For a force sensitive person he uses the force for extremely low amounts.
Man this chapter enraged me. Why not just use the dark side of the force wasn't the MC supposed to be a grey jedi or something
Messing with the Pike Syndicate sounds like a horrible idea. Unless you have someone or something powerful backing you it sounds like a death sentence.
Wearing a mask thing sucks ass by the way
Other than grammar and the characters dialogues everything is perfect. My problem with the dialogues are that they feel a bit robotic, unnatural, but I think as you continue to write more chapters you'll improve in it.
Oh i didn't know this was a child protagonist novel sad that it is. Aldo the way write is weird author it feels like a chinese person wrote the story.
İs very good .................,.........,......................................................................................................
You are a piece of shit for stealing other peoples hard work
Dude this is Path of Ruin its author is Rictus. You din't write this you stole it ....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
How is a no-name sith player going to win against us when our MC was one of the first force sensitive players. It's pure nonsense
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