Honestly it's good that you got rid of it, but instead of Grindelwald, you could've made some fate-like encounter with a god or sth, maybe death not liking the weapon itself. Grindelwald, while stronger for sure, still shouldn't have come close to stopping this. I think you're massively raising power levels for both dumbs and grinder if you leave it like this?
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Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
Book&Literature · athass_prkr
These are the facts from previous paragraphs: -He has a twin brother. -He can't remember his brother's face. -He has an older brother and a little brother. -He has a good memory and can remember something like 1 yr 2 mnth 1 wk 3 days. (Quite a few contradictions in paragraphs above author bro, maybe take a look, but dw I'll keep going) And of course fire nation attacks. <3
"What can I say? A cornered rat, as they say," I left the sentence unfinished, knowing they would understand as they had heard me say it before. "In short, that's it. Now, back to the point... When my older brother and I were fourteen, some kid caught us practicing. He was quite young, only about ten or eleven. It's funny that everything that happened next started with him. He was the son of a trader who had stopped in our village for some rest. My brother and mom didn't pay much attention to it, and neither did I, but I have a good memory, as I've mentioned before. The trader left the village the next day, and three days later, soldiers from the Fire Nation arrived in the village. They were looking for water and earthbenders. Our parents and all the villagers refused to cooperate, but the soldiers didn't wait. Moreover, they had a firebender with them..."
Avatar The Last Airbender: Not Avatar
Anime & Comics · Vandalizer
btw, you can try using chatgpt for this maybe? E.g. write what you want him to say, and ask gpt to make some kind of rhyme with it.Modern solutions 😁
[A/N: I always assumed that Danzo would be the toughest character to write. I never thought it'd be Killer Bee. His dialogues are tough to write!]
Naruto : The Wind Calamity
Fantasy · Devil_Hex
I couldn't figure out whether you were translating or creating your own story with the pace you are going at, but whatever it is - I love your consistency and quality!I don't have any suggestion really, love everything so far, just wanted to let you know 👋👌
While we are still approaching the end of this story, write to me in the comments. What elements would you like to be present in the new story? Which aspects of this story do you think should be improved for the next one, and which should be minimized?
BTTH Life Simulator System
Anime & Comics · Kisshot
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"I know he can use the spell that is created by Jon Dare! I still don't get the connection between these two."
Dragonborn Saga
Video Games · El_Don
He shared his intrusive thoughts
I need to put those two bad girls in some serious mental trauma as soon as possible, else, I will be the one suffering for their actions from now onward.
Dragonborn Saga
Video Games · El_Don
I lost too many braincells already:3 adios
Selling a top-tier model of the latest Holographic Chamber would earn her a commission of over 30,000 dollars!
Sacrifice's Rise: I Became Invincible After Entering Godslayer Temple
Fantasy · White_Ink
It's a pretty nice read, much better than it's current rating. I usually give a try to any novel with decent grammar(this one qualifies). As with any fan-fic, you always have to close one eye on some details - author's touch, but up to this point(ch ~90) it's rather enjoyable for me. Keep up the good work author!
Malfoy shook his head before shouting, "This doesn't matter! More importantly, enemies of the Heir, beware! You'll be next, Mudbloods!" once again guiding general attention onto the petrified cat and the five people already present in the corridor.
[HP X DXD] Master of a Universe
Book&Literature · Ashmodai
Bro you really have a knack for writing comic scenes, whole thing up till now was awesome. You only need to get a PR at this point for small grammar mistakes, otherwise it's perfect. Keep up the good work!
'Well done son, you are exceeding your parent's expectations. Just when I thought you had already reached your limit on how bad you could fuck us up, you had to piss on Guuji-sama. I am truly humbled' Yahiko nodded sagely, having already made peace with his future.
Souls in Teyvat
Video Games · ARandomMob