La_o_n_u

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2022-02-12 Joint Argentina
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2 months ago
Commented

This is the best Dragon Ball fanfiction in history; some parts even surpass the original. I have some ideas for Ajax's abilities. I've always liked characters who use common abilities and make them op, so I thought Ajax could improve something as common as ki detection to the point where he can analyze the enemy's ki circulation and predict their attack before they make it, similar to Spiderman's spider-sense. I also thought that if he learns teleportation, he could improve it by making ki marks to detect and teleport, similar to Minato's Hiraishin mark. This would turn it from a transportation technique to a combat tool. With improved ki detection + zone + enhanced teleportation, he'd have a solid defense/attack repertoire. (Translate)

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La_o_n_u
9 months ago
Posted

I'm not one to leave reviews but this story deserves it. good grammar, entertaining and fluid dialogue, good pacing and captures very well what Superman represents (translator)

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La_o_n_u
1 years ago
Commented

How well done are the personalities of the characters, although the same thing happens as in the canon, the story does not feel repetitive or boring (translator)

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1 years ago
Commented

excellent story, good pace, with fluid and entertaining conversations (translator)

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La_o_n_u
1 years ago
Commented

good chapter, it's the first time I've seen a protagonist grow with Usopp, in addition to the conversations that were quite fluid (translator)

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1 years ago
Commented

When the protagonist uses tessaiga, does he use it in his katana form or his fang form? (translator)

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La_o_n_u
1 years ago
Commented

A piece of advice for this story or another one that you decide to write would be to give the protagonist a trait that makes him or her stand out more, it could be of any type like a paranoid personality like Batman, a prankster like Spiderman, a manipulator like Aizen, being carefree like Luffy, even Issei has a perverted personality that makes him stand out from the rest (translator)

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La_o_n_u
1 years ago
Posted

muy buena historia la personalidad del mc me encanta, la interacción con los personajes es entretenida y la redacción es muy buena (traductor)