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An otherwise decent story with darker beginnings that was spoiled a bit by having an isekai’d protagonist with op powers who happened to have been the only successful outcome of a mad-scientist type experiment who was raised by fake parents and never knew it. A lot of the developments in the story just don’t make sense to me, it feels like someone is going through the motions of their fanfiction checklist. The main character warmed up to the owner of a freaking brothel she was sold to with little retaliation, and out of nowhere starts calling her “mom!” A lot of potential expansions on the dark themes it handles... But boy, does it update fast. I read dozens of chapters in, and still I could never hope to catch up to as complete a review as I’d like to. So yeah, forewarned.
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To the author weldone for your creativity. Your characters are strong. Your writing technique are awesome...keep moving Bec am loving it the more I read it.
Love it! ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜
this book clearly shows that no what where you are no matter what time you are, people will judge you and will judge you no matter what you do. even if they don't have a single clue what you're going through
so far so good still, I just wish for more updates. I hope fl will be able to have more friends who truly care for her. I wish she'd be able to visit her family as well.
Amazing, keep up the great work. The book is different and refreshing and keeps the readers attention quite well, every good story has it's slow points to calm the reader before something dramatic or a long adventure or it would be overwhelming this manages that quite well.
I am enjoying this so far. Has real promise. The development and grammar is good and the pacing has a nice flow. Already have characters I hate and some shrouded in mystery. Great story! P:S_It's probably a bit too early to tell because I'm just at chapter 25, but I honestly LOVE where it's headed!
I found the premise interesting and the story also flows smoothly. Characters themselves are varied and keeps things interesting. However the narration and the paragraph structure need some work as I am oftentimes left confused as to who the speaker is or what exactly is happening. But I am only in the first half of the story and there is still a lot to read and it is just my initial opinion of what I have read so far…
Starting with the title it presents a romance tale which is contrary to the plotline inside. The main lead has demons to protect and aid her in the plans. Stating the world background it's a detailed imagery to narrate the story. Though the second chapter was a bit ambiguous to understand what was actually happening. In a nut shell the narration is a new thing to read when everyone is following the trends this narration is something unique and productive. With all elements blended though certain grammatical errors are there needed to be corrected, but it's readable. ❤
you do inspire me a lot dear. please keep writing. this book needs all the exposure it can get. thank you for writing this book author. you need to improve a bit in your grammar and description,that's all i can say. but its really good book. kisses!
This book is great. It started a little dark but that was because author was trying to capture her background. The progress of the story was amazing. It kept the readers hooked all the time. Not your typical romance book, but still a good read. Thanks for introducing this book to me!
i guess all the story not just on this book is really nice. it's all unique on how it will get you hooked on it then you won't even notice that you've already spent half of the day just reading it. but i have to admit that this book has a nice storyline
This story is truly a hidden gem amongst many other stories. It will capture the readers hearts and emotions chapter after chapter. It is a beautiful and yet terrifying at times story of a young women/girl as it follows her through her transmigration to her new world and family. The world is full of magic and her adoptive mother loves her dearly. The chaos brought into her life never seems to end as those wanting her for there own selfish goals are relentless. Truly a must read and a hidden gem as the story progresses:) Thank you for such a heart grabbing story :)
Omg, this story is so amazing. The author truly has a great imagination and created a wonderful world and characters. The story of Ariana is amazing. If you like romance, magic, fantasy, action and everything else this story has it :) Truly a hidden Jem :)
I truly amazing journey of a young girl going through trials and tribulations. From tears to joy and fear to terror and then calm. Ariana is an amazing young girl on her way to becoming a young women. She meets the nastiest and nicest people along the way. Her journey is incredible and powerful and will move the reader through tears and joy as well :) Thank you for such a great story and please keep it going :)
This story can take your emotions any direction at any time. One never truly knows just what might happen next. Ariana is a beautiful young girl with the soul of a young women from another time and world. In this world she is chased by a dark corrupt church and the corrupt council. All she has are her adopted family and her friends. She has power within her but it needs time to grow and mature. Who will win and at what cost. Thank you so much for the great story so far and please keep updating it :)
