weedle_enthusiast

weedle_enthusiast

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2023-07-06 Joint Global
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weedle_enthusiast
weedle_enthusiast
1 years ago
Posted

I have only read the first three chapters so take this review with a grain of salt. The writing quality has no instantly noticeable flaws but lacks details about the protagonists surroundings this is very important especially in an environment such as Rain World. I do find the description of our main character lacking, without a pool of water or a mirror the readers should at least be provided with a body shape and colors to help readers minds fill in the blanks that any written text may not have. I do know how slug cats look but with the verities of them suck was Gourmand and Saint The story itself (especially with the sudden pace change with the blue lizard) stays fluently Chaotic. with how the world of Rain world operates this is quite pleasant. This kind of writing perfectly follows the game itself. Constantly changes from eating little bugs one second to getting drowned by a red eyed pole, this is what I hope won't change too much during this story. Thx for reading. -Blipbug Lover

weedle_enthusiast
weedle_enthusiast
1 years ago
Commented

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'I'm guessing 'Indomitable' is passive, so let's check out 'Bone Shield,' Finn thought as he extended his hands, attempting to utilize [Bone Shield]. Unfortunately, nothing happened, leaving him disappointed. However, his disappointment was short-lived as a notification from the system quickly rang out.

Rain World: The Knight

Rain World: The Knight

Video Games · chaoticCatholic

weedle_enthusiast
weedle_enthusiast
1 years ago
Commented

yes new chap!

(this chapter is incredibly long[10k] and the end of the arc of the vampires, I hope you enjoy it and sorry for the delay)

I am the son of Simon Petrikov (An adventure time fanfic)

I am the son of Simon Petrikov (An adventure time fanfic)

Anime & Comics · Dagon_vcg

weedle_enthusiast
weedle_enthusiast
1 years ago
Commented

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The sandseals are well-trained, and I'm easily able to pilot the carriage back behind a dome near the battlefield.

I'm in Hyrule? - A Zelda Fanfic.

I'm in Hyrule? - A Zelda Fanfic.

Video Games · Mctoasty_Jr