Just for the first few paragraphs: Paragraph 1: “adorned with trees, statues in towers of legendary characters and other things”, the part about statues is weirdly phrased. -> “… trees, and towers with statues of legendary…” Paragraph 2: The first part about leaving for home is just cut off, and the part starting with although comes from nowhere. There is nothing in the sentence the led up to the contradictory word, “although”. Paragraph 6-8: There’s nothing indicating who is speaking, and the thoughts of Vremya barely makes sense to me. Paragraph 9: “But, I think I don’t like opera…” ->” But, I don’t think I like the opera”. Even though nobody said anything about opera, (I guess an assumption from theater). Paragraph 13: this sentence: “but in this world of swords and magic, open something similar for the amusement of the populace?”. “open something” -> “maybe they have something”.
I get that you are mexican and that your translating from spanish to english, but like do you use google translate? There are so many grammar mistakes that its hard compile them all.
«She was nodded that seisa took initiative», lol
Yo author, really enjoying the book, but there are a lot of small sentence structure mistakes. Like in the last sentence in this chapter «she was nodded». So you should probably get grammarly or sending it through some sort of text checker.😁
I mean, aang and the gang are like 4’5 to 5 feet at the start. And zuko is like 5’10
He had pale skin due to his mother not being from the water tribe. His hair was pure black, reaching just below his ears, and he was tall for his age, reaching a height of 5'7 at just 15.
The Backbender (Avatar: The Last Airbender)
Anime & Comics · Frosty_heavens1
Damn, was literally about to say that, lol.
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I Accidentally Became A Superstar
Fantasy · SandKastle
I mean, it was only described as a page in the diary. I believe the thing he meant that he didn’t know he was a part of was movie nr2 in the series.
"I didn't know there was a second part to this…"
Hollywood: Lights, Ink, Entertainment!
Movies · OrgoWriters
Field boss i guess. Isnt that the normal amount for a wannabe raid?
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Assassin at Range: The Sniper’s Lethal Power
Games · Catlove12Fish
Whaaaat da fuck…..
A giant monster appeared in the city. It was huge, as tall and wide as a house. Its skin was dark and rough, like old leather. Its eyes glowed red, bright enough to see in the dark. It walked on two skinny legs, and its arms were thin too, but long—way too long for its body. Its stomach stuck out, round and fat, jiggling as it moved. The head was big, with a wide jaw full of sharp, crooked teeth. A thick tail dragged behind it, swinging back and forth, knocking over anything in its path.
What Would You Do If An Ugly Woman Asked You To Dual Cultivate?
Eastern · Inkquill