Thiago_Tonon

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2021-10-31 Joint Brazil
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Thiago_Tonon
11 days ago
Posted

A very good story, so far the creation of the character has been very clear so you can imagine the main character's face well and so far there has been good plot development and the grammar is not bad. The author and a good listener asks for feedback to always improve his writing.

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Thiago_Tonon
11 days ago
Replied to Thiago_Tonon

Plus, you can make Ragnar's kingdom create gunpowder, so your weapons will be superior to any other, since gunpowder doesn't exist in A Song of Ice and Fire.

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Thiago_Tonon
11 days ago
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This is just my thoughts not necessary to be followed, but if it gives inspiration to you.

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Thiago_Tonon
11 days ago
Replied to Illicitdrop_29

But of course Ragnar and Daenerys would need subjects, you could conquer the slave bay like in the books and series and free the slaves and when you are making the trip to the west of Westeros you could use Dorne as a point to anchor ships and resupply of supplies.

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Thiago_Tonon
12 days ago
Commented

Geoger R Martin already said that Westeros is like oversized England and Essos is like Europe and Asia, you could go to a fictional continent that looks like the Americas and land on one of the Caribbean islands that have volcanoes.

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Thiago_Tonon
4 months ago
Commented

Author, today's chapter is very good, but it just needs a correction the sound barrier is only broken once in real life anything above is supersonic and the barrier is not broken again.

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Thiago_Tonon
8 months ago
Commented

You said he wouldn't have master control anytime soon. Why did you change your mind?

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Thiago_Tonon
9 months ago
Commented

Puede que haya personajes invencibles en la historia, como Atomic Eve, ella es alguien que podría ayudar mucho en cuanto a conseguir materia prima.

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Thiago_Tonon
9 months ago
Commented

Esta versión me gustó más que la anterior, mejoró mucho el personaje de Daniel. ¿Estás pensando en el futuro del entrenamiento de Defiant en artes marciales?

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Thiago_Tonon
9 months ago
Commented

where is karin uzumaki, she appears during the 2nd stage of the chunnin test, author do you have any ideas for her