ObstinateFalcon

ObstinateFalcon

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2021-11-16 Joint India
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ObstinateFalcon
ObstinateFalcon
1 years ago
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Though there's not a lot to go on rn, this is pretty good so far. I can say I haven't seen a starting plot like this, so I'd say it uniquely crafted as well. I like the mc, she's feisty and intelligent. What really gets my gear going, though, is the auxiliary chapter. I can tell the author put a lot of stuff into the power system and worldbuilding, so I'm really looking forward to see all that come to fruition! Overall, recommended read.

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ObstinateFalcon
ObstinateFalcon
1 years ago
Posted

There's only three chapters as of now, so there's not much to go on. Regardless, the book has potential. The story aims to have an interesting take on tech and magic, which it does quite beautifully. Though there were some minir errors here and there, it's not enough to detract the reader from the story. Overall, it seems to be a story with a great structure, and an even greater potential.

ObstinateFalcon
ObstinateFalcon
1 years ago
Posted

First and foremost, let's start off by saying there's many novel things about this...novel. It is a pirate story—something I have never come across in my many days of scrolling through Webnovel. On top of that, it's clear that the author is experienced in storytelling, and that is not only visible from the impeccable grammar and prose, but also from the way the story itself is weaved. Rarely do I ever come across a writer with such abundant(and visible) knowledge in the craft, and hence, consequently met one too many inexperienced writers on the platform. This is a breath of fresh air I did not expect when clicking to read a novel with such a small reader base. I hope the author keeps up the regular chapter releases–as is always the case–and stay true to the compass as she navigates the seas to get to the booty! Highly recommended!

ObstinateFalcon
ObstinateFalcon
1 years ago
Posted

When i first want to write, my english did cause me problems. In Soviet Russia i was strong teacher, my english i know is the best in all of Petropavlovsk. My brother, Mikhail, he say to me, "Falcon you go to America, they make you rich like czar, take many woman as lover, kill many bear". My brother, he is very wise, is greatest toymaker in all of Russia. So next day i wake up, sell my house, say goodbye to wife and children, and go to America to become millionaire. Then in America, I go to job interview and they say to me "Falcon, you are not for the job here, you are not the skills we need, your english is poor like child". I take that man and smash his table, i say "someday i will be greatest man in all of country, your children will wish me their father!". That day my anger is best of me. It is then i know i must learn better english, so i buy book "English Grammer it is for Dummies" by Mr.Woods. Now i am perfect english grammer! One day, I reading books and came across most famous writer. I read book as i stare at rain outside, where they usually keep the rain. Anyway, I now become personal editor of the world most famous author. I can now say success like borat. Thank you, very recommend.

ObstinateFalcon
ObstinateFalcon
1 years ago
Commented

Tense switch. Would be better if it went like "One could tell from his..."

ObstinateFalcon
ObstinateFalcon
1 years ago
Posted

Quite stellar. It stands out from the mainstream because it is a short story that can be read in a few minutes. That is not to say it misses out on delivering anything a good book should deliver. Wrestling with the struggles of life and growth, it shows the beautiful emotions that encompass that journey—hate, joy, regret, etc. and manages to deliver them in staccato blows. A great and long story that spans a life time, delivered in a simple and short story format.

ObstinateFalcon
ObstinateFalcon
2 years ago
Replied to izayoi_nii

He’s saying it’s nice that Gary is having a character development and has strengthened his mind after his previous encounter.

ObstinateFalcon
ObstinateFalcon
2 years ago
Replied to izayoi_nii

Mweheheh

On top of that, this would be a test to see how Charlotte and Gary performed in a stressful situation.

How A Villain Builds A Kingdom

How A Villain Builds A Kingdom

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ObstinateFalcon
ObstinateFalcon
2 years ago
Replied to izayoi_nii

Haha, correct both ways

I arrived at the outer ring to find Quinn. I knocked on the door, entering upon not getting any response, to find him sitting cross legged on the floor. I could see him grow noticeably, which was a pleasant surprise as this meant his talent was not meagre.

How A Villain Builds A Kingdom

How A Villain Builds A Kingdom

Fantasy · ObstinateFalcon

ObstinateFalcon
ObstinateFalcon
2 years ago
Replied to izayoi_nii

I haven’t decided that bit, but it might swing similarly :)

  • How A Villain Builds A Kingdom original

    How A Villain Builds A Kingdom

    Fantasy ACTION ADVENTURE R18 MAGIC DARK OVERPOWERED VILLAIN GENIUS KINGDOMBUILDING

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  • Deathly Camellia: Records Of The Corpse Artist original

    Deathly Camellia: Records Of The Corpse Artist

    Fantasy ACTION ADVENTURE R18 SYSTEM MAGIC WEAKTOSTRONG MYSTERY DARK VILLAIN CAMPUS

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    Amadeus Devereux was born into a rich and powerful household. But he did not pursue power like his brothers because of his love for art, flowers, and poetry. Until one day, a servant arrived in the garden to see Amadeus smiling as if he was looking at a flower. Only this time, Amadeus was looking at the mangled corpses of two gardeners. ————————— First Novel Alert This is a novel that I wrote because I got tired of all the tropes that had transmigration, regression, deus-ex machina, etc. where everything that makes the main character reach the top is left to luck. The action kicks off starting from chapter 8 so I hope you at least read till then! ————————— I will try to keep a release schedule of one chapter per day. But it may vary to one per two days at times.

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  • Draft1234 original

    Draft1234

    Fantasy R18 MAGIC WEAKTOSTRONG DARK VILLAIN GENIUS ANTIHERO

    Moved all the chapters to a new novel - Deathly Camellia.

    1 Chs 2 Collections