DaoistfuvGEp

DaoistfuvGEp

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book reader and authur.

2023-06-12 Joint India
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DaoistfuvGEp
3 months ago
Replied to Kirin_Toudou

just enjoy my friend and give me a honest review. and no need for extra words and tags to fill my word limit.

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DaoistfuvGEp
1 years ago
Posted

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DaoistfuvGEp
1 years ago
Replied to Naruto_uzumaki_7792

because in anime this admiral is the strongest

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DaoistfuvGEp
1 years ago
Replied to Upcoming_Region

thanks you for your review it matter's a lot for me.

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DaoistfuvGEp
1 years ago
Commented

plzz continue this bro take this novels as your writing experince for your other works but plzz continue

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DaoistfuvGEp
1 years ago
Posted

very good story writing and i love it . the MC is not too powerfull and smooth story make it more enterrtaing. not booring at all caracter development is also very good. overall it very good novel to read . URGING AUTHOR TO CARRY ON THE STORY. there is no grammer mistakes at all this and good story telling of author make to read it more . VERY ENTERTAINING.

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DaoistfuvGEp
1 years ago
Commented

very good plzz post more chapters and plzz dont think of harem okk and make MC ruthless and domenerring by using friqunt hakis and his physic and if he stay solo no crew making but being frnd of luffy and other . and try to not disturb timeline before ace and luffy meet in marinfoert by helping them after luffy conquer haki unlock.until then just make the MC train and master all the things and make him pwerfull and plzz dont let the MC eat any devilfrut make use of his physic amd all hakis and teqneques and make him little ruthless . make sure to show his kryptonian physic more like flying and other power to dominate . plz consider these points author

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DaoistfuvGEp
1 years ago
Posted

story is good but grammer mistakes cant be handeled . the should have used the ne lie storyline more better way for ex he should have befriended ne lie and his frnds and developing at op lvl side by side of ne lie , the harem thing was really bad he should have only frnded the first girl and had developed a relation in future andwith this we would exprience two couples in the story of MC and nielie . the auther made a mistake by taking nie lie dantian in last he should have comfronted him and then reveling him about the info he know about ne lie past live and then not reveling his system somehow befrending ne lie and so he can get more info from nie lie and get a good frnd circle plz make these changes authur u develop the MC without distoubing the actual storyline use ne lie story but make MC more of a hidden mystry and a powerhouse but by surfing the story line with nelie by the side .