I have read your work until Chapter 26 and here is my review that reflects my thoughts about your writing Writing Quality - No complaints there. You seem proficient enough in English which is a plus in my book. Atleast, I don't have to keep correcting the tenses or verbs as I read. Thank God for that 🙂🙂 Stability of Updates - This doesn't matter to me much since sometimes a writer needs more time to flesh out the details. I myself sometimes scrap the overall first draft and start anew with a different plot/mindset in some chapters. Also, as a voracious reader myself, I had rather have the author concentrate on quality than quantity. Story Development - The story started off with gruesome things happening to the MC. Being sold off to a brothel by your mother just because your father couldn't keep his hands off you might leave a person physiologically imbalanced. With the first chapter, it becomes clear that it's not going to be a slow dragging process which sets the pace nicely but at times it's too fast and leaves the reader lagging behind with their mind stuck on something else. Character Design - The author doesn't fall into the quagmire of the stereotypical characters which is a plus. On the other hand, I feel the author can work a bit more on it and add a bit more gravitas to their thoughts and future development. World Background - Hmmm.... Maybe the author should work a bit more on this but that might just be my own preference and other readers are fine with the way things are. Hopefully, this review will help the author and they won't come with lit torches and sharpened knives at me while being asleep. 🙂🙂🙂
This story started out very dark for me in the first chapters but it has gained my support and interest. The story has a strong FL who is young and vibrant, she has lots of character and loves her friends and family. They are her reverse dragon scale. She has to protect them as they have to protect her from an evil organization and religion. The story covers every emotion one has. Please keep on writing and look forward to seeing many more chapters. Thank you. :)
When reviewing, I always give each category one extra star to the score. Except for newbie writers, who receive two stars. Writing Quality 4: Writing has very little grammar mistakes, such as swapping "you're" for "your", but again, these are very rare. Beyond that, there are some awkward sentences. Not that they're wrong, just that it doesn't feel like what a person would say, such as, "What is your level of skill in the kitchen?" or "Stop it! You are confusing enough! My heart can't take any more cuteness!" And finally, I would recommend breaking down some of the paragraphs, so that they don't become blocks of text. Especially when there are two speakers in the same paragraph. Stability of Updates 5: Personally, I don't like this category, as sometimes the writer needs more time to finish up a chapter, but may end up sacrificing the quality to keep the release rate, so I always give it a 5. Story Development 4: Story flows well enough, and it manages to hold the reader's attention, despite some of the events sounding a bit far fetched, such as how MC tricks the brothel owner at the beginning. Character Design 5: Characters are quite distinct from one another and interesting. World Background 3: This category could be improved, in hopes to paint a better picture of the environment in the reader's mind. Better doesn't mean a nicer picture, but one that the reader can more clearly understand. Review score (4+5+4+5+3)/5 = 4.2 Score given = (5+5+5+5+4)/5 = 4.8
Just started the first chapters and I am so horrified by how the story runs. The author writes so well and describe the scenes perfectly that readers will surely get goosebumps. I can't imagine what the future of this girl be like, sold at 12 years old and exposed to the dark world at such an age? Yet, I very well know that this happens in real life.
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The synopsis is quite interesting and different from the others.... The plot will drag you to the story itself... The character background is good too... I hope The main lead find what she's looking for..... Fighting!!! Keep it up author...
This story is really enjoyable, and can take you through multiple emotions in one chapter. I wasn't sure at the start of the story but give it a chance and I am truly enjoying it. It cause me to be happy, sad, angry and everything in between. Highly recommended :)
This is a very interesting story with lots of twists and turns. It has tear inducing chapters and and funny chapters, excitement and sadness. Your never sure just what is going to happen or when. It is a very good read :)
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You have a lot going in there so I’m not going there because you don’t know me when I’m done ✅ you need a good night I don’t think 🤔 I wanna play pool
You guys have just finished my house 🏠 I have just been a lot more fun and then I’m not gonna it I want it and it’s fun and I’m so pretty and you can’t go to the other side
The plot and synopsis are interesting, and something I've been trying to find which was why I was so excited when I found this novel. However, your grammar needs working on and the situations in the novel are too fast paced that it makes my head hurt reading it. I'm constantly confused when one situation moves to the next so quickly.
Even though I think it’s a good story, I have only read about 10 chapters before dropping it. I simply can’t get hooked into dark stories, but if somebody can ignore that parts, then it’s a fine novel. The plot moves pretty fast, and I enjoyed the way the MC progressed. The story is written properly, with barely any noticeable grammar mistakes. The only downside to the novel would be the slow update rate, but the chapters are pretty long so it’s not tragic.
Interesting story, though it moved a bit too quickly for my liking, but that's just my personal preference. In particular, I feel like the development with Lady Zula developed a bit too quickly. I do like how the story is developing so far, and how the MC is coming along in character. The descriptions are vivid and the readers get a better sense of what is happening in the story. I enjoyed reading the story so far! Keep up the good work, author! :) Hoping to see more soon.
Hello! This is my second novel, my first being Hinder-Rella. I am going with a darker tone to this one. More of an adventure/romance/comedy/not meant for pure minds that will easily be corrupted by my words and can never look at the world same way kinda feel. Any who I am warning you know, there is only one chapter and it jumped right into a bad place the happy go lucky then bad again. So be warned this is almost nothing like Hinder-Rella unless you read the murder scene or toture scene or parental abuse scene. Cause it's kinda like that but maybe worse haven't decided but here you go. My way to you. Happy reading!
