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please you thought person POV in these sentences because, if main character himself tell the story when he is living in that story, then the way of the story or the way of the story decrease, what I am trying to say is the interest in the story decreases that way, so you should change your pov in this kinds of situation to 3rd person pov this will make your story more interesting so try to use that

it's unbecoming of knight

this doesn't even make sense you cut the car part of a file I mean he has already cut on that hand or you cut that hand if you don't make your words so that they can make some sense then you are not doing your editing properly you are not even editing it if even if somebody tells you your mistakes

I think you are forgetting one thing he is leaving in a medieval world and they don't know anything other than using the full name of their lineage at that time like big brother not a big Bro and their house name with it if you are talking to somebody else or the most hated person so don't forget that don't make anything short in your story mom dad nobody calls them that at that

I mean your story has some uncommon common sense, small words are mistaken a lot , can i come in or can i go in you come in find the difference yourself

and tell the location of yours to your enemy by your own foolishness

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his

you should try to become like that, that's what I was saying

that the point you shouldn't kill, you should try to become

if he has suffered in the whole world heaven't even felt that thing I mean the one percent not even the one person time to say is he hasn't even experience the one percent of any normal person surface because at least he has over his head and some people still love scene that's not a suffering

his not her