vylavy

mages???......the feeling I have now is that my little friend didn't come up when he should have, you know?

Have you ever heard that first impressions are lasting impressions? It could have been done differently without making the MC seem like a wimp.

meh for this it's a dream, MC kinda meh

improved the structure of the text very good. now just this long drama that is tiring I will stock up on some chapters when I remember this story I will read it again

Ok my friend, pass the chapters here and no one gets hurt ok?

With all due respect, paying to read a fanfic is kind of meh. If it were your original story, no doubt, but a FF? Well then, I guess you're going to stop updating this FF? It's a shame, this was one of the good ones.

This is confusing to read...it lacks correct punctuation, I don't know what is said by the characters or said in the third person.

my dear... you are in sacred territory yugioh + Jojo great responsibility you have....

meh, it feels like something is going to change but in the end it will just be the same as all the other ffs. meh

geography was murdered in this chapter....amazon in north america? kind of worrying...