RitzBlitz

1mth

Commented

Did you change the chapter?

ch 29 Blooming business_2

Expose other to get stronger

Eastern · king_villaa

RitzBlitz

1mth

Commented

Be a little more careful when using Grammarly. Just check one sentence at a time. Also, I can’t scroll down from chapter 26 to chapter 27. Some problems with webnovel.

ch 27 effect of Mushroom of Vigor

Expose other to get stronger

Eastern · king_villaa

RitzBlitz

1mth

Commented

It should be “the beggar’s mocking words”.

Chen Yang staggered, thrown off balance by the beggar's moking words. "Young miss ? Do not give me that nonsense! Do you think I will let you go if you claim her as your young miss?" He trailed off, his cheeks flushing slightly. "Erm and I know where is my mushroom."

Expose other to get stronger

Eastern · king_villaa

RitzBlitz

1mth

Commented

Nice, you used my suggestion. This chapter has almost no problems and is easy to read. I suggest re-doing the previous chapters using Grammarly/Quillbot or something else. That way more people will read the starting chapters.

ch 26 Mushroom of Vigor.

Expose other to get stronger

Eastern · king_villaa

RitzBlitz

1mth

Commented

No ideas for the story, just a recommendation to use Grammarly or another English language checking app while writing. It’s a little difficult to understand.

ch 25 Xu clan

Expose other to get stronger

Eastern · king_villaa

RitzBlitz - Profile

RitzBlitz

Badges 3

Moments 5

Expose other to get stronger

Expose other to get stronger

Expose other to get stronger

Expose other to get stronger

Expose other to get stronger