all I can say is, good concept but lackluster writing. The 'owner of a magical shop' troupe is interesting but the phrasing of the words and grammar pulls one out of the story I really like the concept so if you want me to edit some chaps for free hit me up on discord: Daoist RedSnow#2180
instead of trying to clean up this mess by yourself, why don't you just send me the draft of the current chaps in discord, I'd love to help you do the editing
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Fantasy · Bad_Totodile
no probs, I like reading this novel so Id like to help too😆
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Fantasy · Bad_Totodile
he won't struggle once I make him a hostage* sounds better no?
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Fantasy · Bad_Totodile
used spore* into his hands *plan to use it on the young master of yada yada* I dunno what you mean by that last sentence, but you can rephrase it cause it looks messy af rn
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Fantasy · Bad_Totodile
thanks for the chap
oh, the chapter is a clear improvement from the previous ones. better grammar and minimal mistakes
hit me up at Daoist RedSnow#2180 on discord
no worries , I'm just a newbie and I don't want this book to fade into obscurity like the other ones because of bad english
a very interesting novel, the concept is cliche but unique at the same time and the protagonist is quite likeable. I've noticed that you don't have an editor and the story also needs a bit of polishing so..m if you are interested hit me up, I'm a newbie at it but I can help polish some chapters for free
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