This is terrible life advice!
''Because she was thinking she's hella gorgeous. You see now?'' The fox said.
How to be a Succubus
Games · Lolth
I am speechless. Like, actually, forgetting to capitalize the first letter of your paragraphs aside, your writing is pretty good! Looking forward to future chapters!
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Uhh, magic--yeah, magic! That's what happening to you! Magic... right?
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Aeon Odyssey
Fantasy · Lenaleia
So real!
So she just has to sit there and chill whenever the system goes down? LOL
Oh? So the system reacts to her emotions. S'ppose that makes sense! She had a sense of revenge that's what got her the system, as soon as she set her goals on other things, the system disappeared for a while. Gotta stay focused girl!
[Synchronization complete.]
Aeon Odyssey
Fantasy · Lenaleia
Thank you for the chapter!
Well, that's pleasant, lol
[System offline.]
Aeon Odyssey
Fantasy · Lenaleia
"The nights on the isle could be said to be anything but silent," This could be said in a number of different ways. The clause is a little blocky, so you should try a few alternatives when writing a clause like this. You could simply say "The nights on the isle were said to be anything but silent," or you could go further and say "The nights on the isle were anything but silent". This can apply to everything whilst writing. Try making your pros less blocky to improve the flow of your paragraphs and you might even find it a little easier to write!
Thunder Empire
Fantasy · Shazorwy