Adeseye_Adedeji

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2020-12-28 Joint Nigeria
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Adeseye_Adedeji
2 months ago
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I'm sorry author but how hard is it to tell them that his mother was kidnapped by the pirate and clear the misconception when they already know everything about him. what secret is he keeping again? you are just creating a dumb,dumber, dumbest protagonist

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Adeseye_Adedeji
2 months ago
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The book is nice, the storyline is amazing and nice plot. Just one thing author I don't know if the protagonist has different personalities or if their is more than one protagonist, I've seen you refer to the protagonist with about 5 different names so please can you clarify that

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Adeseye_Adedeji
5 months ago
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you know the storyline is good but the storytelling is awful, describing every thought, signals, assumtption, opinion and even things that did not affect the story is a collosal waste of time. I have to wait for a whole week sometimes so i can read everything together but it sometimes turns out my wait is useless because nothing happened. what i also do not understand is how did a spoilt girl who was raised during the bronze age with no formal education become an eloquent word smith who can compete with someone from the 21th century and is so brazen and unafriaid of a seasoned war veteran come on you have to think about your character before you turn them into a superhuman. i mean Alexander the great had to be trained by one of the best philosopher to ever live for him to be what he was, so my question is who trained miss Linda to be so perfect in everything when from what you describe she is surrounded by people who are dumb even her husband who is the Scion of a ducal family is dumb, her elder sisters are dumb, but somehow she is a super genius who can control anybody with her mouth and body

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Adeseye_Adedeji
1 years ago
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Nice storyline author, but can you please be consistent with the name, you already referred to the protagonist with three different names and I'm still in chapter 3

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Adeseye_Adedeji
1 years ago
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so please author write this like a story or manga but please not like an article.

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Adeseye_Adedeji
1 years ago
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seriously!!! six chapters talking about noting. You already have a good storyline with an awesome plots, you can easily write way over a thousand chapters without including six chapters where you just described the outflow of testosterone and men flexing their muscles. I mean what is the importance of those six chapters.

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Adeseye_Adedeji
1 years ago
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Nice storyline and good character development, but the author tends to dump too much information, sometimes it's as if the author is in a world of his forgetting about his readers. For example, the author spend much a whole chapter about what some of the side characters are thinking, and spend almost another chapter about why they are thinking that way, and then spend another chapter justifying their thinking, and before you know it we are already reading three to four chapters just about one simple subject. And you don't have to describe every process involved in most production sometimes I have to check if am not reading a science textbook. it's exhausting.

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Adeseye_Adedeji
1 years ago
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Nice storyline but you jam-packed too many information at once, it's better if one situation is settled before adding and problem. For example the main character and his harem needs training, but whenever he his training another issue will show up. it makes it the story boring if he cannot even protect himself after more than 500 chapters.

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Adeseye_Adedeji
1 years ago
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Thanks will really appreciate that. Good luck.

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Adeseye_Adedeji
1 years ago
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I'm sorry author but you were gone for a long time and I was expecting to at least find about 5 or 6 chapters. I was excited because I love your book but you only dropped one chapter and it's even an error chapter that's a bit disappointing. Thanks for ruining one of my best book.