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Votre fanfic est plein d'incohérence et de faute dans l'intrigue, tout d'abord minato et kushina et les autre de leurs génération ont obtenu leurs diplôme de ninja pendant la 2nd grande guerre shinobi et y'ont participer , à la fin je pence qu'il sont devenu jonin ou chunin je ne m'en souviens plus , et ma chronologie à laquelle vous est celle ou kakashi est à l'académie je pense , votre fanfic serai si vous commencez par corriger cette incohérence dans la chronologie , après je n'ai lu que quelques chapitres pour savoir que c'est épouvantable surtout avec le défaut de la chronologie , franchement vous avez beaucoup de chose qui ont besoin d'être corrigé

It's not my habit to give a review like that but THIS STORY IS REAL SHIT 🤢🤢🤢🤢, I'm even surprised that there are people who read it and even that the webnovel allows this kind of pedophile story and what's more it has no similarity with the plot of Naruto, seriously, the story should be reported to the site managers

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Not you I was talking to the author

I just reread the chapters, everything is fine until I get to chapters [yggdrasil 2 to 4] and as for the no-harem, it's perfect, it's so difficult to find no-harem on the web novel after have read all the no-harem novels, even the abandoned novels

the novel is perfect, but the only problem here is the grammar problem, also, the author should be careful between the normal discussions and the characters' thoughts (especially in the last chapters), because it makes reading the last chapters a a little confusing, I don't know if the author uses AI to help him or if he simply decided to change his writing but I recommend writing like in the first chapters because it's much better. in short, regarding the novel I cannot give a detailed review since the novel is only at the beginning, but apart from some problems with grammar and dialogue, the novel is on the right track. (PS: I hope the author doesn't sabotage the novel with the harem 😟)

your other novel is also a harem 😒

yeah, I just started your novel, even if I like it at the moment I haven't rated it yet, anyway, it's not just me who thinks so but the harem spoils the novel and with just one love interest, you can focus on the development of the story and of characters, rather than wasting time thinking of other waifu to add to the harem

Please, no-harem

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