The_Overthinker

This segment should have been put inbetween the fights. Having no clue as to where the MC's are is absolutely frustrating. It also would have served as an incredible contrast to the absolute helplessness of the village's situation. I am not broody or dark, but I do believe many stories lack realism and stakes. It hurt more that I had no transition from this absolute mayhem. But overall, this was really good. I hate tragedy but I love it too. 100/10

they rely more on their fruit grandmastery cuase they don't think Haki rules above all like Garp and Kaido lol

He's this strong?

People that can KILL Kaido don't appear from thin air, he's an Emperor not a Warlord lol

Same Energy

Is it only me that reads everything Senor Pink says in a Spanish-Pirate accent?

Btw, if you use the dashes, you need to have them in a set of two, otherwise it is grammarly incorrect. If you want to avoid the complicated set up and execution you can also change the world play. Instead of [Hana-no, Hina] you can say [Hana, or Hina to be more accurate, blah blah blah] This is just to help with the flow of story, you don't have to implement this but small details make all the difference.

"The food..." < "There was food...raining down from the sky!"