nah you're doing good. it's i who need to improve.
"Just when is this cold getting over…" He muttered to himself. The temperature was below the freezing point, and it was snowing heavily. To such extent that even his black hair looked completely white. His white skin was looking paler and more reddish as if he was suffering from fever.
The tower of Destiny
Fantasy · LuciferTheDevil767
ahh, i see...damn this helps a lot, thanks mate
"Oh shit, it's night already!"
The tower of Destiny
Fantasy · LuciferTheDevil767
i meant that as in 'when is the winter getting over?'
"Just when is this cold getting over…" He muttered to himself. The temperature was below the freezing point, and it was snowing heavily. To such extent that even his black hair looked completely white. His white skin was looking paler and more reddish as if he was suffering from fever.
The tower of Destiny
Fantasy · LuciferTheDevil767
Hmm, I think you should have added a bit more reaction in the part where the Mc gets reincarnated...like it felt as if he accepted everything a bit too quickly
I read the first chapter after that i had to go for dinner😅
I see...i'll try to improve♥
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In the beginning, God created the heavens and the earth. The earth was without form, and void; and darkness was on the face of the deep. And the Spirit of God was hovering over the face of the waters. Then God said, "LET BRO COOK" 🗣🔥🔥🔥
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no more what?
I met her gaze, my expression unchanged. "There are nuances to consider, Kushida," I replied, my voice devoid of any warmth. "I said I wouldn't reveal your actions to the class. And I kept my word."
COTE: Harem Route
Anime & Comics · Evil_Villain
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original The tower of Destiny
Adam was a normal highschooler who was returning back from his school. That was when he saw something glowing under the snow. Curious about it, he picked the object taking it home, unknown that it was going to turn his life upside down... ----- (A/N: This is my first book so I hope that you can go easy on me on the reviews T_T) The cover art is not mine so if it belongs to you and you want it removed, please leave a message :)4 Chs 8 Collections
kay, i will
"Just when is this cold getting over…" He muttered to himself. The temperature was below the freezing point, and it was snowing heavily. To such extent that even his black hair looked completely white. His white skin was looking paler and more reddish as if he was suffering from fever.
The tower of Destiny
Fantasy · LuciferTheDevil767