Thanks for your thoughts. You’re right about the story being slow—it’s intentional to keep things realistic. Everything so far happened in just less than five days, and Kia’s only had the system for about two. It’d be weird if he suddenly had tons of powers when he’s still figuring out how it all works, especially since I want him to grow stronger over time. As for the world-building, I get where you’re coming from. It’s set in a world like ours, just with different names for places. I’ll work on making that clearer so readers can picture everything better. Appreciate the feedback!
Hey, thanks for sharing your thoughts! I get that the story’s pace might not be everyone’s thing. I’m trying to show how the character’s dealing with this new system and the whole zombie chaos bit by bit. I hear you on wanting more clarity on the system and the character’s development. I’ll keep that in mind as I keep writing. If you have any specific ideas on how I could make it clearer or more exciting, let me know! Appreciate you reading!
I get what you mean, and that’s valid. But my dad always washed my baby sister whenever my mom was busy. (I am saying baby cause she’s the last born and around the same age) that’s what I was thinking of when I wrote this scene and as for kia, they have an older brother and baby sister relationship throughout the story.
Sofia shrugged. "I never had to do it by myself before, Papa always helped me," she said.
Rise of a Zombie System
Sci-fi · Hustwrites
Error, I will correct it
Kia sat quietly and watched as Chloe struggled to climb up into a chair.
Rise of a Zombie System
Sci-fi · Hustwrites
Thank you for the gift🤯 and my first gift at that
But if there should be on, it would be single fl
Little or no romance, still debating
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original Rise of a Zombie System
Kia, a lonely orphan, has always felt like an outcast. Bullied and abused all his life, he sees no escape from his tormentors. He has no friends, no family, and no hope. Desperate to find some way to end the pain, he devises a plan to take his own life. But just as he's about to take that final step, a sudden outbreak of zombies sweeps across the city. The world as he knows it is turned upside down, and he finds himself caught in the middle of a zombie apocalypse. With the help of a mysterious system that grants him unique abilities. Kia must find a way to survive and fight to stay alive, all while trying to schedule in some quality ‘end-of-life planning'. Talk about bad timing!66 Chs 390 Collections
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After the Accident, I started seeing Ghosts
16-year-old Tessa Marlowe was like any other teenager, stressing over her bad grades and her big concert she’d been looking forward to for months. Everything was going just fine until one day she got hit by a bus. After that, she started seeing creepy ghosts everywhere. At first, she thought they’d go away if she ignored them, but they just kept showing up and getting scarier. This made her really anxious and messed up her mental health. She tried lots of ways to keep them away, but nothing worked. That was until she realized the only way to get rid of them was to help them move on.4 Chs 0 Collections
That was because he didn’t care. From the start, he has repeatedly said he wanted to end his life. So he wasn’t taking any of these seriously until he was put in a situation where he has no choice. plus many features of the watch hasn’t been unlocked, he is still in the lowest rank.
Rise of a Zombie System
Sci-fi · Hustwrites