An otherwise decent story with darker beginnings that was spoiled a bit by having an isekai’d protagonist with op powers who happened to have been the only successful outcome of a mad-scientist type experiment who was raised by fake parents and never knew it. A lot of the developments in the story just don’t make sense to me, it feels like someone is going through the motions of their fanfiction checklist. The main character warmed up to the owner of a freaking brothel she was sold to with little retaliation, and out of nowhere starts calling her “mom!” A lot of potential expansions on the dark themes it handles... But boy, does it update fast. I read dozens of chapters in, and still I could never hope to catch up to as complete a review as I’d like to. So yeah, forewarned.
Membuka SPOILER To the author weldone for your creativity. Your characters are strong. Your writing technique are awesome...keep moving Bec am loving it the more I read it.
Love it! ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜 ♥️❤💛🧡💚💙💜
this book clearly shows that no what where you are no matter what time you are, people will judge you and will judge you no matter what you do. even if they don't have a single clue what you're going through
so far so good still, I just wish for more updates. I hope fl will be able to have more friends who truly care for her. I wish she'd be able to visit her family as well.
Amazing, keep up the great work. The book is different and refreshing and keeps the readers attention quite well, every good story has it's slow points to calm the reader before something dramatic or a long adventure or it would be overwhelming this manages that quite well.
I am enjoying this so far. Has real promise. The development and grammar is good and the pacing has a nice flow. Already have characters I hate and some shrouded in mystery. Great story! P:S_It's probably a bit too early to tell because I'm just at chapter 25, but I honestly LOVE where it's headed!
I found the premise interesting and the story also flows smoothly. Characters themselves are varied and keeps things interesting. However the narration and the paragraph structure need some work as I am oftentimes left confused as to who the speaker is or what exactly is happening. But I am only in the first half of the story and there is still a lot to read and it is just my initial opinion of what I have read so far…
Starting with the title it presents a romance tale which is contrary to the plotline inside. The main lead has demons to protect and aid her in the plans. Stating the world background it's a detailed imagery to narrate the story. Though the second chapter was a bit ambiguous to understand what was actually happening. In a nut shell the narration is a new thing to read when everyone is following the trends this narration is something unique and productive. With all elements blended though certain grammatical errors are there needed to be corrected, but it's readable. ❤
you do inspire me a lot dear. please keep writing. this book needs all the exposure it can get. thank you for writing this book author. you need to improve a bit in your grammar and description,that's all i can say. but its really good book. kisses!
This book is great. It started a little dark but that was because author was trying to capture her background. The progress of the story was amazing. It kept the readers hooked all the time. Not your typical romance book, but still a good read. Thanks for introducing this book to me!
i guess all the story not just on this book is really nice. it's all unique on how it will get you hooked on it then you won't even notice that you've already spent half of the day just reading it. but i have to admit that this book has a nice storyline
This story is truly a hidden gem amongst many other stories. It will capture the readers hearts and emotions chapter after chapter. It is a beautiful and yet terrifying at times story of a young women/girl as it follows her through her transmigration to her new world and family. The world is full of magic and her adoptive mother loves her dearly. The chaos brought into her life never seems to end as those wanting her for there own selfish goals are relentless. Truly a must read and a hidden gem as the story progresses:) Thank you for such a heart grabbing story :)
Omg, this story is so amazing. The author truly has a great imagination and created a wonderful world and characters. The story of Ariana is amazing. If you like romance, magic, fantasy, action and everything else this story has it :) Truly a hidden Jem :)
I truly amazing journey of a young girl going through trials and tribulations. From tears to joy and fear to terror and then calm. Ariana is an amazing young girl on her way to becoming a young women. She meets the nastiest and nicest people along the way. Her journey is incredible and powerful and will move the reader through tears and joy as well :) Thank you for such a great story and please keep it going :)
This story can take your emotions any direction at any time. One never truly knows just what might happen next. Ariana is a beautiful young girl with the soul of a young women from another time and world. In this world she is chased by a dark corrupt church and the corrupt council. All she has are her adopted family and her friends. She has power within her but it needs time to grow and mature. Who will win and at what cost. Thank you so much for the great story so far and please keep updating it :)
