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Should extend the [U] in Sakura, instead of the [K], and the [A] in chan, not the [N]. Just wouldn't sound right.

Rock Lee paused spotting beautiful pink hair and vibrant emerald-like eyes, the prettiest he had ever seen, even prettier than his bodysuit! "SAKKKKKKKKKKKURAAAAAAAAA-CHANNNNNNNNN!" His voice echoed out as he disappeared from the floor appearing across the entire hallway. Behind him, at the same exact time, twin sighs echoed out, even as noises of confusion echoed out from the other teams.

This Isn't Canon! (Or that time I reincarnated into an AU-Naruto)

This Isn't Canon! (Or that time I reincarnated into an AU-Naruto)

Anime & Comics · BalancedSelfInsert

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Replied to Bryan_Growl

My GOD! Do you not know how to READ!? For someone who said I "can't understand simple text interpretation," (which is untrue) you sure do create a lot of misunderstandings on your part, not actually reading and understanding what is there, and instead putting words in the others mouth. So for the last F'n time! I am not arguing with you on what is or is not guesses or opinions! Nor have I made any such claims! That is self-fabricated nonsense on your side! Just how many times do I have to say "I didn't say" something!? Read the last sentence of my third response to you. I am well aware that what my argument is, is guess work, not an opinion, but is in the form of a theory because it actually has supportive arguments to go off of. Not an opinion because I am well aware there are unknown variables. Yours was that the dragon has infinite energy because it was made using divine ki with no supportive arguments. Doesn't matter if it was a guess or not, especially with no valid supportive arguments, doesn't change the fact that it sounded stupid. What I do care about is how half-@zzed that guess is. My point is, don't waste peoples time with that nonsense. And I'm done here, because that's all you did, waste my time with all your misunderstandings because your an idiot who can't read! And yes, your theory at the end there is stupid. And I didn't say invalid, but would be overlooked.

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*wouldn't

Goku stepped through the portal, and he began sprinting down Snake Way, a small bag of Sensu beans at his side so he would starve along the way. As he set off on his journey across Snake Way, I watched him go with a sense of pride and hope. The training he would receive from King Kai, I could only hope it would make him stronger than those Saiyans.

Saiyan Primal Ascension

Saiyan Primal Ascension

Anime & Comics · Iros

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Your mixing first and third person. Noticed earlier when you used "he" instead of "I" as well.

As I opened his eyes, he saw Goku approaching with Gohan, one of them looked curious and the other was eager to join the training. I motioned for Goku to come closer. "Goku, I have made arrangements for you to train with King Kai," I explained. "As I have already taught you everything, I know it is time for you to get taught by a new teacher. You must be ready to leave soon."

Saiyan Primal Ascension

Saiyan Primal Ascension

Anime & Comics · Iros

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*King Yemma

I turned his gaze towards Goku, who was currently helping Gine settle in and set up what seemed to be a kitchen. "I will speak with King Yama," I decided. "In the meantime, continue guiding the others in their training."

Saiyan Primal Ascension

Saiyan Primal Ascension

Anime & Comics · Iros

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Kiri, not Kumo. -A- isn't a jinchuriki.

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*Zenkai

Fasha nodded in agreement. "We got this, just need some good sparring," she said while looking beat up. Still trying to abuse our Zenki.

Saiyan Primal Ascension

Saiyan Primal Ascension

Anime & Comics · Iros

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Why all the past tense? Is Mansam dead? "Marriage was" [is], "had his moments" [has], "always did have a knack" [had], "was a good partner" [is], "He had a way of keeping me grounded" [has], "made quite the pair" [make], etc.

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Saiyan Primal Ascension

Saiyan Primal Ascension

Anime & Comics · Iros

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Replied to That1OtakuDude

Except that planet never had life to begin with...

As much as I pretend to be annoyed at her antics, I'm slowly growing fond of the time we spend here on Celvana.

Dragon Ball: Back in Black

Dragon Ball: Back in Black

Anime & Comics · OmniSpectra

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🤦🏻‍♂️ So it is a reader-insert? Okay, now your confusing me since this contradicts your first response since -You'-POV (2nd person)- is pretty much the reader-insert default standard. You know there's a tag for it, right? It's still an indication if that were the case, so kind of would be. stylistic choice? I just went up to chap4 with a [you] search and found it to not be prevalent. Are you confusing a self-insert for a reader-insert? Then again, no reincarnation/transmigration tag, so [semi self-insert OC] is more likely the case. I found only the following stuff from the beginning of chap2 to be easily misrepresented without reading thoroughly and funnily enough, nothing beyond that point came across as such. ("unlike the Staraptor you'd see in pokemon matches" - "when they attack, you can feel the pressure of every hit on your skin!" - "You need connections or money just to start off." - "After all, a single pokeball costs 200₽. And the cheapest berries will set you back for 15₽.") So yeah, sorry, my bad. The misleading synopsis totally didn't help though. People that don't like reader-inserts will skip because of it.

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Replied to BenisBoy14

Both. Though I wouldn't say it's confusion in general since I can clearly comprehend what it's read like, but the ratio of it and digging for information on if changes later on. As well as a ranting, obviously. Needed to eventually let it out lol.

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"Never 'You'-POV"? I'm sorry, if this comes off too rude, and will admit that this fanfic currently still interests me despite not reading it much yet. But it has to be said. Can you not read or remember your own story or what's in front of you for that matter? Ironic considering you're a/the author. Summary > "You are a 14 year old boy-" is not [I] (1st person). That is someone else (author/narrator) telling the reader what they are. Chapter 1, second paragraph > "Everywhere you look-" (author/narrator) telling the reader where they are looking, again, is not 1st person POV, nor can it be described as 3rd person POV. It does get to 1st person POV once it gets to "Swole Solo-POV," but doesn't last since the POV eventually ends and defaults back in chapter 2. That only leaves me to assume how often it is and isn't read like a 1st person or reader-insert. If necessary, third person would be much better, saying the name of the MC instead of [you/you're].

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