Everything about this seems very OK in a mediocre sense. Seems more like a child wrote it than a real adult. On the other hand, it'd be a good children's novel.
Your writing is perfect. Updating schedule SUCKS! Story, characters and world seem OK. Anyways continue adding more chapters for freaking God's sake!
Hands in the air, this is an anime-worthy story! I can already imagine a whole series produced based on this. Adam, Eve, Michael and Radiyana make a new kind of group dynamic. All in all, a great work!
In The Wildest Dimensions
Urban · Distil