Short and sweet and descriptive.
Overall your story is great; it’s written well, and the story is interesting. The only suggestion I have would be to have a chapter where all the sci-fi names/machinery are listed and explained (much like how FCS was explained in chapter 14 iirc). Or make guide us into familiarity by allowing us to grasp each new abbreviation before introducing another term. I love sci-fi, but even this was a little hard for me too follow in the later chapters. The scene with the old man and police officer was rather funny; I would’ve commented, but it kept loading! Anyway, will be following this!
I must say... I'm surprised. It's hard to see a novel about a person going from a less advanced world to a high advenced one. Usually is the other way around. I like it. Only a few grammar error here and there, but what really hooked me up was the interaction between the characters, it was fluid and...human, something quite difficult to find in some novels. Not many forced dialogues. I had a good time reading it, and if you like sci-fi, you might enjoy it.
As the title implies, the villager goes from fantasy to sci-fi! And it's not the same as a certain strange trap who uses mechas in a fantasy world! The author actually uses science fiction elements! It's really interesting in regards to how book 1 went (won't spoil for anyone). If you like sci-fi and are tired of normal reincarnation to fantasy, join Megane-san's journey as he continues this unique story! >3</
So I'll giving you some review.... I saw your post in the forum. I didn't actually read your novel, Because firstly I'm not a fan of a novel like this but I really thought that you are a good writer... Good luck to your novel😃😃😃
The story seems really interesting so far. The character appearances and how they interact with each other is perfect and well since I’m a fan of gore I’d read most of the things that are gory yours does a quite good job. Keep it up and I’m looking forward to the new chapters
I like the mind twist when that fantasy setting turns into a sci-fi setting. I also like that the author has clearly put in effort into researching sci fi themes and terms and has flavoured his work with it, granting a more robust sci-fi feel. Thumbs up!
Decided to be shameless and post a five star review, just cause I can lol. Kidding aside, hope you guys out there do try the novel out. It still has problems and kinks I need to work on, but I'm confident enough to guarantee that the grammar is above average, despite my weakness in using punctuation marks hehe. It's SciFi and Fantasy mashed together, but with a twist. It has Mecha too. Do check it out. And please leave some reviews if you have the time. I'll appreciate some feedback. Any kind of feedback! I'm that desperate lol. Cheers y'all.
The plot is amazing, it fans out smoothly over the chapters. I was instantly hooked after reading first few chapters. The character development and writing proficiency is good, except for a few grammatical errors here and there. Will readily recommend it to readers if they are interested in sci fi and adventurous plots like this one. Keep up the good work 👍
The story is progressing fine. Writing quality is good. I would suggest less of gore. But then if that is your story style, you shouldn't stray. Overall nice story. Good luck.
This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter 16. This is a reversed transported to another world / reincarnated in another world story. It adds the extra spice of both characters involved in the transit retaining their memories, even though it seems to be one entity rather than two conflicting souls sharing one body. This is a story I'm sad to review, because the whole is less than the sum of the parts. Part by part it's a solid five stars all over, but when put together there are cracks in the picture. It all starts out as a campfire tale, the kind where you, the reader, have to envision yourself sitting at a campfire listening to a wizzened greybeard telling the tale of his youth. Sure there are tense errors that can't be chalked down to the taleteller wavering between the tale in the past and his comments about that past, but they're minor and don't disturb the flow. And it's all wonderfully told from that very special first person point of view. Then we have the transit. Suddenly story-snippets in third person point of view are inserted, and for me this is a big no-no. Deciding to run a story in first person allows the author some leeway when it comes to tenses. As an author you get close and personal with the reader, but it comes at the cost of a smaller world, one limited to what can be experienced by the narrator. Adding third person snippets is cheating. The world transited to isn't modern Earth. It's our far future. So kudos for a great setting. Fantasy land goes visiting space opera. Then things get horribly confusing. Flashbacks all over the place, long sections of third person narration just occasionally interspersed by what the main character experiences, back to the now, next flashback, back to the now, next flashback, and after I while I suffer from temporal car-sickness. Stars. Writing: Four stars. Near perfect langage accompanied by mixing first person and third person point of views randomly inserted in the story. Updates: Five stars. Perfect. Story: Three stars. Each and every single part is a rock solid five star chunk, but when joined together we have an unholy mess. Character: Five stars. No discussion. Superb characterisation. World: Five stars. Same here. Superb depiction of the setting, or in this case, settings. Lastly, this is a tale that should have been told straight for the sake of coherence, but readers should give it a chance, because as soon as the temporal chaos is taken care of you'll be reading one hell of a Sci-Fi story told in all but perfect native English where the very language used have a personality of its own.
Membuka SPOILER Wow! This story is really intriguing 💞💞 I still wanna know more about this story. Great start by the way, the story development is quiet good too. While you handle very well the translation. Keep up the good work, and always do your best. Good luck to us. 😉😉
It's really a great story. I would love to know further!!! the story is quite interesting while reading. Good works Author. My best regards to you😄
This is a really interesting story so far! I like the similarities between Ryuu and the MC before he fell into the "rabbit hole" (they both have a little sister that worries about them ^~^)! The writing is phenomenal, there wasn't any grammar mistakes at all! The writing and story flows very smoothly, and the pace is really nice~ I like that it's in 1st POV, something I haven't encountered before in WN c: The update stability is also really nice, it seems to be updated every 1-2 days which is awesome, especially for a new book! Very interesting story that people should check out if they like the science fiction genre~ Hoping for the best!
This story is one that i would like more if. I really hope it continues to progress. Author keep up the great work. I need more story. The only draw back is that we do not see enough of the merging of two lives. How is it going to work? I need to know more please
Hey guys. This here is my first work posted here on webnovel.com. As I am still very new to writing, I'd appreciate any feedback for my work, positive or otherwise. Please do give it a try. It may not appeal to everyone, I would like to try making it a somewhat unique reading experience. Thanks in advance guys and gals.
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?