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In love with this so far. Please, you have to keep writing this, if you drop this I will call upon the The Death Korps of Krieg to take you so you can repent for your treachery against the Emperor of Mankind. FOR THE EMPORER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! [img=update] [img=update] [img=update] [img=update]

I really enjoyed the read, but could have had a slightly more thought out and better explained/expanded ending. The (translated?) English was pretty good, there were a number of times where grammar or word order made me have to read twice to understand it properly. But over all it was really good and I thoroughly enjoyed the story.

I love the character and the story so far. It could do with some professional editing (grammar and incorrect words at times). But overall it is a great story with a twist that is somewhat original (at least I haven't read any HP fanfic that is similar)

I must say that I am thoroughly enjoying this so far. I'm looking forward to more chapters. I can't wait for the story to progress. [img=coins][img=exp]