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Fighting_Dreamer

male LV 4
2021-03-11 Joint Canada

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I like the concept - a modern person transmigrates to the body of Jamie Lannister right before the battle where he got defeated by Robb Stark. I like how he tried to change his situation and the results of his actions. The concept itself is not new but where the story starts for the MC is something new. But other than those two points, everything else is bad. Specifically, the writing. It feels like it's written by an AI. The names of the houses, the characters, and even the places are messed up. There are sections where it feels like I'm reading gibberish. It's like a badly google translated Chinese novel or it's like the writer wrote a plotline on an AI software but left the AI to fill in the blanks. But the AI does not have all the information about GOT or ability to write subtext and nuance that it only summarizes things. And if there is dialogue, it reads weird, it feels like the words spoken is not true to the character but more in service of the plot. ... As for the storytelling, it is the type that summarizes everything. On one hand it's not bad because it moves things along quickly but on another hand, it can be bad because it does not engages the reader - Jamie did this, this person did this, and that person did that, and so on and so forth. As I read the story, I feel like I'm just getting an overview and if the writing is not good, which is the case for this one, this style of storytelling fails. .... Overall, I give the "The Long Awaited Heir" - 2 stars Mostly because of the concept. The concept is promising but unfortunately the writing fails.

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The story started promising. The story elements are not original but it's still engaging. So after reading the first 40 chapters, I ended up searching for the Chinese novel and found it. Unfortunately, after the MC completes his plan of obtaining all the power pearls in the city and getting the OP mutated dog as his pet, everything in the story went downhill. Mostly because the author decided to pad the word count. What I mean is instead of making things simple and straightforward, he spends paragraphs and even pages talking about the thoughts of side characters and extras. A small gang acts arrogant against the MC and then MC kills them with his OP power and then those people regret their actions before they die. Such a scenario is repeated throughout the story and normally it would only take 1 page to tell it, but the author spends 4 chapters or even more where we read about the thoughts of the extras like how they think the MC is stupid, or how excited they are to have found an easy prey. As a result, the story stops any momentum. At first there is the big goal of getting strong, but now that the MC is strong, the story loses its goal. It's one scenario after another where people act arrogant against the MC, or are jealous of his power, and then the MC just waves his hand and literally burn all those enemies or those that he doesn't like into ashes. The story becomes repetitive and boring quickly. Verdict: The first 40 chapters - 3 stars The chapters from 40 onwards - 2 stars Total chapters I read - 127

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