I have read your work until Chapter 26 and here is my review that reflects my thoughts about your writing Writing Quality - No complaints there. You seem proficient enough in English which is a plus in my book. Atleast, I don't have to keep correcting the tenses or verbs as I read. Thank God for that 🙂🙂 Stability of Updates - This doesn't matter to me much since sometimes a writer needs more time to flesh out the details. I myself sometimes scrap the overall first draft and start anew with a different plot/mindset in some chapters. Also, as a voracious reader myself, I had rather have the author concentrate on quality than quantity. Story Development - The story started off with gruesome things happening to the MC. Being sold off to a brothel by your mother just because your father couldn't keep his hands off you might leave a person physiologically imbalanced. With the first chapter, it becomes clear that it's not going to be a slow dragging process which sets the pace nicely but at times it's too fast and leaves the reader lagging behind with their mind stuck on something else. Character Design - The author doesn't fall into the quagmire of the stereotypical characters which is a plus. On the other hand, I feel the author can work a bit more on it and add a bit more gravitas to their thoughts and future development. World Background - Hmmm.... Maybe the author should work a bit more on this but that might just be my own preference and other readers are fine with the way things are. Hopefully, this review will help the author and they won't come with lit torches and sharpened knives at me while being asleep. 🙂🙂🙂
This story started out very dark for me in the first chapters but it has gained my support and interest. The story has a strong FL who is young and vibrant, she has lots of character and loves her friends and family. They are her reverse dragon scale. She has to protect them as they have to protect her from an evil organization and religion. The story covers every emotion one has. Please keep on writing and look forward to seeing many more chapters. Thank you. :)
When reviewing, I always give each category one extra star to the score. Except for newbie writers, who receive two stars. Writing Quality 4: Writing has very little grammar mistakes, such as swapping "you're" for "your", but again, these are very rare. Beyond that, there are some awkward sentences. Not that they're wrong, just that it doesn't feel like what a person would say, such as, "What is your level of skill in the kitchen?" or "Stop it! You are confusing enough! My heart can't take any more cuteness!" And finally, I would recommend breaking down some of the paragraphs, so that they don't become blocks of text. Especially when there are two speakers in the same paragraph. Stability of Updates 5: Personally, I don't like this category, as sometimes the writer needs more time to finish up a chapter, but may end up sacrificing the quality to keep the release rate, so I always give it a 5. Story Development 4: Story flows well enough, and it manages to hold the reader's attention, despite some of the events sounding a bit far fetched, such as how MC tricks the brothel owner at the beginning. Character Design 5: Characters are quite distinct from one another and interesting. World Background 3: This category could be improved, in hopes to paint a better picture of the environment in the reader's mind. Better doesn't mean a nicer picture, but one that the reader can more clearly understand. Review score (4+5+4+5+3)/5 = 4.2 Score given = (5+5+5+5+4)/5 = 4.8
Just started the first chapters and I am so horrified by how the story runs. The author writes so well and describe the scenes perfectly that readers will surely get goosebumps. I can't imagine what the future of this girl be like, sold at 12 years old and exposed to the dark world at such an age? Yet, I very well know that this happens in real life.
Membuka SPOILER The synopsis is quite interesting and different from the others.... The plot will drag you to the story itself... The character background is good too... I hope The main lead find what she's looking for..... Fighting!!! Keep it up author...
This story is really enjoyable, and can take you through multiple emotions in one chapter. I wasn't sure at the start of the story but give it a chance and I am truly enjoying it. It cause me to be happy, sad, angry and everything in between. Highly recommended :)
This is a very interesting story with lots of twists and turns. It has tear inducing chapters and and funny chapters, excitement and sadness. Your never sure just what is going to happen or when. It is a very good read :)
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You have a lot going in there so I’m not going there because you don’t know me when I’m done ✅ you need a good night I don’t think 🤔 I wanna play pool
You guys have just finished my house 🏠 I have just been a lot more fun and then I’m not gonna it I want it and it’s fun and I’m so pretty and you can’t go to the other side
The plot and synopsis are interesting, and something I've been trying to find which was why I was so excited when I found this novel. However, your grammar needs working on and the situations in the novel are too fast paced that it makes my head hurt reading it. I'm constantly confused when one situation moves to the next so quickly.
Even though I think it’s a good story, I have only read about 10 chapters before dropping it. I simply can’t get hooked into dark stories, but if somebody can ignore that parts, then it’s a fine novel. The plot moves pretty fast, and I enjoyed the way the MC progressed. The story is written properly, with barely any noticeable grammar mistakes. The only downside to the novel would be the slow update rate, but the chapters are pretty long so it’s not tragic.
Interesting story, though it moved a bit too quickly for my liking, but that's just my personal preference. In particular, I feel like the development with Lady Zula developed a bit too quickly. I do like how the story is developing so far, and how the MC is coming along in character. The descriptions are vivid and the readers get a better sense of what is happening in the story. I enjoyed reading the story so far! Keep up the good work, author! :) Hoping to see more soon.
Hello! This is my second novel, my first being Hinder-Rella. I am going with a darker tone to this one. More of an adventure/romance/comedy/not meant for pure minds that will easily be corrupted by my words and can never look at the world same way kinda feel. Any who I am warning you know, there is only one chapter and it jumped right into a bad place the happy go lucky then bad again. So be warned this is almost nothing like Hinder-Rella unless you read the murder scene or toture scene or parental abuse scene. Cause it's kinda like that but maybe worse haven't decided but here you go. My way to you. Happy reading!