Really good first chapter! I was just somewhat confused with, "Lydia brought them to a stop." Who is Lydia?
This is a great story so far and definitely interesting. The writing style is well done and easy to follow along. Keep up the good work I can't wait for the next chapter!
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Hi it's me, the author Writing this story is a blast and I have big plans for Ozul's future. I love reading everyone's comments and reviews, it keeps me motivated! This is my first Webnovel so if you have any constructive criticism please let me know! I am always improving my writing style so it'll change a bit as the story progresses. Thanks for all the support!
I really love both the flow of this novel and the characters so far. The story is interesting, and it grabs my attention. Please continue writing!
This has been a great read and I can't wait for what happens next! I love the dynamic between the characters and the flow of the book. It is easy to read and full of great dialogue.
Even though this genre is heavily written about, the author does a great job of framing it in a new and refreshing way. The dialogue seems real, and the world building is well done. Please keep up the good work and continue writing!
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Ozul reincarnated as a Disturbed Umbra, a monster at the bottom of the food chain. Will he keep his humanity, or fight against his former species? Ozul found himself encircled by boulders in a massive cavern. Dozens of shadowy wisps like creatures floated all around. It reminded him of looking into an aquarium and seeing the encaged fish swimming along in their depressed existence. "Well, this doesn’t look promising," Ozul thought as his excitement was crushed. He tried running his fingers through his hair but came to a horrifying realization. “What the hell?! Where are my arms?!” he screamed. A sudden nauseating feeling washed over him, his body felt wrong and distorted. Shocked, Ozul froze and thought, "I’m not human!" Taking a deep breath, he peered down, and terror filled him. He looked similar to the creatures flying overhead. He had sections of darkened ribcage sticking out of a ghostly black body. He had no arms or legs, and everything was shadowy and shifting like a slow-moving current.14 Chs 75 Collections
I've really enjoyed the story so far and the pacing is well done. There are a few grammatical mistakes, but they are barely noticeable. Overall, I would recommend it to a friend and am excited for more updates. Please keep writing!
The Eidolon and I
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